Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'hot' multiple times, summarise the weather clearly in one or two sentences.

예시: The weather where I live in the middle of Sindh is generally very warm, with hot temperatures persisting through the evening and night.

제안: Avoid repetition and hesitations. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by a reason. For example, state your preference first, then explain why.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I live in a city that is hot all year round, so cooler temperatures would be more comfortable for me.

제안: Try to use clearer and more precise vocabulary. Also, organise your reasons logically and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer dry weather because wet conditions make my skin oily and can damage fruits and crops. Therefore, dry weather suits me better.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using correct tenses and linking words. Also, clarify how often you check the forecast and why.

예시: Yes, I regularly check the weather forecast because it is usually hot where I live, and I hope for rain. I check it daily to stay updated.

제안: Provide a clearer and more structured answer with specific details and avoid hesitations. Use linking words to compare past and present conditions.

예시: In recent years, climate change has caused temperatures to rise significantly. Compared to ten years ago, my country experiences much hotter days and nights now.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea and use more natural expressions. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail using linking words.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit northern areas because they have a cooler climate compared to my hot city, which would be a refreshing change.

× It's very warm here because it's located in middle of the Sindh.

✓ It's very warm here because it's located in the middle of Sindh.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'middle' to specify the particular area. Also, 'Sindh' as a proper noun does not need 'the' before it.

× It's quite hot at evening and also hot at night as well.

✓ It's quite hot in the evening and also hot at night as well.

The correct preposition to use with 'evening' is 'in', not 'at'. 'At' is used for specific times, while 'in' is used for parts of the day.

× So it's overall hot weather where I live.

✓ So it's overall hot weather where I live.

No correction needed here as 'overall hot weather' is acceptable without an article.

× I do prefer cold weather because I'm living in a city that is hot in all 12 months.

✓ I do prefer cold weather because I live in a city that is hot all 12 months.

The present simple tense 'I live' is more appropriate here to express a habitual fact rather than the present continuous 'I'm living'.

× So I prefer living in cold because I love, because I love sorry, because I love cold weather instead of hot weather.

✓ So I prefer living in the cold because I love cold weather instead of hot weather.

The sentence is repetitive and the phrase 'because I love' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, 'in cold' should be 'in the cold' to refer to cold weather generally.

× Umm I prefer dry weather because the wet weather is not my type, it's not suitable for my skin as well because it gets my skin oily some and wet weather destroy or our fruits and many things.

✓ Umm I prefer dry weather because wet weather is not my type; it's not suitable for my skin as it makes my skin oily, and wet weather destroys our fruits and many other things.

The sentence has pronoun misuse and awkward phrasing. 'The wet weather' should be 'wet weather' for general reference. 'It gets my skin oily some' is incorrect; 'it makes my skin oily' is correct. 'Destroy or our fruits' should be 'destroys our fruits' with correct verb agreement and pronoun use.

× Yes, I have a habit for checking weather because where I live it's hot all the time.

✓ Yes, I have a habit of checking the weather because where I live it's hot all the time.

The correct preposition after 'habit' is 'of', not 'for'. Also, 'checking weather' should be 'checking the weather'.

× So I was looking and were looking for a forecast because I want to rain in my city that's why I keep checking my weather forecast.

✓ So I was looking and looking for a forecast because I want it to rain in my city; that's why I keep checking my weather forecast.

The phrase 'were looking' is incorrect here; it should be 'looking'. Also, 'I want to rain' is incorrect; it should be 'I want it to rain'. The sentence is also better split for clarity.

× If we look 10 years back, there is no ratio of such hotness in the country.

✓ If we look 10 years back, there was no level of such hotness in the country.

The tense should be past 'was' to match '10 years back'. Also, 'ratio of such hotness' is awkward; 'level of such hotness' is more natural.

× Where do I live? So it's quite hot in the day and the night as well.

✓ Where I live, it's quite hot during the day and at night as well.

'Where do I live?' is a question and inappropriate here; it should be 'Where I live'. Also, 'in the day and the night' is better expressed as 'during the day and at night'.

× From where you live? Yes, I do like to visit northern areas because I live in a city that is full of hotness.

✓ From where I live? Yes, I would like to visit the northern areas because I live in a city that is very hot.

'From where you live?' is incorrect; it should be 'From where I live?'. Also, 'full of hotness' is unnatural; 'very hot' is better. 'I do like' can be softened to 'I would like' for politeness.

× So I would like to visit northern areas because they are cold as compared to my city.

✓ So I would like to visit the northern areas because they are colder compared to my city.

The comparative form 'colder' is needed to compare temperatures. Also, 'as compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' suffices.