Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が冗長で文法的な誤りが多いです。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、文法の正確さを向上させましょう。例えば、過去の習慣と現在の状況を明確に区別して述べることが重要です。

예시: I don't write much nowadays because I'm busy preparing for the IELTS exam. However, I used to keep a diary before going to bed every night.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。具体的に何を書くのか、なぜそれが好きなのかを明確に述べ、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I like to write about my daily experiences because it helps me remember important moments when I read them later.

제안: 回答が長くて混乱しています。質問に直接答え、理由を簡潔に説明しましょう。また、文法の誤りを修正してください。

예시: I don't think what I write changes because I usually record what happened that day. However, I haven't been writing my diary frequently lately.

제안: 理由は良いですが、表現が少し不自然です。より自然な英語表現を使い、理由を明確に述べましょう。

예시: I prefer handwriting because it helps improve my memory and keeps my brain active when I write with my hand.

제안: 文が途中で終わっており、内容が不完全です。過去の頻度と理由を明確に述べ、文を完結させましょう。

예시: A few years ago, I kept a diary almost every night because I was going through some problems and felt emotionally depressed.

제안: 回答が繰り返しで不明瞭です。具体的な方法とその効果を簡潔に説明しましょう。

예시: I use a planner to write down my daily schedule, which helps me remember my tasks and stay organized.

× I used to keep I used to keep my diary when before going to bed.

✓ I used to keep my diary before going to bed.

The sentence contains repetition and incorrect word order. 'Used to' indicates past habit, so 'when before going to bed' is redundant and awkward. Correcting to 'before going to bed' clarifies the time reference.

× So I had I had enough time.

✓ So I didn't have enough time.

The original sentence contradicts the context. The student means they lacked time, so the negative form 'didn't have' is appropriate. Also, repetition 'I had I had' is an error.

× I had no time to keep diary.

✓ I had no time to keep a diary.

The phrase 'keep diary' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'had no time' is correct past tense usage here.

× I like to write the things, the things that which did occurred to me that on that day, because one year later I wrote, I could read back my notes and I could think about I, I could.

✓ I like to write the things that occurred to me on that day, because one year later I can read back my notes and think about them.

The sentence has redundant phrases ('the things, the things'), incorrect relative pronoun usage ('that which'), incorrect verb form ('did occurred' should be 'occurred'), and awkward pronoun use ('think about I'). Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× I don't think the contents I I wrote for diary has not been changed because lately I don't keep my diary so often and I think keeping diary is to write about what I had I have done on that day or what's occurred to me on that.

✓ I don't think the contents I wrote in my diary have changed because lately I don't keep my diary so often, and I think keeping a diary is writing about what I have done on that day or what has occurred to me.

Subject-verb agreement error ('contents... has' should be 'contents... have'), incorrect article usage ('for diary' should be 'in my diary'), and tense inconsistency corrected for clarity.

× I definitely like to write in handwriting because I think it is one of the good exercise for my memories and my brain to write down.

✓ I definitely like to write by handwriting because I think it is good exercise for my memory and brain to write down.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'handwriting'; 'by handwriting' or 'by hand' is correct. Also, 'memories' should be 'memory' as an uncountable noun, and 'one of the good exercise' should be 'good exercise' or 'one of the good exercises'.

× I used to keep a diary almost every night, every day a few years ago, because at that time I had been trouble, I had been problem in my daily duties and I was emotionally depressed.

✓ I used to keep a diary almost every night, every day a few years ago, because at that time I had trouble and problems in my daily duties and I was emotionally depressed.

Incorrect use of 'had been trouble' and 'had been problem' corrected to 'had trouble' and 'problems'. 'Had been' is not appropriate here.

× So keeping diary is a.

✓ So keeping a diary is helpful.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a predicate. Adding 'helpful' completes the thought.

× I try to write down my daily schedule on my scheduling note and so that's I can, I, I could, I can, I can memorize my daily tasks, tasks and duties and keeping what I have.

✓ I try to write down my daily schedule on my scheduling note so that I can memorize my daily tasks and duties and keep track of what I have.

The sentence has redundant and confusing pronoun use ('that's I can, I, I could, I can, I can'). Correcting to 'so that I can' clarifies purpose. Also, 'keeping what I have' is unclear; 'keep track of what I have' is clearer.