Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides some information but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. For example, specify the seasons clearly and describe the weather with appropriate vocabulary.

예시: I live on the island of Taiwan, which is surrounded by the ocean. During the summer, the weather is very hot, with temperatures around 30 to 34 degrees Celsius. In contrast, winters are cooler, with temperatures dropping to about 6 to 10 degrees. Overall, the climate varies significantly between seasons.

제안: Your answer expresses your preference but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas logically. Also, avoid repetition and be more specific about why you prefer hot weather.

예시: I prefer hot weather because I find cold weather uncomfortable. For instance, in winter, stepping out of a warm bath into the cold air feels unpleasant. I enjoy feeling the sun on my skin, which makes me feel energized and happy.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid vague expressions like 'humanity just so high.' Instead, explain how wet weather affects you specifically.

예시: I prefer dry weather because wet weather, especially in Taiwan during winter, tends to be cold and humid. The high humidity makes me feel uncomfortable and less relaxed. On the other hand, dry weather feels more comfortable and helps me enjoy my day better.

제안: Your answer contains useful information but is somewhat disorganized and includes incomplete sentences. Try to structure your response clearly, use appropriate vocabulary, and avoid repetition. Also, explain your habits with linking words.

예시: Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning before going to school. This helps me decide whether to bring an umbrella or wear waterproof shoes if it's going to rain. Otherwise, I just wear my normal shoes.

제안: Your answer addresses the topic but lacks clarity and precise vocabulary. Try to use correct grammar and more specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid vague phrases.

예시: High carbon emissions worldwide have caused significant climate change in recent years. This has led to rising sea levels, which threaten to flood low-lying areas. Overall, these changes harm the Earth's environment and ecosystems.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and explain your reasons more clearly. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I would definitely like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I want to visit the United States because I heard the climate there is drier and hotter than in Taiwan, which I find very comfortable.

× I live in Taiwanese island, like surrounding by ocean and the weather there during the summer is super hard maybe like 30 or 34° and during the winter it's kind of different it's almost like 10 or 6° almost there.

✓ I live on the Taiwanese island, surrounded by the ocean, and the weather there during the summer is very hot, maybe around 30 or 34°, and during the winter it's kind of different, almost like 10 or 6°.

The phrase 'Taiwanese island' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific island. Also, 'surrounding by ocean' is incorrect; it should be 'surrounded by the ocean' to indicate the island is encircled by the ocean. Additionally, 'super hard' is not appropriate to describe weather; 'very hot' is better.

× I live in Taiwanese island, like surrounding by ocean and the weather there during the summer is super hard maybe like 30 or 34° and during the winter it's kind of different it's almost like 10 or 6° almost there.

✓ I live on the Taiwanese island, surrounded by the ocean, and the weather there during the summer is very hot, maybe around 30 or 34°, and during the winter it's kind of different, almost like 10 or 6°.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to an island; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'like surrounding by ocean' is incorrect; it should be 'surrounded by the ocean'.

× Yes, definitely. I would like to visit other city that have different climate from where I live.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live.

The word 'city' should be plural 'cities' because 'other' implies more than one. Similarly, 'climate' should be plural 'climates' to match 'cities'.

× Yes, definitely. I would like to visit other city that have different climate from where I live.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live.

When referring to multiple cities and climates, no definite article is needed before 'other cities' and 'different climates'.

× I really want to go to the US because I heard there the climate right there is kind of different in Taiwan, because during this there is more kind of different dry and more hot and it's very comfortable for me.

✓ I really want to go to the US because I heard the climate there is kind of different from Taiwan, because during this time it is drier and hotter, and it's very comfortable for me.

The phrase 'there the climate right there is' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'the climate there is'. Also, 'more kind of different dry and more hot' is incorrect; it should be 'drier and hotter'. The verb 'is' agrees with singular subject 'climate'.

× I really want to go to the US because I heard there the climate right there is kind of different in Taiwan, because during this there is more kind of different dry and more hot and it's very comfortable for me.

✓ I really want to go to the US because I heard the climate there is kind of different from Taiwan, because during this time it is drier and hotter, and it's very comfortable for me.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when comparing climates; the correct preposition is 'different from'. Also, 'during this' should be 'during this time' for clarity.

× So if they're really high carbon emission in a global world this recent year, there will be a lot of climate change in effect during the recent year.

✓ So if there are really high carbon emissions globally this recent year, there will be a lot of climate change effects during this year.

The phrase 'they're really high carbon emission' is incorrect; it should be 'there are really high carbon emissions'. Also, 'in a global world' is awkward; 'globally' is better. 'Climate change in effect' should be 'climate change effects'.

× So if they're really high carbon emission in a global world this recent year, there will be a lot of climate change in effect during the recent year.

✓ So if there are really high carbon emissions globally this recent year, there will be a lot of climate change effects during this year.

'Carbon emission' should be plural 'carbon emissions' because it refers to multiple emissions. Similarly, 'climate change in effect' should be 'climate change effects' to indicate multiple impacts.

× So it will not only affect the sea level or high in all the land, maybe will sink just by the rising sea and it's not good for Earth's environment.

✓ So it will not only affect the sea level but also the height of all the land, which may sink due to the rising sea, and it's not good for Earth's environment.

The phrase 'or high in all the land' is unclear; it should be 'but also the height of all the land'. 'Maybe will sink just by the rising sea' is awkward; 'which may sink due to the rising sea' is clearer.

× So I'm the person who prefer hot weather because I scared of I don't really like the cold because when you were taking a bath during the winter and we walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

✓ So I'm the person who prefers hot weather because I'm scared of the cold. I don't really like it because when you take a bath during the winter and walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

The phrase 'I scared of' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm scared of'. Also, 'who prefer' should be 'who prefers' to agree with singular subject. The pronouns 'you' and 'we' are mixed; it is better to keep consistent.

× So I'm the person who prefer hot weather because I scared of I don't really like the cold because when you were taking a bath during the winter and we walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

✓ So I'm the person who prefers hot weather because I'm scared of the cold. I don't really like it because when you take a bath during the winter and walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

The verb 'prefer' should be 'prefers' to agree with the singular subject 'person'.

× So I'm the person who prefer hot weather because I scared of I don't really like the cold because when you were taking a bath during the winter and we walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

✓ So I'm the person who prefers hot weather because I'm scared of the cold. I don't really like it because when you take a bath during the winter and walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

The phrase 'scared of I don't really like the cold' is incorrect; it should be 'scared of the cold'. Also, 'when you were taking a bath' should be 'when you take a bath' for general truth.

× So I'm the person who prefer hot weather because I scared of I don't really like the cold because when you were taking a bath during the winter and we walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

✓ So I'm the person who prefers hot weather because I'm scared of the cold. I don't really like it because when you take a bath during the winter and walk out of the bathroom, it's so cold.

The pronouns 'you' and 'we' are mixed in the same sentence, which is inconsistent. It's better to use 'you' throughout for general statements.

× I prefer dry weather because wet weather is like in Taiwan doing this winter, it's so cold and so wet, so it's the humanity just so high and you will feel unpleasant and not really like it very much.

✓ I prefer dry weather because wet weather, like in Taiwan during this winter, is so cold and so wet, so the humidity is very high and you will feel unpleasant and not really like it very much.

The phrase 'doing this winter' is incorrect; it should be 'during this winter'. Also, 'it's the humanity just so high' is incorrect; it should be 'the humidity is very high'.

× I prefer dry weather because wet weather is like in Taiwan doing this winter, it's so cold and so wet, so it's the humanity just so high and you will feel unpleasant and not really like it very much.

✓ I prefer dry weather because wet weather, like in Taiwan during this winter, is so cold and so wet, so the humidity is very high and you will feel unpleasant and not really like it very much.

The phrase 'it's the humanity just so high' misuses the definite article; it should be 'the humidity is very high'.

× Yes, I actually watch shallow weather forecast before I before every morning, especially when I try when I go into school because I need to check the weather to see if I really need to bring an umbrella or wear different shoes.

✓ Yes, I actually watch the weather forecast every morning, especially when I go to school because I need to check the weather to see if I really need to bring an umbrella or wear different shoes.

The phrase 'watch shallow weather forecast before I before every morning' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'watch the weather forecast every morning'. Also, 'go into school' should be 'go to school'.

× Yes, I actually watch shallow weather forecast before I before every morning, especially when I try when I go into school because I need to check the weather to see if I really need to bring an umbrella or wear different shoes.

✓ Yes, I actually watch the weather forecast every morning, especially when I go to school because I need to check the weather to see if I really need to bring an umbrella or wear different shoes.

The phrase 'shallow weather forecast' is incorrect; it should be 'the weather forecast' with the definite article 'the'.

× And yeah. So it's, it's a, it's a rainy day. I need to wear like waterproof shoes and if not and just wear normal shoes and.

✓ And yeah. So if it's a rainy day, I need to wear waterproof shoes, and if not, I just wear normal shoes.

The phrase 'it's, it's a, it's a rainy day' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'if it's a rainy day'. Also, 'wear like waterproof shoes' should be 'wear waterproof shoes'.