Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa yang membuatnya sulit dipahami. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan terstruktur dengan baik, serta hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu.

예시: The weather where I live is divided into two main seasons. First, there is a hot and dry season that lasts for several months. Then, we have the rainy season, which brings cooler and more humid weather.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan dalam penggunaan kata serta struktur kalimat. Cobalah untuk menyatakan pendapat Anda secara langsung dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy the fresh and cool air. When it's cold, I feel more comfortable and motivated to do activities. Hot weather makes me feel uncomfortable and less active.

제안: Jawaban Anda agak tidak terstruktur dan ada beberapa kalimat yang tidak lengkap. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide Anda.

예시: I prefer dry weather because I can hang my clothes outside to dry. Also, I can do outdoor activities easily without worrying about rain. During the rainy season, I prefer to stay indoors.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat banyak kesalahan tata bahasa serta kalimat yang tidak lengkap. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan contoh yang relevan.

예시: I don't usually check the weather forecast as a hobby, but I do check it before long trips. For example, when I travel to another city, I check the forecast to prepare for the weather conditions.

제안: Jawaban Anda sangat tidak jelas dan sulit dipahami. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang sederhana dan fokus pada satu atau dua efek utama perubahan iklim dengan contoh yang spesifik.

예시: I think climate change has caused the rainy season to be longer and more unpredictable. This leads to problems like floods and damage to crops.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat banyak kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk menyatakan pendapat Anda dengan kalimat yang jelas dan lengkap, serta gunakan kosakata yang tepat.

예시: I prefer to visit cities that have a similar climate to where I live, like Malang. I don't like big cities with hot weather because I find it uncomfortable.

× The weather where I live with mostly divided into two seasons.

✓ The weather where I live is mostly divided into two seasons.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' to correctly link the subject and predicate. Adding 'is' corrects the sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.

× First there is a hot and dry season and there which usually lasts for several months in is there is any.

✓ First, there is a hot and dry season which usually lasts for several months.

The original sentence contains redundant and misplaced words ('there which', 'in is there is any') that confuse the meaning. Removing these and restructuring the sentence clarifies the intended message.

× Then we have the rainy season when it rains almost every day and the weather becomes cooler and more humid. This to see.

✓ Then we have the rainy season when it rains almost every day and the weather becomes cooler and more humid.

The phrase 'This to see' is incomplete and unnecessary, so it should be removed to maintain sentence clarity and correctness.

× In my opinion, I will forget weather because I enjoy the fresh and cool error here.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer cold weather because I enjoy the fresh and cool air.

The phrase 'I will forget weather' is incorrect and does not convey the intended meaning. 'I prefer cold weather' correctly expresses the student's preference in the present tense. Also, 'error here' seems to be a note and should be removed.

× When it's cold, I feel like more comfortable doing this forward and uh doing the activities.

✓ When it's cold, I feel more comfortable doing outdoor activities.

The phrase 'doing this forward' is unclear and likely a misstatement. Replacing it with 'doing outdoor activities' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'feel like more comfortable' should be 'feel more comfortable'.

× But if hot weather I don't, I don't feel comfortable, convenient to have the activities and less motivated.

✓ But if the weather is hot, I don't feel comfortable or motivated to do activities.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundancy. Reordering and simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Oh well, I think I like dry weather because I can drive my clothes outside after washing the clothes well, and I can do activities in the right weather without rainy season.

✓ Oh well, I think I like dry weather because I can hang my clothes outside after washing them, and I can do activities in good weather without the rainy season.

'Drive my clothes outside' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'hang my clothes outside'. Also, 'in the right weather' should be 'in good weather', and 'without rainy season' needs the definite article 'the'.

× But if the rainy season, I don't really like to go outside.

✓ But during the rainy season, I don't really like to go outside.

The phrase 'if the rainy season' is incorrect; 'during the rainy season' correctly indicates the time frame.

× Uh, I don't really like that's my hobby, checking the weather forecast, but I often use it when I have a long journey.

✓ Uh, I don't really like it as a hobby, checking the weather forecast, but I often use it when I have a long journey.

The phrase 'I don't really like that's my hobby' is incorrect. It should be 'I don't really like it as a hobby' to express the intended meaning.

× For example, I go to another city or not another profits, which I passed the city.

✓ For example, I go to another city or nearby places, which I pass through.

The phrase 'not another profits' is unclear and likely a mishearing or misstatement. Replacing it with 'nearby places' and correcting 'passed the city' to 'pass through' clarifies the meaning.

× I need to look at the for weather forecast, so I need to make sure that it's.

✓ I need to look at the weather forecast to make sure of the conditions.

The phrase 'look at the for weather forecast' is incorrect; 'look at the weather forecast' is correct. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished for clarity.

× The effect of the climate change Indiana reason yes yes yeah the rainy season is too long and unexpected and yeah there are mainly the sister of course because of the rainy season like moving Lenain etc yeah but if the dry season of course there is no.

✓ The effects of climate change in recent years include the rainy season being too long and unexpected. There are mainly disasters because of the rainy season like flooding, but during the dry season, there are fewer problems.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it with proper sentence structure and vocabulary improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't really like it because I I will go to another city that they have the same cream.

✓ I don't really like it because I will go to another city that has the same climate.

The phrase 'they have the same cream' is incorrect; it should be 'has the same climate'. Also, removing the repeated 'I' improves sentence correctness.

× It's like my living here like in Malang it has the same clinic and inven do I dislike big city that has hot? Klymit Ordre season, something like that.

✓ It's like living here in Malang; it has the same climate. I dislike big cities that have hot climates or dry seasons, something like that.

The original sentence contains many unclear and incorrect words ('clinic', 'inven', 'Klymit Ordre'). Correcting these to 'climate' and 'dry seasons' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammar.