Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly addressing the question. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I live in a plain area in South Korea where summers are usually hot and winters are quite cold. The weather changes distinctly with the seasons, making it easy to enjoy different activities throughout the year.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases and focus on giving a clear preference with reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain your choice effectively.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I find it more comfortable and refreshing. Unlike hot weather, cold weather allows me to enjoy outdoor activities without feeling exhausted.

제안: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately to make your answer coherent and specific.

예시: I usually prefer wet weather because I enjoy the rainy season. It creates a cozy atmosphere where I can spend quality time with my family, both indoors and outdoors.

제안: Focus on clarity and avoid unnecessary repetition. Provide specific details about when and why you check the weather forecast, using linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I regularly check the weather forecast because I come from a farming family. Knowing the weather helps me and my family plan our activities and protect our crops effectively.

제안: Try to organize your answer with clear points and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to add specific effects of climate change.

예시: Climate change has caused more frequent heat waves and unpredictable weather patterns. For example, it negatively affects agriculture by damaging crops, which impacts food supply and farmers' livelihoods.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence flow. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific examples.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I enjoy adventures. For example, I want to visit Kashmir since its cooler climate is very different from where I live.

× As I live in a plain area and in my area there is like quite in summer there is hot weather and you hot weather and you and usually in South Korea in winters there is a cold weather and.

✓ As I live in a plain area, in my area, it is quite hot in summer, and usually in South Korea, winters are cold.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'there is' with uncountable nouns like 'hot weather' and 'cold weather'. In English, we say 'it is hot' or 'winters are cold' instead of 'there is hot weather'. Also, the sentence was fragmented and repetitive. The correction uses 'it is' for weather conditions and plural form 'winters are cold' to express the idea properly.

× As I said earlier, I live in a plain area and usually in summer there is a usually in summer there is a hot a hot hot weather. But but I prefer but I prefer cold cold weather as because I love that weather and I I will prefer the cold weather rather than the hot weather.

✓ As I said earlier, I live in a plain area and usually in summer it is hot. But I prefer cold weather because I love that weather, and I prefer cold weather rather than hot weather.

The phrase 'there is a hot weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Instead, use 'it is hot' to describe the weather. Also, repeated words and unnecessary articles were removed for clarity and correctness.

× I usually prefer wet weather as because I love rainy season very much because in overca overcast conditions we can enjoy enjoy our enjoy a time with our family and we can also go outside and enjoy the rainy season with our family. So usually I like wet weather rather than the dry weather.

✓ I usually prefer wet weather because I love the rainy season very much. During overcast conditions, we can enjoy time with our family and also go outside to enjoy the rainy season. So usually, I like wet weather rather than dry weather.

The phrase 'in overca overcast conditions' is incorrect; it should be 'during overcast conditions' as 'during' is the correct preposition for time periods or conditions. Also, 'the rainy season' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific season. Repetitions were removed for clarity.

× Hmm I personally had a very much habit of checking the weather forecast as because I belong from a farmer from a background and my father was also BA farm my farmer. My father was also a farmer so I usually check with the weather because of the crops we have shown a shown Earl earlier this few months ago. So I usually check the weather forecast.

✓ Hmm, I personally have a strong habit of checking the weather forecast because I come from a farming background and my father was also a farmer. I usually check the weather because of the crops, as I mentioned a few months ago. So, I usually check the weather forecast.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and articles, such as 'belong from a farmer from a background' which should be 'come from a farming background'. Also, 'check with the weather' is incorrect; it should be 'check the weather'. The sentence was fragmented and unclear, so it was restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× There are many effects of climate change in the recent years. As you can see as we all know that in the recent years climate change has effect in many ways like it it the heat wave also running more and it also affects the crops and also affect the agriculture. So I think it it affects us in many way.

✓ There have been many effects of climate change in recent years. As we all know, climate change has affected many things, such as increasing heat waves. It also affects crops and agriculture. So, I think it affects us in many ways.

The phrase 'there are many effects in the recent years' is better expressed as 'there have been many effects in recent years' to indicate ongoing impact. Also, 'climate change has effect' should be 'has affected'. The plural 'ways' is needed instead of 'way'. The sentence was corrected for proper verb tense and agreement.

× Yes, I want to visit to other cities which have a different climate because as I love to do adventures and I also want to to go to many other places that which have different which have a different climate. Like I want to visit Kashmir because it it has a it has a different temperature and climate from my state.

✓ Yes, I want to visit other cities which have a different climate because I love adventures and I also want to go to many other places that have different climates. For example, I want to visit Kashmir because it has a different temperature and climate from my state.

The phrase 'want to visit to other cities' is incorrect; 'visit' does not require 'to' after it. Also, 'places that which have different which have a different climate' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'places that have different climates'. The sentence was simplified and corrected for proper preposition and pronoun use.