Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise by using proper sentence structure and avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about the weather.

예시: I live in Canada, where the weather is currently summer. In a few months, it becomes cold, and after that, it starts snowing. I really enjoy the summer, but during winter, I wear many jackets to keep warm.

제안: Improve your answer by organizing your ideas clearly and using linking words to connect your reasons. Also, avoid repetition and provide more specific details about why you prefer hot weather.

예시: I prefer hot weather because I come from a tropical country where it is usually warm and snow is rare. Since moving here, I find temperatures below zero very uncomfortable, so I enjoy the warmth of hot weather more.

제안: Work on completing your sentences and expressing your ideas clearly. Use linking words to explain your preferences and provide specific reasons why you prefer dry weather.

예시: I prefer dry weather because I can wear minimal clothes comfortably. In wet weather, it is difficult to keep my clothes dry, which makes me feel uncomfortable.

제안: Try to complete your sentences and organize your answer logically. Use linking words to explain the change in your habit and specify how often you check the forecast.

예시: I recently developed the habit of checking the weather forecast. Back in my country, I rarely checked it, but since moving here, I check the forecast before leaving the house and several times during the day to prepare for the cold and wind.

제안: Complete your sentences and provide specific examples to support your opinion. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and explain clearly how climate change has affected the seasons.

예시: I believe climate change is real because the seasons have changed. When I was a child, the rainy and summer seasons were more predictable, but recently, the weather patterns have become irregular.

제안: Improve your answer by organizing your ideas clearly and using linking words to connect your experiences. Provide more specific details about the climates you have experienced and why you liked them.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I lived in the south of India where it was mostly hot, but I traveled to the north where it snows. I enjoyed experiencing the cold weather, which is one reason I like living in Canada.

× I live in Canada, presently it is summer and in few months it starts being cold from there on in another two months it starts snowing and I love this summer with her and while winter I use a lot of jackets and things to cover up.

✓ I live in Canada. Presently, it is summer, and in a few months it starts to get cold. From then on, in another two months, it starts snowing. I love this summer here, and during winter I use a lot of jackets and things to cover up.

The original sentence has multiple tense and structure issues. 'Starts being cold' is incorrect; the correct form is 'starts to get cold' to express the beginning of a state. Also, 'in few months' should be 'in a few months' to use the correct quantifier. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'With her' is incorrect; it should be 'here' to indicate location. 'While winter' should be 'during winter' to use the correct preposition. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I prefer hot weather because I come from a tropical country where I hardly used to see snow after coming here.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I come from a tropical country where I hardly saw snow before coming here.

The phrase 'hardly used to see snow after coming here' is incorrect because 'used to' indicates past habitual actions, but 'after coming here' refers to a time after arrival. The correct expression is 'hardly saw snow before coming here' to indicate past experience prior to arrival. This correction aligns the tense with the intended meaning.

× When that temperature goes below 0 I feel very cold and where the place I came from it was usually hot and I enjoyed.

✓ When the temperature goes below 0, I feel very cold, and where I came from, it was usually hot and I enjoyed it.

The phrase 'that temperature' is better as 'the temperature' for general reference. The clause 'where the place I came from' is awkward; it should be 'where I came from' for clarity. Also, 'I enjoyed' needs an object; adding 'it' completes the sentence. These changes improve sentence structure and clarity.

× I prefer dry weather and I like to use minimal clothes and in the wet weather it is so hard to keep your clothes dry and it it is very comfort uncomfortable for me too wearing the.

✓ I prefer dry weather and like to wear minimal clothes. In wet weather, it is very hard to keep your clothes dry, and it is very uncomfortable for me to wear them.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Use minimal clothes' should be 'wear minimal clothes' because 'wear' is the correct verb for clothing. 'In the wet weather' should be 'in wet weather' without 'the' for general statements. The phrase 'comfort uncomfortable' is incorrect; 'uncomfortable' alone suffices. The sentence is also incomplete and needs proper ending. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I recently developed the habit of checking the weather forecast back in my country I never used to check weather, but after coming here to counter the cold or the wind, I usually check weather before leaving my house and check the weather throughout the day and.

✓ I recently developed the habit of checking the weather forecast. Back in my country, I never used to check the weather, but after coming here to counter the cold and the wind, I usually check the weather before leaving my house and throughout the day.

The sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'Check weather' should be 'check the weather' to include the definite article. 'And' is better than 'or' when referring to both cold and wind. The sentence ending with 'and' is incomplete and should be finished properly. These corrections improve sentence structure and grammatical correctness.

× I think the climate change is real because now the seasons have changed.

✓ I think climate change is real because now the seasons have changed.

'The climate change' is incorrect because 'climate change' is an uncountable noun and does not require 'the' unless specifying a particular instance. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I feel usually when I was a child there was a proper season or the time where it used to rain and the summer had a proper time.

✓ I usually feel that when I was a child, there were proper seasons or times when it used to rain, and summer had a proper duration.

The sentence has awkward word order and tense issues. 'I feel usually' should be 'I usually feel that' for correct adverb placement. 'There was a proper season or the time where it used to rain' should be 'there were proper seasons or times when it used to rain' to match plural 'seasons' and use correct relative pronoun 'when'. 'Summer had a proper time' is vague; 'summer had a proper duration' is clearer. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× But recently I see the weather has.

✓ But recently, I see that the weather has changed.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or complement after 'has'. Adding 'changed' completes the sentence and conveys the intended meaning. Including 'that' improves sentence flow.

× Yes, I'd like to see the cities with different climates or weather.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see cities with different climates or weather.

The phrase 'the cities' implies specific cities already known, but the context suggests any cities with different climates. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more general and appropriate.

× I live in South part of India where it was mostly summer so I went to the north part of India where it used to snow to see the weather conditions there and I loved it so I preferred Canada.

✓ I live in the southern part of India where it is mostly summer, so I went to the northern part of India where it used to snow to see the weather conditions there. I loved it, so I preferred Canada.

'South part' and 'north part' should be 'southern part' and 'northern part' to use correct adjective forms. 'Where it was mostly summer' should be 'where it is mostly summer' to reflect current habitual condition. The sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and readability.