Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid vague phrases like 'something it's too cold' and try to use linking words to improve coherence. For example, you can say, 'The weather in my city is quite unpredictable because the climate changes drastically; sometimes it is very hot, and at other times, it becomes quite cold.'

예시: The weather in my city is quite unpredictable because the climate changes drastically; sometimes it is very hot, and at other times, it becomes quite cold.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Start with a direct response, then explain with linking words. Also, avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, say, 'I prefer cold weather because it allows me to plan my daily routine without any restrictions. However, hot weather causes skin rashes and allergies, which makes it uncomfortable for me to go outside.'

예시: I prefer cold weather because it allows me to plan my daily routine without any restrictions. However, hot weather causes skin rashes and allergies, which makes it uncomfortable for me to go outside.

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive. Use linking words and more varied vocabulary to make it natural and effective. For example, 'I prefer wet weather because it feels more comfortable to me compared to dry weather.'

예시: I prefer wet weather because it feels more comfortable to me compared to dry weather.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, avoid redundancy like 'in my life.' For example, 'Yes, I often check the weather forecast on social media and websites because unpredictable weather makes it difficult to plan my day.'

예시: Yes, I often check the weather forecast on social media and websites because unpredictable weather makes it difficult to plan my day.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words and specific examples clearly. For example, 'In recent years, climate change has greatly affected human activities. For instance, heavy rains cause floods and soil erosion, which disrupt people's daily lives and plans.'

예시: In recent years, climate change has greatly affected human activities. For instance, heavy rains cause floods and soil erosion, which disrupt people's daily lives and plans.

제안: Your answer needs clearer expression and correction of errors. Avoid repetition of 'Moreover' and unclear phrases like '4 inch on the climate.' For example, 'Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. Additionally, I want to experience their cultures, traditions, and enjoy their cuisines, which I always find appealing.'

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. Additionally, I want to experience their cultures, traditions, and enjoy their cuisines, which I always find appealing.

× The weather in my city is unpredictable because there is a drastic change in the climate and sometimes it's too hot or something it's too cold.

✓ The weather in my city is unpredictable because there are drastic changes in the climate and sometimes it's too hot or sometimes it's too cold.

The phrase 'there is a drastic change' is incorrect because 'change' here is countable and plural in context. It should be 'there are drastic changes' to agree in number with the plural subject. Also, 'or something it's too cold' is unclear and should be 'or sometimes it's too cold' for clarity and correctness.

× When it is cold weather I am so happy so I can plan my daily life routine so without any restrictions.

✓ When the weather is cold, I am very happy because I can plan my daily routine without any restrictions.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundant use of 'so'. The phrase 'cold weather' should be preceded by 'the' to specify. Also, 'daily life routine' is better expressed as 'daily routine'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper conjunction use.

× And when it is hot I cannot imagine when I'm going outside my skin is full of some rashes or skin allergy problems has been happened to me.

✓ And when it is hot, I cannot imagine going outside because my skin gets rashes or skin allergy problems have happened to me.

The sentence is run-on and unclear. 'I cannot imagine when I'm going outside' is incorrect; it should be 'I cannot imagine going outside'. Also, 'skin allergy problems has been happened' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'skin allergy problems have happened'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I often check the weather condition through the different platforms like social media or any websites because when the weather is changing unpredictably, I can't plan my day in my life.

✓ I often check the weather conditions on different platforms like social media or websites because when the weather changes unpredictably, I can't plan my day.

The phrase 'check the weather condition through the different platforms' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' for platforms. Also, 'any websites' is better as 'websites' without 'any'. 'Plan my day in my life' is redundant; 'plan my day' suffices. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use and conciseness.

× In the recent years, the climate change bring a huge change to the human activity.

✓ In recent years, climate change has brought a huge change to human activity.

'The climate change bring' is incorrect; 'climate change' is uncountable and singular, so the verb should be 'has brought' (present perfect). Also, 'the recent years' should be 'recent years' without 'the'. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and tense.

× For instance, when it's too rainy, the people cannot plan or the rain in life and they have been affected by floods or soil erosions.

✓ For instance, when it rains heavily, people cannot plan their daily lives and they are affected by floods or soil erosion.

'The people' is unnecessarily definite; 'people' is better. 'Cannot plan or the rain in life' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'cannot plan their daily lives'. 'Soil erosions' should be singular 'soil erosion'. The sentence is corrected for pronoun use and clarity.

× Yes, I would like to travel to the different cities 4 inch on the climate.

✓ Yes, I would like to travel to different cities with different climates.

'4 inch on the climate' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'with different climates'. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use and clarity.

× Moreover, I want to enjoy the our cultures and the traditions there.

✓ Moreover, I want to enjoy the cultures and traditions there.

'The our cultures' is incorrect; 'our' and 'the' should not be used together. The sentence is corrected by removing 'the' before 'our'. Also, 'our' is changed to 'the' to refer generally to cultures and traditions of those places.

× Moreover, their cuisines are always likely to for me.

✓ Moreover, I always like their cuisines.

'Their cuisines are always likely to for me' is ungrammatical and unclear. The intended meaning is probably 'I always like their cuisines'. The sentence is corrected for proper quantifier and verb use.