Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਕਈ ਵਾਰ ਗਲਤ ਗ੍ਰੈਮਰ ਵਰਤੀ ਗਈ ਹੈ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਬਣਾਉਣ ਲਈ, ਸਿੱਧਾ ਅਤੇ ਸੰਖੇਪ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਜੋ ਸਵਾਲ ਨਾਲ ਸਬੰਧਿਤ ਹੋਵੇ।

예시: I don't write a lot these days because I spend most of my time helping my parents with their daily tasks.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਸਹੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਨਹੀਂ ਹੈ ਅਤੇ ਕਈ ਵਾਰ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟਤਾ ਹੈ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਜਾਣਕਾਰੀ ਦੇ ਨਾਲ ਜੋੜੋ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸਹੀ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਜੋੜੋ।

예시: I enjoy writing inspiring and motivational thoughts and poetry because it helps me express my feelings and improve my writing skills.

제안: ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤ ਗ੍ਰੈਮਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟਤਾ ਹੈ। ਆਪਣੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਪ੍ਰਗਟ ਕਰੋ ਅਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਤਾਂ ਜੋ ਜਵਾਬ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਅਤੇ ਸਮਝਣਯੋਗ ਬਣੇ।

예시: Yes, I think my writing changes over time because modern songs and movies have different lyrics compared to older ones.

제안: ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤ ਗ੍ਰੈਮਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟਤਾ ਹੈ। ਸਿੱਧਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਅਤੇ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸਹੀ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਜੋੜੋ। ਆਪਣੇ ਪਸੰਦ ਦਾ ਕਾਰਨ ਵੀ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਕਰੋ।

예시: I prefer handwriting because I participate in writing competitions at college and want to improve my skills to win prizes.

제안: ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤ ਗ੍ਰੈਮਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟਤਾ ਹੈ। ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਜੋ ਸਵਾਲ ਦਾ ਸਿੱਧਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਦੇਵੇ।

예시: I don't keep diaries because I feel it adds pressure and stress to my daily life.

제안: ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤ ਗ੍ਰੈਮਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟਤਾ ਹੈ। ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਆਪਣੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਪ੍ਰਗਟ ਕਰੋ ਅਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਵਰਤੋਂ।

예시: Since I don't keep diaries, I use my mobile phone and reminders to record important things so I don't forget them.

× In the present time, I will not write a lot in the really routine because I have to do the work to help the my parents and their daily routine works.

✓ At present, I do not write a lot in my daily routine because I have to do work to help my parents with their daily tasks.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'will' to describe a present habitual action, which is a future tense issue. The correct tense for habitual actions in the present is the simple present tense. Also, 'the my parents' is incorrect article usage and 'really routine' is awkward; 'daily routine' is better.

× Mostly I like to write down the inspiring and motivational thoughts and poetry since my college times because that time I want. To continue know my writing.

✓ Mostly, I have liked to write down inspiring and motivational thoughts and poetry since my college days because at that time I wanted to continue improving my writing.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'like' and 'want' to describe actions starting in the past and continuing to present, which requires present perfect tense ('have liked') and past tense ('wanted'). Also, 'college times' should be 'college days' and sentence structure needs correction.

× OK, is that depend on that time I I see the old writing they are the totally different in the modern era in the two day time lyrics are the totally changed in songs and movies rather than the old.

✓ OK, it depends on the time. When I see old writings, they are totally different from those in the modern era. Nowadays, lyrics in songs and movies have completely changed compared to the old ones.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement errors ('is that depend' should be 'it depends'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward phrasing. Present simple tense is appropriate for general truths. Also, 'two day time' is unclear and replaced with 'nowadays'.

× Preferred to the handwriting because I have to also participate in the college time in the writing competitions because I want to get the first prize in on writing area. So I mostly try to write down the things.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I also participated in writing competitions during college as I wanted to get the first prize in the writing area. So, I mostly try to write things down.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Preferred' (past participle) without a subject and mixes tenses. 'Preferred' should be 'I prefer' for present preference. Also, 'have to also participate' is awkward; past tense 'participated' fits better. Sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× If not to write down the Diaries in my life because I believe it's the more pressurized things onto the mind and I feel the more stress on to these type of things in the daily routine.

✓ I do not write diaries in my life because I believe they put more pressure on the mind, and I feel more stress from these types of things in my daily routine.

The original sentence misuses prepositions like 'onto' and 'on to' which should be 'on' or 'from' depending on context. Also, 'If not to write down' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not write'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I also said I am not too reliable to write down the Diaries, but I wrote down the my modern things on my mobile phones and the reminders because I want to that things are never be forgotten in my mind and I also memorize the bad things in the next year.

✓ I also said I am not very consistent in writing diaries, but I write down my important things on my mobile phone and set reminders because I want those things never to be forgotten. I also try to remember the bad things for the next year.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage ('the my modern things' should be 'my important things'), tense inconsistency ('wrote' changed to 'write' for habitual action), and awkward phrasing ('I want to that things are never be forgotten' corrected to 'I want those things never to be forgotten'). The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical accuracy.