Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides a good overview of the weather throughout the year, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating words like 'and' and try to use linking words to make your answer flow better. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary to describe the seasons.

예시: I live in Kabul, where the weather varies throughout the year. In spring, it's pleasantly warm; summer brings intense heat, while autumn is quite cool. Winters are snowy and very cold.

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and could be more natural. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I prefer cold weather' twice. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and include more specific reasons or examples.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I find it more comfortable for my daily activities. Hot weather often makes me feel tired and lethargic, so I enjoy the freshness that cold weather brings.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to structure your sentences more clearly and avoid redundancy. Also, explain what kind of issues dry weather can cause to make your answer more specific.

예시: I prefer wet weather because it is beneficial for the skin and makes outdoor activities more enjoyable. On the other hand, dry weather can cause problems like dry skin and discomfort.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repeating 'every day' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more concise.

예시: Yes, I check the weather forecast daily using my smartphone. It's important for me to plan my work and daily activities, so I always like to know what the weather will be like the next day.

제안: Your answer is quite general and could be improved by providing more specific details and examples. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Climate change has caused temperatures in my city to rise steadily over the years. This increase in heat has disrupted my daily routine and made working outdoors more challenging.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrasing and repetition. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your sentences. Also, avoid repeating words like 'like' and 'temperature'.

예시: I live in Kabul, where the weather is quite hot. I would like to visit cities with milder climates, as I prefer cooler temperatures and more comfortable weather conditions.

× Currently I'm living in Kabul and the weather here for the year it's changeable.

✓ Currently I live in Kabul and the weather here throughout the year is changeable.

The present continuous 'I'm living' is less appropriate for a permanent situation; the simple present 'I live' is better. Also, 'for the year' is awkward; 'throughout the year' is clearer. The phrase 'it's changeable' is correct but should be linked properly with the subject 'the weather'.

× In spring it's warm, in summer it's really hot and and fall it's a little cold, but in winter it's snowy and really cold.

✓ In spring it's warm, in summer it's really hot, and in fall it's a little cold, but in winter it's snowy and really cold.

Missing 'in' before 'fall' causes awkwardness; adding 'in' maintains parallel structure. Also, remove the repeated 'and' for clarity.

× In hot weather, I feel myself tired and bored.

✓ In hot weather, I feel tired and bored.

'Feel' as a linking verb does not require a reflexive pronoun like 'myself'. The correct form is simply 'I feel tired and bored'.

× Therefore I prefer cold weather for myself.

✓ Therefore I prefer cold weather.

'For myself' is unnecessary and awkward here; 'I prefer cold weather' is sufficient and natural.

× Actually I prefer wet weather to dry weather because with weather is really good for skin and for outdoor activities and dry weather can cause can issues.

✓ Actually, I prefer wet weather to dry weather because wet weather is really good for the skin and for outdoor activities, and dry weather can cause some issues.

The sentence has missing subject 'wet weather' after 'because', repeated 'can', and missing quantifier 'some'. Adding commas improves readability.

× Yeah, I am one of those people who check whether every day.

✓ Yeah, I am one of those people who check the weather every day.

'Whether' is incorrect; the correct word is 'weather'. This is a common homophone error.

× I use my smartphone every day to check the weather forecast in my city because it's so important for me, for my job, for my daily activities and I therefore I want to know how is the weather of tomorrow?

✓ I use my smartphone every day to check the weather forecast in my city because it's very important for me, for my job, and for my daily activities. Therefore, I want to know what the weather will be like tomorrow.

The sentence is run-on and awkward. 'I therefore I want' is incorrect; 'Therefore, I want' is correct. The question 'how is the weather of tomorrow?' is incorrect; it should be a statement 'what the weather will be like tomorrow.' Also, added commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× First, the weather is going to be very hot year by year.

✓ First, the weather is getting hotter year by year.

'Is going to be very hot year by year' is awkward; 'is getting hotter year by year' is a more natural way to express gradual change over time.

× Secondly, it affects my daily activities and my work in my city.

✓ Secondly, it affects my daily activities and my work in my city.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Currently I'm living in Kabul in the weather.

✓ Currently, I live in Kabul.

'In the weather' is incorrect and unnecessary here. Also, 'I'm living' should be 'I live' for a permanent situation.

× Temperature here is really hot and I want to visit those places where the temperature is not so high like like my place.

✓ The temperature here is really high and I want to visit places where the temperature is not as high as in my place.

'Temperature' needs the definite article 'The'. 'Hot' is better replaced with 'high' when referring to temperature. 'Like like' is repeated and incorrect; 'as high as in' is the correct comparative structure.

× Therefore I want to visit more places with best weather and low temperature.

✓ Therefore, I want to visit more places with better weather and lower temperatures.

'Best' is superlative and requires comparison context; 'better' is appropriate here. 'Low temperature' should be plural 'lower temperatures' to match 'places'. Added comma after 'Therefore' for clarity.