Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add a reason using linking words.

예시: I don't write a lot because I am not a good writer. However, I prefer speaking since it allows me to express my emotions more clearly than writing.

제안: Focus on clarity and grammatical correctness. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Provide a clear reason why you like writing stories.

예시: I like writing stories because it allows me to express my emotions and thoughts creatively. When I write, I can share my feelings through the characters and plot.

제안: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain how your writing has improved over time with specific examples.

예시: Yes, my writing has changed a lot. In the past, I wrote short stories that sometimes lacked meaning, but now I write more thoughtful and creative stories.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Clearly state your preference and reasons using linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer handwriting because it is faster and allows me to draw while writing. Typing takes more time for me.

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words. Use clear sentences with linking words to explain why diaries are important to you.

예시: I always keep diaries because they are important to me. They help me remember my thoughts and feelings from the past.

제안: Improve grammar and sentence completion. Use linking words to explain your method clearly and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: I also record my life by taking photos whenever I travel or visit new places. I save these photos in my notes to help me remember those moments.

× I will be a honest I'm a not good writer.

✓ I will be honest, I'm not a good writer.

The modal verb phrase 'will be a honest' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'will be honest' without the article 'a' because 'honest' is an adjective, not a noun. Also, 'I'm a not good writer' has incorrect word order; it should be 'I'm not a good writer.'

× I prefer speaker speaking more than writing because I think when I was speak I show the emotion more than writing.

✓ I prefer speaking more than writing because I think when I speak I show more emotion than in writing.

The phrase 'speaker speaking' is incorrect; 'speaking' alone is sufficient as a gerund. 'When I was speak' is incorrect; it should be 'when I speak' to match the present tense. Also, 'show the emotion' should be 'show more emotion' for natural expression.

× I like when I'm writing a story because when I was writing story, I put my emotion and feeling in this story and acting what I think in my writing story.

✓ I like writing stories because when I write a story, I put my emotions and feelings into it and express what I think in my writing.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly: 'I'm writing' and 'I was writing' should be consistent in present tense 'I write.' 'Emotion and feeling' should be plural 'emotions and feelings.' 'Acting what I think' is incorrect; 'express' or 'show' is more appropriate.

× Yes, absolutely thinks what I writing and now a change in the past I write them some short story sometime didn't have any meaning, but now I can write and they have a thought and creative.

✓ Yes, absolutely, the things I write have changed. In the past, I wrote some short stories that sometimes didn't have any meaning, but now I can write stories that have thought and creativity.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and incorrect word forms: 'thinks what I writing' should be 'the things I write.' 'Now a change' should be 'have changed.' 'I write them some short story' should be 'I wrote some short stories.' 'They have a thought and creative' should be 'they have thought and creativity.'

× I prefer more handwriting, uh, because it's a fast and I can, uh, draw and use my hand, uh, while when I was writing by, uh, typing that, uh, that need more time.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it's fast and I can draw and use my hand, while typing takes more time.

'It's a fast' should be 'it's fast' (no article needed). 'When I was writing by typing' is awkward; 'while typing' is better. 'That need more time' should be 'that takes more time' to agree with singular subject 'typing.'

× Umm, I always keep Diaries, uh, because, uh, my Diaries is uh, important for me.

✓ Umm, I always keep diaries because my diaries are important to me.

'Diaries' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is.' Also, 'keep Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries' unless it's a title.

× My method now take a photo for everything K face me like when I go trip or visit any place, I take a photo for that too uh, memorize me and put them in my note uh, to help me or.

✓ My method now is to take photos of everything I face, like when I go on a trip or visit any place. I take photos to help me remember and put them in my notes.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'K face me' is unclear and likely 'I face.' 'Go trip' should be 'go on a trip.' 'Memorize me' is incorrect; it should be 'help me remember.' 'Put them in my note' should be 'put them in my notes.' Also, verb agreement and sentence structure needed correction.