Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response about the current weather, then add specific details using linking words like 'also' or 'however'. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors for better clarity.

예시: The weather where I live is generally sunny, but it is not too hot or rainy. Also, the air is quite cold in the mornings, afternoons, and evenings. However, when it rains, the roads often get flooded.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid minor errors like 'hot 1'. Try to explain reasons more specifically and connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer cold weather rather than hot weather because it allows me to prepare different kinds of food comfortably. Moreover, I enjoy going outside for adventurous activities like bike riding during cold days.

제안: Focus on making your sentences grammatically correct and coherent. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly. Provide specific reasons and avoid vague phrases like 'very often clearly free'.

예시: I prefer wet weather to dry weather because the roads are usually clear, and the greenery looks beautiful, which is great for photography. Also, I enjoy travelling in such weather conditions.

제안: Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about frequency. For example, say 'once a week' instead of 'for every once in a week'.

예시: I don't check the weather forecast regularly, but during the rainy season, I usually check it once a week. This helps me plan outings with my friends to enjoy beautiful places despite the rain.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence, then explain with specific examples. Avoid unclear phrases like 'one hair is getting congested'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: One major effect of climate change is increased air pollution. Many people ignore this problem, especially in cities where outdated vehicles emit a lot of smoke. As a result, the air quality worsens, causing health issues.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using smoother linking words and more natural phrasing. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas. Provide specific reasons why you want to visit those places.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because it offers a great opportunity to explore new environments. For example, I want to visit Goa, Kerala, and Tamil Nadu, where the weather is quite different from my hometown, allowing me to experience diverse cultures and nature.

× The weather is very sunny where I used to live it, not too rainy or too sunny and we get a very cold air every time morning, afternoon and evening also.

✓ The weather was very sunny where I used to live, not too rainy or too sunny, and we got very cold air every morning, afternoon, and evening.

The original sentence has sentence structure issues and tense inconsistency. 'Used to live' indicates past, so the verbs should be in past tense ('was', 'got'). Also, 'where I used to live it' is incorrect; 'it' is unnecessary. The phrase 'every time morning, afternoon and evening also' is awkward; it should be 'every morning, afternoon, and evening.' Proper commas improve clarity.

× And when it's raining the roads will be filled with water.

✓ And when it rains, the roads get filled with water.

Using 'when it's raining' is acceptable but 'when it rains' is more natural for habitual actions. Also, 'will be filled' suggests future, but the context is habitual, so present simple 'get filled' is better.

× I prefer cold weather rather than the hot 1 because in cold weather we can prepare various kind of foods and we can go outside and have some adventurous activities.

✓ I prefer cold weather rather than hot weather because in cold weather we can prepare various kinds of food and go outside to have some adventurous activities.

'Various kind of foods' is incorrect; it should be 'various kinds of food' because 'food' is uncountable and 'kinds' is plural. Also, 'the hot 1' seems to be a typo; it should be 'hot weather.' The phrase 'have some adventurous activities' is better expressed as 'go outside to have some adventurous activities.'

× In cold weather, I like to do the bike driving.

✓ In cold weather, I like to ride a bike.

'Do the bike driving' is unnatural. The correct expression is 'ride a bike.' 'Do driving' is not idiomatic in English.

× I prefer wet weather rather than the dry weather because in wet weather the roads will be very often clearly free and the greenery plants will looks very nice for the photography and also love to travel in such kind of weather conditions.

✓ I prefer wet weather rather than dry weather because in wet weather the roads are often clear and the green plants look very nice for photography. I also love to travel in such weather conditions.

'The dry weather' should be 'dry weather' without 'the' for general statements. 'Very often clearly free' is awkward; 'are often clear' is better. 'Greenery plants' is incorrect; 'green plants' is correct. 'Will looks' is subject-verb disagreement; it should be 'look.' 'For the photography' should be 'for photography.' The sentence is long and should be split for clarity.

× Not regularly, but yes in the rainy seasons. I check weather broadcast in the rainy season for every once in a week because when it's raining I want to go outside and roam with my friends in my car and enjoy the beautiful places.

✓ Not regularly, but yes during the rainy season. I check the weather forecast once a week during the rainy season because when it rains, I want to go outside and roam with my friends in my car and enjoy beautiful places.

'In the rainy seasons' should be 'during the rainy season' for correct preposition and singular form. 'Check weather broadcast' is incorrect; it should be 'check the weather forecast.' 'For every once in a week' is incorrect; 'once a week' is correct. 'When it's raining' can be 'when it rains' for habitual action. 'Enjoy the beautiful places' should be 'enjoy beautiful places' without 'the.'

× Air pollution is one of the major cause with the climate is changing, most of the people wouldn't bother about the air pollution.

✓ Air pollution is one of the major causes of climate change; most people don't bother about air pollution.

'One of the major cause' should be 'one of the major causes' because 'one of' requires plural noun. 'With the climate is changing' is incorrect; 'of climate change' is correct. 'Most of the people' is better as 'most people.' 'Wouldn't bother about' should be 'don't bother about.'

× If you consider in the cities there are lot of outdated vehicles which pollute a lot of smoke due to that one hair is getting congested.

✓ If you consider the cities, there are lots of outdated vehicles which emit a lot of smoke; due to that, the air is getting congested.

'Lot of' should be 'lots of' or 'a lot of.' 'Pollute a lot of smoke' is incorrect; vehicles emit or produce smoke. 'One hair is getting congested' is incorrect; it should be 'the air is getting congested.' 'If you consider in the cities' should be 'If you consider the cities.'

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities which are having different climates from where I live because that gives me a very great experience of exploring that place and weather conditions.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because that gives me a great experience of exploring those places and their weather conditions.

'Which are having' is better as 'that have' for defining clauses. 'A very great experience' is redundant; 'a great experience' suffices. 'That place' should be 'those places' to agree with 'other cities.' 'Weather conditions' should be 'their weather conditions' for clarity.