Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は内容がやや冗長で文法的な誤りもあります。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、具体的な例を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: The weather in Japan is usually mild, but recently it has become more extreme due to global warming. For example, summers are hotter and winters are colder than they were ten years ago.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で誤った表現が多いです。具体的な活動を正しく表現し、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。

예시: I prefer hot weather because I grew up in a warm area. In summer, I enjoy going to the ocean to swim and relax.

제안: 理由は明確ですが、同じ表現の繰り返しを避け、より自然な言い回しを使うと良いです。

예시: I prefer dry weather because the humidity in Japan makes me feel tired, especially after work during the hot summer.

제안: 回答は良いですが、文法の誤りを直し、より流暢に話す練習をしましょう。

예시: I check the weather forecast every morning to decide what clothes to wear. Also, I am interested in environmental issues like climate change.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが多いです。具体的な影響を挙げ、文を簡潔にまとめる練習が必要です。

예시: Climate change caused by greenhouse gases like carbon dioxide has increased in the last ten years. We need to work with other countries to stop it.

제안: 表現が不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。より自然な表現で具体的な理由を述べると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit places with different climates. For example, I want to travel to countries in the Southern Hemisphere because their seasons are very different from Japan's.

× In general, the weather condition of Japan is mild, but recently the condition has changed dramatically because global warming and the climate change has influenced a lot in our condition which makes it more harsh than past 10 years ago.

✓ In general, the weather conditions of Japan are mild, but recently the conditions have changed dramatically because global warming and climate change have influenced our conditions a lot, which makes it harsher than in the past 10 years.

The sentence has multiple singular/plural mismatches: 'weather condition' should be plural 'weather conditions' because it refers to general conditions; 'condition has' should be 'conditions have' to agree in number; 'the climate change has' should be 'climate change have' because 'global warming and climate change' is plural; 'more harsh' should be 'harsher' as the comparative form. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and proper pluralization.

× I prefer the hot weather because I was born in, uh, quite a warm area in Japan, so in the Midsummer I always go to the ocean at doing some snow caring and a diving cow which makes me relaxed.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I was born in, uh, quite a warm area in Japan, so in midsummer I always go to the ocean to do some snorkeling and diving, which makes me relaxed.

The phrase 'at doing some snow caring and a diving cow' is incorrect. 'At doing' should be 'to do' to express purpose. 'Snow caring' and 'a diving cow' are incorrect phrases; likely intended 'snorkeling' and 'diving'. Also, 'the Midsummer' should be 'midsummer' without 'the'. These corrections fix verb form and vocabulary errors.

× I prefer the dry weather because I don't like the moisture of Japan's weather condition because it makes me exhausted, especially after finishing my work in Midsummer.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I don't like the moisture in Japan's weather conditions as it makes me exhausted, especially after finishing my work in midsummer.

The preposition 'of' in 'moisture of Japan's weather condition' is better replaced with 'in' to indicate the moisture present within the weather. Also, 'the dry weather' should be 'dry weather' for general preference. 'Midsummer' should be lowercase. These changes improve natural prepositional usage.

× I always check weather forecasts in every morning because I can choose suitable items and clothes to go out by checking that, and I'm interested in environmental issues such as climate change.

✓ I always check the weather forecast every morning because I can choose suitable items and clothes to go out by checking it, and I'm interested in environmental issues such as climate change.

'In every morning' is incorrect; it should be 'every morning' without 'in'. 'Weather forecasts' is better as singular 'weather forecast' when referring to the general forecast checked daily. 'By checking that' is better as 'by checking it' referring to the forecast. These corrections improve quantifier and pronoun usage.

× It seems that the effect of climate change made by greenhouse gases such as carbon dioxide has quite a big compared to over the past 10 years ago, and we have to stop it and cooperate with other countries.

✓ It seems that the effect of climate change caused by greenhouse gases such as carbon dioxide has been quite big compared to over the past 10 years, and we have to stop it and cooperate with other countries.

'Has quite a big' is incomplete; it should be 'has been quite big' to form a correct predicate. 'Made by' is better as 'caused by' for climate change. 'Compared to over the past 10 years ago' is redundant; 'over the past 10 years' suffices. These corrections fix quantifier and tense usage.

× Yes, I want to get different area from Japan in aspect of the weather condition. For example, I want to go to the nations in South hemisphere because the season is dramatically different.

✓ Yes, I want to experience a different area from Japan in terms of the weather conditions. For example, I want to go to countries in the Southern Hemisphere because the seasons are dramatically different.

'Get different area from Japan in aspect of the weather condition' is incorrect. 'Get' should be 'experience' or 'visit'; 'different area' should be 'a different area'; 'in aspect of' should be 'in terms of'. 'Nations in South hemisphere' should be 'countries in the Southern Hemisphere'. 'Season is' should be 'seasons are' for plural. These corrections improve preposition and quantifier usage.