Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to avoid redundancy and use proper sentence structure. Also, be specific about the temperature and weather conditions. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: In my country, it usually snows during the winter, and summers are quite hot, with temperatures reaching around 30 degrees Celsius. The sun shines brightly during the summer months.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to express your preference clearly and provide reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'like wise' and be specific about what you mean by 'in the middle of this.'

예시: I prefer warm weather because cold weather limits my outdoor activities, and extremely hot weather can be uncomfortable. So, I like moderate temperatures that are neither too cold nor too hot.

제안: Good attempt to provide reasons and use linking words like 'moreover.' However, improve your grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Also, be careful with singular/plural forms and article usage.

예시: I prefer dry weather because I can go for a walk without needing an umbrella or rubber boots. Moreover, I enjoy eating ice cream, which is less enjoyable on rainy days.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing like 'I might do this one or three times a month.'

예시: I don't usually check the weather forecast regularly. Maybe I check it once or twice a month because I don't pay much attention to the weather.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically, use linking words, and provide specific effects of climate change. Also, clarify what actions you think should be taken.

예시: Climate change is mainly caused by global warming and pollution. These issues have serious effects on our environment, such as extreme weather and rising sea levels. Therefore, we need to take action to reduce pollution and protect the planet.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some errors, such as 'clients' instead of 'climates.' Use correct vocabulary and provide more details about why you want to visit these places. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates, such as Sri Lanka and the Maldives. They have a subtropical climate, which is very different from the climate in my country, and I think it would be interesting to experience that.

× In my country every winter snow is falling and every summer is hot.

✓ In my country, every winter snow falls and every summer is hot.

The noun 'snow' is uncountable and does not need 'is falling' in this context. Instead, use the simple present tense 'falls' to describe habitual actions. Also, 'every winter' and 'every summer' refer to repeated events, so simple present tense is appropriate.

× Sun is really shine and temper temperature on 30°.

✓ The sun really shines and the temperature is around 30°.

The verb 'shine' needs to be in the third person singular present tense 'shines' to agree with the subject 'sun'. Also, 'temper temperature' is incorrect; it should be 'temperature'. The phrase 'on 30°' is better expressed as 'around 30°' to indicate approximate temperature.

× I prefer warm weather because in the cold weather I can't do anything and like wise in the hot weather and I prefer in the middle of this.

✓ I prefer warm weather because in cold weather I can't do anything, and likewise in hot weather. I prefer the weather in the middle of these extremes.

The word 'like wise' should be 'likewise' as one word. The sentence structure is awkward and run-on; breaking it into two sentences improves clarity. Also, 'in the middle of this' should be 'in the middle of these extremes' to clearly express preference.

× I prefer dry weather because I can go for a walk without umbrella and rubber boots.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I can go for a walk without an umbrella and rubber boots.

The nouns 'umbrella' and 'rubber boots' require the indefinite article 'an' and 'a' respectively when singular and countable. Also, 'without umbrella and rubber boots' implies both are absent; if the meaning is to not need them, the sentence is correct with articles.

× Moreover, I like ice cream and I think I won't be able to enjoy it on rainy day.

✓ Moreover, I like ice cream and I think I won't be able to enjoy it on a rainy day.

The phrase 'rainy day' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I might do this one or three times a month because I don't really care about weather.

✓ I might do this once or three times a month because I don't really care about the weather.

The phrase 'this one' is better expressed as 'once' when referring to frequency. Also, 'weather' is a general noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the weather in a specific context.

× The climate change because of global warming, pollution and other things, it these things are more important part in our life, we need to do anything with them.

✓ Climate change is caused by global warming, pollution, and other factors. These things are an important part of our lives, and we need to do something about them.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear structure. 'The climate change because of' is incomplete; it needs a verb like 'is caused by'. 'It these things' is incorrect and should be separated into two sentences. 'More important part' should be 'an important part'. 'Do anything with them' is incorrect; 'do something about them' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different clients like Sri Lanka, Maldives.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates like Sri Lanka and the Maldives.

The word 'clients' is incorrect; the intended word is 'climates'. Also, 'Maldives' should be preceded by 'the' as it is a plural country name. The sentence needs 'and' before 'the Maldives' for correct listing.

× They have subtropical climate and it's another climate from my country.

✓ They have a subtropical climate, and it's a different climate from my country.

'Subtropical climate' is a singular countable noun and requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'another climate' is acceptable but 'a different climate' is clearer. The sentence needs a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses.