Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many pauses and repetitions. Try to make your sentences complete and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say, "The weather in my area is mild because summers are not very hot and winters are not very cold."

예시: The weather in my area is mild because summers are not very hot and winters are not very cold. This makes it comfortable to live here throughout the year.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your ideas. For example, say, "I prefer hot weather because it is not too hot in my area, which allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach. Also, I like wearing light and soft clothes in summer."

예시: I prefer hot weather because it is not too hot in my area, which allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach. Also, I like wearing light and soft clothes in summer.

제안: Your answer has good points but is unclear due to grammar and pronunciation errors. Use complete sentences and linking words to improve clarity. For example, "I prefer dry weather because it makes outdoor activities like hiking easier. Also, in my country, dry weather is comfortable for walking and driving. Moreover, the sunsets during dry weather are very beautiful."

예시: I prefer dry weather because it makes outdoor activities like hiking easier. Also, in my country, dry weather is comfortable for walking and driving. Moreover, the sunsets during dry weather are very beautiful.

제안: Your answer is confusing and has many pauses. Try to give a clear and direct response with supporting details. For example, "I usually do not check the weather forecast daily, but if I have an important event or plan to go outside, I check it to be prepared and safe."

예시: I usually do not check the weather forecast daily, but if I have an important event or plan to go outside, I check it to be prepared and safe.

제안: Your answer addresses the topic but needs better sentence structure and vocabulary. Use linking words and be more specific. For example, "In recent years, climate change has caused severe air pollution, making the air very dirty. As a result, people have to wear masks to protect themselves, and unfortunately, some have died due to pollution-related diseases. Therefore, controlling air pollution is very important."

예시: In recent years, climate change has caused severe air pollution, making the air very dirty. As a result, people have to wear masks to protect themselves, and unfortunately, some have died due to pollution-related diseases. Therefore, controlling air pollution is very important.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to speak clearly and organize your ideas logically. For example, "Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. I especially dream of visiting Korea because I want to experience its unique weather and culture."

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. I especially dream of visiting Korea because I want to experience its unique weather and culture.

× The weather in my area. Is milled.

✓ The weather in my area is mild.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. Combining the two parts into one complete sentence corrects the error.

× As summer is not that hot and. Winter is not that cold.

✓ Summer is not that hot and winter is not that cold.

The use of 'As' at the beginning is unnecessary and the sentence fragments should be combined for clarity and correctness.

× And. The weather is very. Milt.

✓ And the weather is very mild.

The word 'milt' is a misspelling of 'mild'. Also, the sentence fragments should be combined into one sentence.

× I personally prefer hot weather as. The hot weather is not that hot in our area and we can enjoy outdoor activities like beaches and it.

✓ I personally prefer hot weather because it is not too hot in our area, and we can enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing and combining the ideas into one coherent sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× It's comfort table. For the outdoor activities and I personally love to wear. Soft clothes.

✓ It's comfortable for outdoor activities, and I personally love to wear soft clothes.

'Comfort table' is a misspelling of 'comfortable'. Also, sentence fragments should be combined for proper structure.

× And in summer?

✓ And in summer?

This is a fragment and unclear. It is better to omit or clarify the question or statement.

× I prefer drive weather as dry weather makes it easy for the outdoor activities like hiking and as in our country dry weather makes us comfort table for walking and driving also and driver there mix.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it makes outdoor activities like hiking easier, and in our country, dry weather makes walking and driving comfortable. Also, the dry weather makes the sunset very beautiful.

'Drive weather' should be 'dry weather'. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; rephrasing and correcting spelling improves clarity and grammar.

× The Sun. Set. Very beautiful.

✓ The sunset is very beautiful.

The original is fragmented and lacks a verb. Combining into a complete sentence corrects the error.

× It depends. On what day in what event I'm going for as normally I don't prefer taking the weather forecast Ann for some kind of events or some program, I prefer to take the e-mail. Forecast. For the safety.

✓ It depends on the day and the event I am going to. Normally, I don't check the weather forecast, but for some events or programs, I prefer to check the weather forecast for safety.

The original is fragmented and contains unclear phrases. Rephrasing and combining sentences improves clarity and grammar.

× The effect of climate change in recent years. Can be seen clearly that the air are beings so dirty and.

✓ The effects of climate change in recent years can be seen clearly as the air is becoming very dirty.

'Effect' should be plural 'effects' to match 'in recent years'. 'Air are beings' is incorrect; it should be 'air is becoming'.

× People have to wear masks because of the climate changes and people are being killed. Through the air pollution.

✓ People have to wear masks because of climate change, and some people are dying due to air pollution.

'Climate changes' should be 'climate change' (uncountable). 'Being killed through the air pollution' is awkward; rephrased for clarity.

× So air pollution should be controlled.

✓ Therefore, air pollution should be controlled.

Adding a transition word improves sentence flow and clarity.

× Yes, of course I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live. As well.

✓ Yes, of course, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live as well.

'As well' should be connected to the previous sentence for proper structure.

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✓ I love to travel, and my dream is to visit Korea. I would love to play and enjoy there. It's my dream.

The original sentence is unclear and fragmented. Rephrasing and correcting spelling improves clarity and grammar.