Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: သင်၏အဖြေတွင် သဒ္ဒါမှားများရှိပြီး စကားလုံးများကို ထပ်တလဲလဲ အသုံးပြုထားသည်။ သင်သည် သဘာဝနှင့် ထိရောက်သော အဖြေတစ်ခုကို ဖန်တီးရန် သဒ္ဒါမှန်ကန်မှုနှင့် စကားလုံးအသုံးပြုမှုကို တိုးတက်စေရန် လိုအပ်သည်။

예시: I live in a tropical climate where the weather is usually hot and humid. We experience heavy rains during the monsoon season, but otherwise, the weather remains fairly consistent throughout the year.

제안: သင်၏အဖြေတွင် အကြောင်းပြချက်များကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ စကားလုံးအသုံးပြုမှုကို ပိုမိုတိကျစေရန်နှင့် စကားလုံးများကို သဘာဝအတိုင်း အသုံးပြုရန် ကြိုးစားပါ။

예시: I prefer hot weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach, swimming, and having barbecues or picnics with friends and family. Also, in hot weather, clothes dry quickly, which is very convenient.

제안: သင်၏အဖြေတွင် သဒ္ဒါမှားများနှင့် စကားလုံးအသုံးပြုမှု မမှန်ကန်မှုများရှိသည်။ ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းပြီး သဘာဝအတိုင်း ပြောဆိုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။

예시: I prefer wet weather because I enjoy the fresh smell after the rain and the peaceful sound it creates. It makes the atmosphere vibrant and perfect for relaxing with a cup of coffee.

제안: သင်၏အဖြေတွင် စကားလုံးများကို မှန်ကန်စွာ အသုံးပြုရန်နှင့် စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုတိကျစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ အကြောင်းပြချက်များကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစွာ ဖော်ပြပါ။

예시: I occasionally check the weather forecast, especially when I have important plans. Usually, I go outside spontaneously and check the weather conditions myself to decide if I need to take an umbrella.

제안: သင်၏အဖြေသည် မရှင်းလင်းဘဲ အမှားများနှင့် စကားလုံးများ မမှန်ကန်စွာ အသုံးပြုထားသည်။ ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းပြီး သဘာဝအတိုင်း ပြောဆိုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။

예시: In recent years, climate change has caused serious problems such as rising sea levels that threaten coastal homes and wildlife. It has also led to more frequent heatwaves, causing health issues like heatstroke and dehydration.

제안: သင်၏အဖြေတွင် သဒ္ဒါမှားများနှင့် စကားလုံးအသုံးပြုမှု မမှန်ကန်မှုများရှိသည်။ ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းပြီး သဘာဝအတိုင်း ပြောဆိုရန် လိုအပ်သည်။

예시: If I have a chance, I would like to visit a city where the temperature is below 0°C and see the snow. I am really excited to experience the winter atmosphere and enjoy the beautiful snowy scenery.

× The place where I live have a tropical climate and the weather are hot and humid.

✓ The place where I live has a tropical climate and the weather is hot and humid.

The subject 'place' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'weather' is singular and should be paired with 'is' instead of 'are'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue with singular and plural forms.

× Generally we experience heavy rain during the monsoon season but apart from that the weather.

✓ Generally, we experience heavy rain during the monsoon season, but apart from that, the weather remains fairly consistent throughout the year.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb in the second clause. Adding 'remains fairly consistent throughout the year' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× Apart from that the weather remain fairly consistent throughout the year.

✓ Apart from that, the weather remains fairly consistent throughout the year.

The subject 'weather' is singular, so the verb should be 'remains' (third person singular) instead of 'remain'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to present tense.

× I prefer hot weather because we can do a lot of outside activities such as going to the beach and swimming and to have barbecued and picnic with friends and family.

✓ I prefer hot weather because we can do a lot of outdoor activities such as going to the beach, swimming, and having barbecues and picnics with friends and family.

The correct adjective is 'outdoor' not 'outside' when describing activities. Also, parallel structure requires consistent verb forms: 'going', 'swimming', and 'having'. 'Barbecued' is incorrect; the noun 'barbecues' fits better here.

× Moreover, this time the head to all dry quickly our clothes, that is really convenient.

✓ Moreover, at this time, the heat helps our clothes dry quickly, which is really convenient.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors. 'Head to all dry quickly our clothes' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses proper conjunctions and word order.

× I preferred what weather because of the smell of the sun and the sound of the rain that made me come and realize the atmosphere are more vibrant and peaceful making it perfect to have a cup of coffee too and wind.

✓ I prefer wet weather because of the smell of the sun and the sound of the rain that make me feel calm and realize the atmosphere is more vibrant and peaceful, making it perfect to have a cup of coffee and enjoy the wind.

'Preferred' is past tense but the context suggests present preference, so 'prefer' is correct. 'What weather' is likely a typo for 'wet weather'. 'Made me come and realize' is awkward; 'make me feel calm and realize' fits better. 'Atmosphere are' should be 'atmosphere is' due to singular subject.

× I occasionally check the weather's focus, especially when I have a important plan and I mean normally go outside spontaneously and check the outside condition instead of relying on weather forecast weather.

✓ I occasionally check the weather forecast, especially when I have an important plan. Normally, I go outside spontaneously and check the outside conditions instead of relying on the weather forecast.

'Weather's focus' is incorrect; it should be 'weather forecast'. 'A important' should be 'an important' due to vowel sound. The sentence is split for clarity. 'Weather forecast weather' is redundant and corrected.

× Do I need to take an umbrella or not?

✓ Do I need to take an umbrella or not?

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× In recent year, climate change has caused several Syria affairs such as raising sea level around coastal area and trade them both homes and wildlife and he waved the offer frequently at the impact hair issues such as.

✓ In recent years, climate change has caused several serious effects such as rising sea levels around coastal areas, threatening both homes and wildlife, and causing frequent extreme weather events that impact health issues such as heatstroke and dehydration.

The original sentence contains many errors: 'recent year' should be plural 'recent years'; 'Syria affairs' is likely 'serious effects'; 'raising sea level' should be 'rising sea levels'; 'trade them both homes and wildlife' is unclear and corrected to 'threatening both homes and wildlife'; 'he waved the offer frequently' is unclear and corrected to 'causing frequent extreme weather events'; 'impact hair issues' corrected to 'impact health issues'.

× If I have a chance, I would like to visit other city where I have the temperature under 0°C and see the snows.

✓ If I have a chance, I would like to visit another city where the temperature is below 0°C and see the snow.

'Other city' should be 'another city' for singular countable noun. 'I have the temperature' is incorrect; it should be 'the temperature is'. 'See the snows' is incorrect; 'snow' is uncountable here.

× I would like to I really exciting to see the winner atmosphere and and the unit figure of the window of the city.

✓ I would really be excited to see the winter atmosphere and the unique features of the city.

'I really exciting' is incorrect; it should be 'I would really be excited'. 'Winner atmosphere' is a misspelling of 'winter atmosphere'. 'Unit figure of the window' is unclear and corrected to 'unique features'.