Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'a lot of rings in summer'. Try to be more precise and natural in your description. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: The weather in my city is generally mild and comfortable because it is near the sea. This coastal location helps keep temperatures moderate during summer, preventing it from becoming too hot. However, we often experience typhoons in the summer due to the sea's influence, which can be quite disruptive.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas ('feel very comfortable and feel ease'). Also, use linking words to connect your reasons and plans clearly.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I find high temperatures uncomfortable, especially in summer when I don't have air conditioning. Therefore, I enjoy visiting the northern parts of my country where the climate is cooler and more pleasant.

제안: Your answer is somewhat vague and includes informal phrases like 'you know'. Try to be more direct and specific. Also, avoid filler phrases such as 'it's hard to describe'. Use linking words to explain your preferences clearly.

예시: I prefer dry weather because heavy rain in my city often makes me feel gloomy. When it rains a lot, I usually want to travel to drier places to avoid the damp and humid air.

제안: There are several errors and awkward phrases such as 'climate tractor' and 'sun protect sunglasses'. Make sure to use correct vocabulary like 'weather forecast' and 'sunglasses'. Also, avoid repetition and be concise. Use linking words to explain your routine clearly.

예시: Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning to decide if I need to bring an umbrella or wear sunglasses to protect my eyes from the sun. This has become a daily habit for me.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more structured. Avoid vague phrases like 'the effect is quite obvious'. Use linking words to organise your points logically and provide specific examples.

예시: I believe the effects of climate change are clear. For example, my city has experienced more frequent and severe typhoons this year compared to previous decades, which has caused significant disruption to daily life.

제안: Your answer contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing such as 'kind of different climate in my from my city'. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific details.

예시: I would definitely like to visit cities with different climates from mine because I believe the weather influences how a city is planned and can affect the personalities of the local people.

× It's near the sea, so we have a lot of rings in summer so that we won't feel excessively hot.

✓ It's near the sea, so we have a lot of winds in summer so that we won't feel excessively hot.

The word 'rings' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'winds' to describe air movement. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it improves sentence clarity.

× But I feel very comfortable and feel ease in cold places and so I want to travel to the northern of our country to enjoy.

✓ But I feel very comfortable and at ease in cold places, so I want to travel to the north of our country to enjoy it.

The phrase 'feel ease' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'feel at ease'. Also, 'the northern' should be 'the north' when referring to a region. Prepositions and noun forms must be used correctly for natural English.

× I love the dry weather, you know when it rains a lot in my city I feel very upset and want to do something else like travel to dry places to escape the wet moisture air.

✓ I love dry weather; you know, when it rains a lot in my city, I feel very upset and want to do something else like travel to dry places to escape the wet, moist air.

The phrase 'wet moisture air' is redundant and awkward. 'Wet, moist air' or simply 'humid air' is better. Also, punctuation is needed to separate clauses for clarity.

× Of course, I checked the climate tractor every morning in order to choose whether I need to bring an umbrella or bring a sun protect sunglasses to protect protect my eyes.

✓ Of course, I check the climate tracker every morning in order to decide whether I need to bring an umbrella or sun-protective sunglasses to protect my eyes.

The verb 'checked' is past tense but the context implies a habitual action, so present tense 'check' is correct. Also, 'climate tractor' is likely a mishearing of 'climate tracker'. 'Sun protect sunglasses' should be 'sun-protective sunglasses'. Repetition of 'protect' is an error.

× We have seen more typhoons in the city in this year more than compared with the past decades.

✓ We have seen more typhoons in the city this year compared to past decades.

The phrase 'in this year' is incorrect; 'this year' is sufficient. 'More than compared with' is redundant; 'compared to' or 'than' should be used alone. Present perfect tense is appropriate here.

× I definitely want to visit other cities with kind of different climate in my from my city because I think the weather also shape how the city is organized and also have an impact on people's characteristic or personalities in their in their local.

✓ I definitely want to visit other cities with a kind of different climate from my city because I think the weather also shapes how the city is organized and has an impact on people's characteristics or personalities in their locality.

The phrase 'in my from my city' is incorrect; it should be 'from my city'. 'Kind of different climate' needs an article: 'a kind of different climate'. Subject-verb agreement errors: 'weather also shape' should be 'weather also shapes'; 'also have' should be 'also has'. 'Characteristic' should be plural 'characteristics'. 'In their in their local' is incorrect; 'in their locality' is correct.