Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Also, make your answer more natural by using linking words and clearer reasons.

예시: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me relax and improves my vocabulary. Additionally, writing allows me to explore and understand new cultures better.

제안: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more specific about what you write. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly and explain your reasons logically.

예시: I enjoy writing about history because it helps me relax and expand my knowledge. For example, when I write, I often listen to quiet music, which helps me focus and reduce stress.

제안: Use correct tense and sentence structure. Be clear and concise, and explain your answer with relevant details.

예시: Yes, my writing has changed over time. For instance, two years ago, I wrote a presentation for my teacher and received a high score, which motivated me to improve further.

제안: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Explain your preference clearly with supporting reasons and examples.

예시: I prefer handwriting because it helps me learn faster. For example, writing by hand allows me to remember information better as it connects more with my mind.

제안: Clarify your opinion and avoid contradictions. Use linking words to explain your thoughts clearly and avoid filler words.

예시: I don't keep diaries often because I think it wastes time. For example, writing notes can take a lot of time and distract me from organizing my thoughts.

제안: Use correct grammar and avoid filler words. Be specific and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: One special method I use to record my life is taking photos because I am a photographer. This helps me reduce stress and creates lasting memories with my family and girlfriend.

× Actually, yes, I prefer to write a lot because it helped me relaxing.

✓ Actually, yes, I prefer to write a lot because it helps me relax.

The verb 'helped' is in past tense, but the context requires present tense 'helps' to match 'prefer'. Also, 'relaxing' should be the base form 'relax' after 'help'. Use 'help + base verb' structure.

× Moreover, the writing can improve my vocabulary, which is great because it helped me to discover a new culture.

✓ Moreover, writing can improve my vocabulary, which is great because it helps me discover a new culture.

Use present tense 'helps' to maintain consistency. Also, 'helped me to discover' should be 'helps me discover' as 'help' is followed by base verb without 'to'.

× Actually, I prefer to write, uh, historical because it helped me relaxing and, uh, improve my knowledge.

✓ Actually, I prefer to write, uh, historical pieces because they help me relax and improve my knowledge.

'Historical' is an adjective and needs a noun like 'pieces'. Also, 'helped me relaxing' is incorrect; it should be 'help me relax'. Use present tense 'help' to match 'prefer'.

× Uh, for example, in my free time, I not only write my favorite note, but I also play some, uh, quiet music, which is, uh, which, uh, because it's helped me reduce this.

✓ Uh, for example, in my free time, I not only write my favorite notes, but I also play some quiet music, which helps me reduce stress.

'Note' should be plural 'notes' to match 'not only'. 'It's helped' is past tense; use 'helps' for present. 'Reduce this' is vague; 'reduce stress' is clearer. Avoid filler words for clarity.

× Actually yes, because the last time I had writing something it was it was before 2 years at the school when I doing my presentation for teacher.

✓ Actually yes, because the last time I wrote something was two years ago at school when I was doing my presentation for the teacher.

Use past tense 'wrote' instead of 'had writing'. 'It was it was' is redundant. 'Before 2 years' should be 'two years ago'. 'When I doing' should be 'when I was doing'. Add 'the' before 'teacher'.

× Also I had got uh a higher score.

✓ Also, I got a higher score.

Use simple past 'got' instead of past perfect 'had got' as the event is specific and completed. Add comma after 'Also' for clarity.

× Actually, I like to handwriting because it is the way to improve your knowledge quickly.

✓ Actually, I like handwriting because it is a way to improve your knowledge quickly.

'Like to handwriting' is incorrect; use 'like handwriting'. 'The way' should be 'a way' as it is one of many ways.

× Uh, for example, when you write a lot, you will get a lot of information, uh, which is connect with your mind.

✓ Uh, for example, when you write a lot, you will get a lot of information, which is connected with your mind.

'Connect' should be past participle 'connected' to describe the state. 'With your mind' is correct preposition usage.

× Actually, I usually keep Diers because I think it's, uh, waste your time.

✓ Actually, I usually keep diaries because I think it's a waste of your time.

'Diers' is misspelling of 'diaries'. 'It's waste your time' is incorrect; correct form is 'it's a waste of your time'.

× Actually, one of the special method it was, uh, taking photo because as you know, I am a photography, uh, which is great because it helped me to reduce stress and anxiety.

✓ Actually, one special method is taking photos because, as you know, I am a photographer, which is great because it helps me reduce stress and anxiety.

'One of the special method' should be 'one special method' or 'one of the special methods'. 'Taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'. 'I am a photography' is incorrect; correct noun is 'photographer'. Use present tense 'helps'.

× However, taking photo can make a best memorable for uh, you with the family or girlfriend.

✓ However, taking photos can create the best memories for you with your family or girlfriend.

'Taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'. 'Make a best memorable' is incorrect; use 'create the best memories'. Add possessive pronouns 'your family'.