Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct place names and grammar. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences clear and concise. For example, say 'I live in Ahvaz, which is in southwest Iran, and it is one of the hottest places in the world. The summer is very inconvenient because it's too hot to go outside during the day.'

예시: I live in Ahvaz, which is in southwest Iran, and it is one of the hottest places in the world. The summer is very inconvenient because it's too hot to go outside during the day.

제안: Use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid vague expressions. For example, say 'Since I live in a hot city, I prefer cold weather. I enjoy going outside to see snow or rain, although these are rare in my city.'

예시: Since I live in a hot city, I prefer cold weather. I enjoy going outside to see snow or rain, although these are rare in my city.

제안: Focus on clarity and correct word choice. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. For example, say 'I prefer dry weather because it makes me feel more comfortable. Also, my curly hair looks better in dry weather than in wet weather.'

예시: I prefer dry weather because it makes me feel more comfortable. Also, my curly hair looks better in dry weather than in wet weather.

제안: Improve sentence structure and verb agreement. For example, say 'Yes, of course. Checking the weather forecast is an important part of my day because I choose my outfit based on the weather. I check it every time before I go out.'

예시: Yes, of course. Checking the weather forecast is an important part of my day because I choose my outfit based on the weather. I check it every time before I go out.

제안: Use clearer sentence structures and avoid awkward phrasing. For example, say 'Honestly, that's an interesting question. In recent years, global warming has caused climate change, making many parts of the world hotter. This negatively affects our health and the environment.'

예시: Honestly, that's an interesting question. In recent years, global warming has caused climate change, making many parts of the world hotter. This negatively affects our health and the environment.

제안: Use correct expressions and avoid filler phrases. For example, say 'Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates because I enjoy traveling. I especially prefer to visit cold cities rather than hot ones.'

예시: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates because I enjoy traveling. I especially prefer to visit cold cities rather than hot ones.

× Actually I live in apples that is southwest of Iran and it has one of the most hottest weather in the world, not even in our country.

✓ Actually I live in a place that is southwest of Iran and it has some of the hottest weather in the world, not only in our country.

The word 'apples' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'a place' or a specific location. Also, 'one of the most hottest' is incorrect because 'most' and 'hottest' both indicate superlative; use 'some of the hottest' instead. 'Not even in our country' is unclear; 'not only in our country' fits better.

× And it is very inconvenient, especially in summer an you cannot go out in the day and it's very hot.

✓ And it is very inconvenient, especially in summer, and you cannot go out during the day because it's very hot.

The conjunction 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'. Also, 'in the day' is better expressed as 'during the day'. Adding 'because' clarifies the reason.

× Since I live in a hot city, it is clear that I prefer to be in a cold weather and I like to go out and see the snow or rain, but it is very few in my city.

✓ Since I live in a hot city, it is clear that I prefer cold weather and I like to go out and see the snow or rain, but it is very rare in my city.

'A cold weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and does not take an article here. 'Very few' is incorrect for uncountable nouns; 'very rare' is appropriate.

× Actually I prefer dry weather rather too which weather because I think which weather make me in comfortable and especially for my hair because my hair is curly and in which weather and they are very bad in shape.

✓ Actually I prefer dry weather rather than wet weather because I think wet weather makes me uncomfortable, especially for my hair because my hair is curly and in wet weather it is in very bad shape.

'Rather too which weather' is incorrect; it should be 'rather than wet weather'. 'Which weather' is incorrect; 'wet weather' is intended. 'Make me in comfortable' should be 'makes me uncomfortable'. 'They are very bad in shape' refers to hair, which is singular here, so 'it is in very bad shape' is correct.

× Actually this is one of the most important part of my day because I choose my outfit depends on the weather, so every time before I go out I will check the weather conditions.

✓ Actually this is one of the most important parts of my day because I choose my outfit depending on the weather, so every time before I go out I check the weather conditions.

'One of the most important part' should be 'one of the most important parts' because 'one of the' requires plural noun. 'Choose my outfit depends on' is incorrect; it should be 'choose my outfit depending on'. 'I will check' is better as 'I check' to indicate habitual action.

× At honestly, that's an interesting question. I think in recent years because of the global warming, climate change is to become a very hot in different parts of the world and this is bad for our health and also for our environment.

✓ Honestly, that's an interesting question. I think in recent years because of global warming, climate change has become very intense in different parts of the world and this is bad for our health and also for our environment.

'At honestly' is incorrect; 'Honestly' is correct. 'Climate change is to become a very hot' is incorrect; 'climate change has become very intense' or 'has caused very hot conditions' is better.

× I would guess to say yes because this is one of my hobbies to travel to other cities that and have a different weather conditions from my city.

✓ I would say yes because this is one of my hobbies, to travel to other cities that have different weather conditions from my city.

'I would guess to say yes' is incorrect; 'I would say yes' is correct. 'That and have' is incorrect; 'that have' is correct. 'A different weather conditions' is incorrect; 'different weather conditions' is correct.

× Especially I prefer to travel too cold cities rather than hot CTS.

✓ Especially, I prefer to travel to cold cities rather than hot cities.

'Too cold cities' should be 'to cold cities'. 'CTS' is likely a typo for 'cities'.