Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has good content but contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clear and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, keep your answer concise within 4-5 sentences.

예시: The weather where I live is usually calm and beautiful. I especially enjoy the rainy season because it gives me a soothing feeling. Overall, I find the climate very pleasant and refreshing.

제안: Your answer shows your preference clearly but has many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' properly to make your answer coherent. Also, complete your thoughts fully.

예시: I definitely prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing my winter clothes. Moreover, during hot sunny days, the heat is unbearable, and I cannot spend time outside with my family and friends. However, in cold weather, I can enjoy outdoor activities comfortably.

제안: Your answer conveys your preference but has some repetition and unclear phrasing. Try to avoid repeating words and make your sentences complete and clear. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons logically.

예시: I prefer dry weather because when it rains, I often get wet and ruin my clothes. In dry weather, I can enjoy many outdoor activities without any problems.

제안: Your answer is informative but a bit long and repetitive. Try to make your sentences concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your points clearly.

예시: I often check the weather forecast on my mobile phone because it is very convenient. Before going outside, I check it to know if I need to carry an umbrella or not.

제안: Your answer addresses the topic but has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Avoid repeating words and use correct verb forms. Try to explain your ideas clearly and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to show cause and effect.

예시: Due to global warming, temperatures have increased significantly in recent years. This rising heat is a serious issue because it affects the environment and people's lives.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to avoid repeating phrases and complete your sentences fully. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent and logical.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I enjoy travelling and experiencing new weather conditions. It is exciting to explore various regions and enjoy their unique climates during different seasons.

× The the place I live is the weather is very beautiful and calm.

✓ The place where I live has very beautiful and calm weather.

The original sentence has redundancy and incorrect sentence structure. 'The the place I live is the weather is' is confusing and grammatically incorrect. The correction clarifies the subject and predicate properly.

× Moreover, it is very rainy outside and I love the rainy weather the most because it it gives me a soothing vibe.

✓ Moreover, it is very rainy outside and I love the rainy weather the most because it gives me a soothing vibe.

The repetition of 'it' is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'it' corrects the sentence.

× Well, definitely I prefer to prefer the cold weather the most because in cold season I love I have I can get a chance to wear my winter clothes.

✓ Well, definitely I prefer the cold weather the most because in the cold season I get a chance to wear my winter clothes.

The original sentence has redundant phrases and incorrect pronoun usage. 'I love I have I can get' is confusing and incorrect. The correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence.

× Moreover, the In sunny days, the scorching heat is very irresistible as I cannot go outside to spend time with my family and friends.

✓ Moreover, on sunny days, the scorching heat is very intense, so I cannot go outside to spend time with my family and friends.

The phrase 'the In sunny days' is incorrect. 'On sunny days' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'irresistible' is not appropriate to describe heat; 'intense' or 'unbearable' fits better.

× But however, in cold weather I can enjoy the.

✓ However, in cold weather, I can enjoy myself.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses redundant conjunctions 'But however'. The correction removes redundancy and completes the sentence.

× Well, definitely I would prefer to go outside in a dry weather because in a rainy weather I can easily get wet, wet and my and I can ruin my clothes, which I don't prefer as in dry weather we we can do a lot of, we can enjoy a lot of outdoor activities.

✓ Well, definitely I would prefer to go outside in dry weather because in rainy weather I can easily get wet and ruin my clothes, which I don't prefer. In dry weather, we can enjoy a lot of outdoor activities.

The use of 'a' before uncountable nouns 'weather' is incorrect. Also, the sentence has repetitions and is run-on. The correction removes articles before uncountable nouns and breaks the sentence into clearer parts.

× As it is very way more convenient to check the weather as it is pre installed in our mobile phone apps and we can easily check the weather app within just one click.

✓ It is much more convenient to check the weather because it is pre-installed in our mobile phone apps, and we can easily check the weather app with just one click.

The phrase 'very way more' is incorrect; 'much more' is appropriate. Also, 'pre installed' should be hyphenated as 'pre-installed'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× And I often use it in my day because whenever I go outside, I have a habit to check it and it is very easy for me to predict the weather outside so that I can carry an umbrella before going outside.

✓ I often use it during the day because whenever I go outside, I have a habit of checking it. It is very easy for me to predict the weather so that I can carry an umbrella before going out.

The original sentence is long and awkward. 'In my day' is incorrect; 'during the day' is better. 'Have a habit to check' should be 'have a habit of checking'. The sentence is split for clarity.

× Well, due to the global warming, the the temperature has rise by a lot of huge number of percentage.

✓ Well, due to global warming, the temperature has risen by a huge percentage.

The verb 'rise' in present tense is incorrect here; the past participle 'risen' is needed with 'has'. Also, 'a lot of huge number of percentage' is awkward; 'a huge percentage' is clearer.

× But in recent times the the heat, the heatiness of the environment is growing day by day.

✓ But in recent times, the heat of the environment is increasing day by day.

'Heatiness' is not a standard English word; 'heat' or 'temperature' is appropriate. 'Growing' is better replaced with 'increasing' when referring to heat.

× So it which is a very serious issue.

✓ So, it is a very serious issue.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains unnecessary words. The correction completes the sentence properly.

× Yes, as I am a travel enthusiast and I love to explore different countries and to experience that climatic condition of their own places because I think it is a very fun activity to explore the different regions so that I can have an experience of it.

✓ Yes, I am a travel enthusiast and love to explore different countries to experience their unique climates because I think it is a very fun activity to explore different regions and gain new experiences.

The original sentence is long, repetitive, and awkwardly phrased. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning.

× And moreover, in winter, in winter and summer seasons, the climate is very good. So I can definitely go outside to.

✓ Moreover, in both winter and summer seasons, the climate is very good, so I can definitely go outside.

The original sentence repeats 'in winter' and ends abruptly. The correction removes repetition and completes the sentence.