Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意句子结构的完整性和逻辑连贯性，避免语法错误和不自然的表达。

예시: Yes, I write about 3000 words every day because I am creating my own adventure novel for a website. I want to finish it quickly because the story is exciting and I am motivated to complete it.

제안: 回答内容较丰富，但表达稍显重复且部分句子不够自然，建议简化表达并使用更地道的连接词，使回答更流畅。

예시: I like to write adventure stories because they allow me to use my imagination. Since I am young, I have many new ideas that I want to record so I can look back on them when I am older.

제안: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，建议补充完整句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使逻辑更清楚。

예시: Yes, I think my writing will change as I grow older. Currently, my plots are quite naive, but after experiencing more of society's challenges, my stories will become more mature and realistic.

제안: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子结构稍显混乱，建议使用更连贯的句子并避免语法错误。

예시: I prefer typing because it is more efficient. This way, I can write more stories in less time since I also need to focus on my studies.

제안: 回答简洁明了，但可以稍作扩展，使用更自然的表达和连接词，使回答更完整。

예시: No, I don't usually keep a diary because I find it boring to force myself to recall what happened each day.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰，建议注意句子结构和用词准确性，避免重复表达。

예시: I take photos to capture the most memorable and wonderful moments in my life. I store them in several places to make sure I don't lose them.

× It's who is contracted with the website.

✓ It is contracted with the website.

句中使用了错误的代词“who”，应使用“it”指代前文提到的小说。代词使用错误会导致句子不通顺。

× It's a adventure story, so I want to finish them as quickly.

✓ It's an adventure story, so I want to finish it as quickly as possible.

“adventure”以元音音素开头，前面应使用不定冠词“an”而非“a”。此外，“them”指代单数“story”错误，应改为“it”。

× it's worth a lot of brave imagination.

✓ it requires a lot of brave imagination.

“worth”后面不应接“a lot of”，且表达意思应为“需要很多勇敢的想象力”，故用“requires”更合适。

× I have a lot of motivation about new ideas, so I want to record them so when I am old, maybe in some leisure time I can read them to recall my young years.

✓ I have a lot of motivation about new ideas, so I want to record them so that when I am old, maybe in some leisure time I can read them to recall my youth.

“young years”表达不自然，改为“youth”更地道；“so when”前应加“so that”表示目的。

× Yes, I agree with it because now I'm just a university student, so definitely my plots are quite naive and maybe after some after facing some difficulties in the society, as I grew up my plots were more.

✓ Yes, I agree because now I'm just a university student, so definitely my plots are quite naive. Maybe after facing some difficulties in society and as I grow up, my plots will become more mature.

句子结构混乱，重复“after”，时态不一致，且“my plots were more”不完整，需调整句子结构和时态使表达清晰。

× I don't have too much time focus on this, I have to finish my study task.

✓ I don't have too much time to focus on this; I have to finish my study tasks.

“time”后应接不定式“to focus”，且“study task”应为复数“study tasks”。

× No, actually I don't have the habit to do this kind of things and forcing myself to recall what happened today is quite boring to me.

✓ No, actually I don't have the habit of doing these kinds of things, and forcing myself to recall what happened today is quite boring to me.

“habit”后应接介词“of”加动名词形式，“this kind of things”应改为复数“these kinds of things”。

× taking some photos to capture the most memorable and wonderful moment in my life and the restore them in a lot of place to avoid missing.

✓ taking some photos to capture the most memorable and wonderful moments in my life and then storing them in many places to avoid losing them.

“moment”应为复数“moments”，“the restore”错误，应为“then storing”，“in a lot of place”应为“in many places”，“to avoid missing”表达不完整，应为“to avoid losing them”。