Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use present tense consistently and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: The weather where I live is quite varied. I live in the northern area, so it changes with the seasons. For example, during the monsoon season, there is heavy rainfall, which makes the weather quite dramatic. Overall, I really enjoy the climate here.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear preference and explain reasons with specific details. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy eating warm, comforting foods during that time. However, I also like hot weather to some extent, but I avoid going outside then because of the strong sun and ultraviolet rays.

제안: Your answer is too short and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable and allows me to do outdoor activities easily. For instance, I can go for walks or play sports without worrying about rain.

제안: Your answer has repetition and grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, mentioning frequency and reasons. Use linking words to improve flow.

예시: I usually check the weather forecast before going out, especially for special occasions. I find it the easiest way to plan my day and avoid unexpected weather changes.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a complete response with specific effects of climate change and reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: In recent years, climate change has caused severe weather events like floods and droughts. This is mainly due to increased pollution from factories and excessive use of electrical appliances by people.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain why you want to visit such places with specific reasons. Avoid unnecessary or unclear words.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit other cities with different climates. It would be interesting to experience new weather conditions and learn how people adapt to them, unlike the climate where I live.

× The weather was very clear where I live.

✓ The weather is very clear where I live.

The question asks about the current weather, so the present tense 'is' should be used instead of the past tense 'was'.

× the weather was changed according to the months

✓ the weather changes according to the months

The phrase describes a habitual action, so the present tense 'changes' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'was changed'.

× because heavy rainfall are occurred.

✓ because heavy rainfall occurs.

'Rainfall' is an uncountable noun and singular, so the singular verb 'occurs' should be used instead of the plural 'are occurred'. Also, 'occurred' is past participle and unnecessary here; simple present 'occurs' fits better.

× I prefer the cold weather because in this weather I enjoy my most favorite food and I also like hot weather.

✓ I prefer cold weather because in this weather I enjoy my most favorite food and I also like hot weather.

No tense error here, but 'the cold weather' can be simplified to 'cold weather' for naturalness. The sentence is acceptable otherwise.

× But in the hot weather I did not go to the outside area because of the sun, ultraviolet, sun rays and I.

✓ But in hot weather I do not go outside because of the sun, ultraviolet rays, and sun rays.

The pronoun 'I' at the end is incorrect and unnecessary. Also, 'did not go' should be present tense 'do not go' to match the habitual action. 'Outside area' is better expressed as 'outside'. 'Ultraviolet' should be 'ultraviolet rays' for clarity.

× I prefer the dry weather because it was the perfect to enjoying the weather and in this we do all things.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it is perfect for enjoying the weather and we can do all things in it.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Was' should be 'is' to express a general truth. 'To enjoying' is incorrect; it should be 'for enjoying'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Well, I prefer to check the weather forecast whenever I when I whenever I go outside for the special occasions and I found it is the most easiest way to check the weather.

✓ Well, I prefer to check the weather forecast whenever I go outside for special occasions, and I find it is the easiest way to check the weather.

The phrase 'whenever I when I whenever I' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'whenever I'. 'Found' should be present tense 'find' to match the habitual action. 'Most easiest' is redundant; 'easiest' alone suffices.

× In this in the recent years, the effect of climate change was very harsh and very disappointing because mostly people use their own. Appliances and there are also so many factories which.

✓ In recent years, the effects of climate change have been very harsh and very disappointing because most people use their own appliances, and there are also many factories which...

'Was' should be present perfect 'have been' to indicate ongoing effects. 'Effect' should be plural 'effects' as multiple impacts are implied. 'Mostly' should be 'most'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar.

× Yes, if I have an opportunity, then I definitely visit other country, other cities, they which they have different climates from where I live and I found very interesting for me because where I live it was also Patanikal.

✓ Yes, if I have an opportunity, then I will definitely visit other countries and cities which have different climates from where I live, and I will find it very interesting because where I live it is also tropical.

The future action requires 'will' before 'definitely visit' and 'will find'. 'Other country' should be plural 'other countries'. 'They which they' is incorrect; 'which' suffices. 'Patanikal' seems a misspelling of 'tropical'. Present tense 'is' is used for current climate.