Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the weather conditions. Also, correct grammar and pronunciation errors to sound more natural.

예시: I live in Hyderabad, which is quite polluted, so the weather is usually hot and warm. However, during August and September, we get some rain, but it doesn't last long because of the city's traffic and pollution.

제안: Focus on structuring your answer clearly with linking words and avoid minor errors. Be specific about why you prefer cold weather and mention your experiences more clearly.

예시: I prefer cold weather because it feels refreshing and improves my mood. Since my hometown is hot, I often travel to places like Manali, Shimla, and Kullu to enjoy the cool air and beautiful scenery there.

제안: Clarify your answer and correct vocabulary mistakes. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and avoid confusion.

예시: I absolutely love wet weather because it makes me feel refreshed and rejuvenated. The smell of rain after a long tiring day really enhances my mood and relaxes me.

제안: Try to speak more clearly and organize your answer logically. Use correct grammar and linking words to explain why you check the weather forecast and how often.

예시: Yes, I regularly check the weather forecast because I travel a lot for work. It is essential for me to know if it will rain or be sunny so that I can plan my day without any hassle.

제안: Work on clarity and grammar to express your ideas effectively. Use specific examples and linking words to explain the effects of climate change clearly.

예시: Climate change has caused serious effects on the environment recently, such as extreme weather and increased pollution. These changes have negatively impacted people's health and the overall ecosystem.

제안: Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why you like visiting cities with different climates.

예시: I love visiting other cities, especially those with cooler climates. Experiencing different weather and enjoying the snow in mountainous areas makes me feel calmer and happier.

× Usually in August, September there will be rain VI but it will not last long and because of the traffic it there's not a lot of pollution.

✓ Usually in August and September, there is rain but it does not last long and because of the traffic, there is a lot of pollution.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'there will be rain VI' which is unclear and mixes tenses. 'There is rain' is the correct present tense form to describe usual weather. Also, 'there's not a lot of pollution' contradicts the intended meaning; it should be 'there is a lot of pollution' due to traffic. The phrase 'and because of the traffic it there's not a lot of pollution' is grammatically incorrect and confusing, so it is corrected for clarity and proper use of 'there is'.

× I prefer cold weather as it is very refreshing and it enhanced my mood.

✓ I prefer cold weather as it is very refreshing and it enhances my mood.

The verb 'enhanced' is in the past tense, but the sentence is describing a general truth or habitual action, so the present tense 'enhances' should be used to maintain consistency and correctness.

× So as it is very hot in the place where I live so I usually travel to other places like Manali ship, Shimla, Kulu and I really enjoy the cold air and beautiful scenery over their experiences.

✓ Since it is very hot in the place where I live, I usually travel to other places like Manali, Shimla, and Kullu, and I really enjoy the cold air and beautiful scenery there.

The phrase 'over their experiences' is incorrect; 'there' is the correct adverb to indicate location. Also, 'Manali ship' is likely a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'Manali'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correct preposition use.

× OK, do I? I absolutely love red weathers because I feel very dirty, juvenated in this kind of weather and the smell which I get from the rainfall, it enhanced my room after other long tiring day and drive others.

✓ OK, do I? I absolutely love rainy weather because I feel very refreshed and rejuvenated in this kind of weather, and the smell I get from the rainfall enhances my mood after a long tiring day and drives away stress.

'Red weathers' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'rainy weather'. 'Dirty, juvenated' is incorrect; 'refreshed and rejuvenated' are appropriate adjectives. 'Enhanced my room' is incorrect; it should be 'enhances my mood'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct adjective and verb usage.

× Banana I'm very much in the habit of keeping an eye on the weather forecast as I travel a lot for work purpose, so it's very in essential for it is very significant for me to see like is it rainfall are a sunny day so that without hassle I can spend.

✓ Yes, I'm very much in the habit of keeping an eye on the weather forecast as I travel a lot for work purposes, so it is very essential for me to know whether it will rain or be a sunny day so that I can plan without hassle.

'Banana' is likely a mishearing or error and removed. 'Work purpose' corrected to 'work purposes'. The phrase 'see like is it rainfall are a sunny day' is grammatically incorrect; corrected to 'know whether it will rain or be a sunny day'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun and verb usage.

× They are lectora affects in the environnement redo the climate change in recent times as the other is different station an more pollution which is making people in. A big, big, big peoples health bill and also.

✓ There are negative effects on the environment due to climate change in recent times, such as deforestation and more pollution, which is affecting people's health significantly.

The original sentence contains many errors and unclear words like 'lectora affects', 'redo', 'other is different station', and 'big peoples health bill'. Corrected to a clear sentence with proper adjectives and nouns: 'negative effects', 'deforestation', 'pollution', and 'people's health'.

× I usually love visiting other cities, specially the cool cool cities current settings. To experience different climate and enjoy the snow over there and stay in the Mountain State, a place surrounded by mountains as it makes me more calmer and happier.

✓ I usually love visiting other cities, especially cool cities with different climates, to experience the snow there and stay in mountain areas surrounded by mountains, as it makes me calmer and happier.

'Specially' corrected to 'especially'. 'Cool cool cities current settings' is unclear; corrected to 'cool cities with different climates'. 'More calmer' is incorrect; 'calmer' is the correct comparative form. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct adjective use.