Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Уменьшите количество заполнителей (uh, umm) и стройте более прямые предложения. Дайте краткий топик‑предложение, затем одно‑два поддерживающих предложения с конкретикой (какие приложения, для каких типов информации). Также следите за временем и формой глаголов (found → find).

예시: Not really. I usually use apps on my phone to store notes because I find them more convenient and practical. For example, I use a notes app to save shopping lists and ideas for work.

제안: Уберите разговорные вставки и сформулируйте причину четко: сначала назовите, что вы пишете, затем объясните почему с конкретикой (как это помогает, какие темы). Используйте связку (because, so, which helps).

예시: I enjoy writing song lyrics because it helps me process emotions and explore ideas. Writing lyrics is therapeutic for me and often inspires new melodies or themes.

제안: Ответ расплывчат и содержит грамматические ошибки и много пауз. Начните с четкого топик‑предложения (Yes/No) и поясните причину с примером. Исправьте выражения: "despite of" → "despite", "stay actual" → "remain relevant".

예시: I don't think my writing will change much over time because the themes I choose are personal and constant. However, I may express ideas differently as I gain experience and new perspectives.

제안: Сократите лишние слова и исправьте ошибки ("take step in it" неясно; "always able" → "be able"). Дайте конкретный пример ситуации, когда печатание удобнее, и используйте связку (because, so).

예시: I prefer typing because I always have my phone with me, so I can write something immediately. For instance, I often type quick notes during work meetings.

제안: Ответ содержит повторы и некорректные местоимения (your → my). Дайте короткий топик и одну‑две причины с примером, избегайте отрицательных долгих конструкций. Уточните, что именно смущает (безопасность, конфиденциальность).

예시: I don't keep a diary because I prefer to keep my thoughts private and I'm worried someone might read them. Instead, I save private notes on my phone with a password.

제안: Уменьшите вопросы в ответе и убрать паузы; начните с прямого утверждения и добавьте детали (какие моменты, как часто, примеры). Используйте связки (usually, for example, especially).

예시: I rarely record my life, but when I do I use my phone's camera to take photos and videos. For example, I often capture travel scenes or gatherings with friends.

× I prefer using apps on my mobile phone to, uh, store information because I found it more comfortable and, uh, it's more practical.

✓ I prefer using apps on my mobile phone to store information because I find it more comfortable and more practical.

The student used 'found' (past) but context is present preference; use present simple 'find'. Also 'it's more practical' is fine but 'more' repeated improves parallelism. Suggestion: keep verb forms consistent in present-tense statements about habits (use 'prefer' and 'find').

× Well, I like to write lyrics for my songs and, umm, I find it's kind of, uh, therapy for me and it's a very interesting and, uh, inspirational process, so I do it.

✓ Well, I like to write lyrics for my songs and I find it's kind of therapy for me and a very interesting and inspirational process, so I do it.

No past-tense verbs present, but unnecessary 'it's kind of, uh, therapy' punctuation: drop extra filler and article usage: 'a very interesting and inspirational process' is correct. Maintain present simple for habits. Suggestion: remove fillers and ensure articles before singular countable nouns ('a very interesting...').

× No, I don't really think that, uh, things that I write will change over time.

✓ No, I don't really think that the things I write will change over time.

Minor article and word order: add definite article 'the' before 'things I write' to specify. Tense 'will change' is appropriate for future; keep present in main clause and future in subordinate clause. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific items previously mentioned.

× And despite of, umm, the fact that I might have some experience or some, another, uh, view at some things, uh, I think that it will stay actual for me never.

✓ And despite the fact that I might have more experience or another view on some things, I think that they will never become irrelevant to me.

'Despite of' is incorrect; correct form is 'despite' or 'in spite of'. 'View at' should be 'view on'. 'Stay actual' is unnatural; use 'become irrelevant' or 'remain relevant'. Word order 'never' should follow auxiliary/modal or be placed before main verb appropriately. Suggestion: use 'despite the fact that', 'view on', and idiomatic expressions like 'remain relevant'.

× I prefer typing because I always have a mobile phone with me and take step in it.

✓ I prefer typing because I always have a mobile phone with me and can use it anytime.

'Take step in it' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely meaning is 'use it on the go' or 'use it anytime'; use modal 'can' for ability. Maintain present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: replace unclear phrase with idiomatic expression such as 'can use it anytime' or 'use it on the go'.

× So if I need something to write at the moment, uh, I will always able to do it.

✓ So if I need to write something at the moment, I will always be able to do it.

Missing auxiliary 'be' in 'be able to'. Word order: 'need to write something' is more natural than 'something to write'. Tense 'will' is fine for future ability in conditional. Suggestion: include full modal structure 'will be able to'.

× Well, actually I don't keep there at all because I don't see a point in writing your thoughts and reflections on the paper because it's the personal and someone can expose it.

✓ Well, actually I don't keep one at all because I don't see a point in writing my thoughts and reflections on paper because they're personal and someone could expose them.

Pronoun inconsistency: 'your' should be 'my' to match speaker. 'Keep there' is incorrect; use 'keep one' (diary) or 'keep a diary'. 'On the paper' -> 'on paper'. 'It's the personal' incorrect article and noun form; use 'they're personal'. 'Someone can expose it' better as 'someone could expose them'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent with speaker and use plural pronouns for 'thoughts and reflections'.

× Uh, will I record my life? Very rarely.

✓ Do I record my life? Very rarely.

Question form 'Will I record my life?' is wrong for habitual frequency; use present simple question 'Do I record my life?' or better, answer directly 'I rarely record my life.' Suggestion: for habits, use present simple and state frequency adverb correctly ('I rarely...').

× And, uh, I usually do it, uh, with the camera on my phone and, uh, I, uh, record videos and take photos of, uh, some moments that I like to capture.

✓ And I usually do it with the camera on my phone; I record videos and take photos of moments that I like to capture.

Verb forms are fine but redundant fillers and commas disrupt flow. Use semicolon or conjunction to join clauses. Remove excessive 'uh' and 'some' before 'moments'. Suggestion: streamline sentence by removing fillers and unnecessary words.