Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。例えば、接続詞を使って文の流れを良くし、具体的な例を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I write a lot, especially when I study for exams. For example, practicing English writing tasks requires a lot of effort, so I spend much time writing by hand to improve my skills.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、表現が不自然で繰り返しが多いです。より具体的に理由を述べ、文法や語彙の正確さを向上させることが必要です。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、内容を明確にしましょう。

예시: I like to write fantasy stories because I enjoy imagining magical worlds and space adventures. Sometimes, I want to write a novel based on these themes.

제안: 内容は良いですが、文法ミスや単語の誤用が目立ちます。例えば、「arrived」は誤りで、「writing」や「ideas」が適切です。文の構造を整え、語彙の正確な使用に注意しましょう。

예시: Yes, I believe the things I write change over time. As I gain more experience and knowledge, my writing style and ideas evolve. For example, when I was younger, I wrote about simple topics, but now I try to express more complex thoughts and use varied vocabulary.

제안: 回答が短く、理由の説明が不十分で不自然です。「motivations」の使い方も不適切です。より具体的な理由を述べ、文をつなげて自然な表現にしましょう。

예시: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate and remember information better. Writing by hand makes the learning process more effective for me.

제안: 文法やスペルミスが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。現在形と過去形の使い分けや単語の正確な綴りに注意し、簡潔で明確な文章を心がけましょう。

예시: I don't keep a diary recently because I often forget to write. However, I am trying to write in my diary every day.

제안: 文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。「what lie this today」や「objective」は誤用です。正しい表現を使い、具体的で自然な説明を心がけましょう。

예시: I record my life by taking pictures. Photos help me remember my daily experiences clearly, including people and objects around me.

× Yes I do I write a lot on paper, especially when I study for exam for example, English writing skills tasks require a lot of practice, so I spend a lot of time writing by hand to improve my.

✓ Yes, I do. I write a lot on paper, especially when I study for exams. For example, English writing skills tasks require a lot of practice, so I spend a lot of time writing by hand to improve.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. Adding commas and periods separates ideas clearly, improving readability and grammatical correctness.

× Yes I do I write a lot on paper, especially when I study for exam for example, English writing skills tasks require a lot of practice, so I spend a lot of time writing by hand to improve my.

✓ Yes, I do. I write a lot on paper, especially when I study for an exam. For example, English writing skills tasks require a lot of practice, so I spend a lot of time writing by hand to improve.

The phrase 'study for exam' is missing the indefinite article 'an' before 'exam'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article.

× In my opinion I would like to write a story about fantasy story, because I really like fantasy and space, so sometime I want to write novel or something.

✓ In my opinion, I would like to write a fantasy story because I really like fantasy and space, so sometimes I want to write a novel or something.

The phrase 'a story about fantasy story' is redundant; 'a fantasy story' is sufficient. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Articles are missing before 'novel'. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× Yes, I believe the things I arrived would change over time.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I write would change over time.

The word 'arrived' is incorrect in this context; the intended verb is likely 'write' to refer to the things the student writes. 'Arrived' is past tense of 'arrive' and does not fit the meaning.

× As I gain more experience and knowledge, my writing style and idea tend to evolve.

✓ As I gain more experience and knowledge, my writing style and ideas tend to evolve.

The noun 'idea' should be plural 'ideas' to agree with 'writing style' and to reflect multiple thoughts. This is a singular/plural issue.

× For example, when I was younger I post more on simple topics, but now I try to express more complex thoughts and use varied vocabulary.

✓ For example, when I was younger I posted more on simple topics, but now I try to express more complex thoughts and use varied vocabulary.

The verb 'post' should be in past tense 'posted' to match the past time reference 'when I was younger'.

× Well, actually I prefer handwriting because handwriting offers motivations and by writing by hand I can remember better.

✓ Well, actually I prefer handwriting because handwriting offers motivation, and by writing by hand I can remember better.

The word 'motivations' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'motivation' (uncountable). Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× Actually I don't write Diaries recently because I always forgot to deris, although I try to do it.

✓ Actually, I don't write diaries recently because I always forget to do it, although I try.

'Diaries' should be lowercase unless at the start of a sentence. The verb 'forgot' should be present tense 'forget' to match 'recently'. The word 'deris' is a typo and corrected to 'do it'. The sentence structure is adjusted for clarity.

× However I trying to write Diaries everyday.

✓ However, I am trying to write diaries every day.

The verb 'trying' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'I am trying'. 'Diaries' should be lowercase. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be two words 'every day' (adverbial phrase).

× The method to record my life is taking pictures.

✓ The method I use to record my life is taking pictures.

The phrase 'The method to record my life' is awkward; adding 'I use' clarifies the subject and improves sentence structure.

× By taking pictures I can remember easily what lie this today and since there are clearly shape of human or objective.

✓ By taking pictures, I can easily remember what life was like today since there are clear shapes of humans or objects.

The phrase 'what lie this today' is incorrect; corrected to 'what life was like today'. 'Clearly shape' should be 'clear shapes'. 'Human or objective' corrected to 'humans or objects'. Commas added for clarity.