Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using complete sentences and avoiding redundancy. Also, clarify your points with better grammar and vocabulary. For example, instead of 'I was for job notes or doing the exam,' say 'I used to write notes for my studies or exams.'

예시: No, I don't write a lot these days. When I was at school, I used to write notes for my studies and exams. But now, I usually use my phone to record important information.

제안: Improve your answer by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, be more specific and correct in vocabulary, for example, say 'I like to write wish lists or shopping lists because it helps me remember things.'

예시: I like to write wish lists or shopping lists because writing helps me memorise important things I need to buy or achieve.

제안: Focus on clearer sentence structure and vocabulary. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'Yes, I think what I write can change because our thoughts and feelings vary depending on the situation.'

예시: Yes, I believe the things I write can change because our thoughts and feelings often vary depending on the environment and situation.

제안: Work on clarity and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases and use correct vocabulary. For example, say 'I prefer typing because it is easier and more convenient. Also, typing tools often have spell checkers which help improve my writing and save time.'

예시: I prefer typing because it is easier and more convenient. Plus, typing software often has spell checkers that help me write correctly and save time.

제안: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I rarely keep a diary nowadays. However, when I was young, my parents asked me to record my daily routine, which helped me remember memories.'

예시: I don't keep a diary very often these days. But when I was a child, my parents encouraged me to write about my daily routine, which helped me remember special memories.

제안: Use correct grammar and more natural expressions. Link your ideas clearly. For example, say 'Besides taking photos, I like to keep a journal to record my daily experiences. Photos are a common and effective way to capture important moments, which help me remember special times in my life.'

예시: Besides taking photos, I enjoy keeping a journal to record my daily experiences. Photos are a popular and effective way to capture important moments, helping me remember special times in my life.

× When I was studying in school, I was for job notes or doing the exam.

✓ When I was studying in school, I wrote job notes or did exams.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'was for job notes' and 'doing the exam' which are not proper past tense verb forms. The correct past tense verbs 'wrote' and 'did' should be used to describe completed actions in the past.

× I would lay down some wishing list or ingredient list that I need to buy or grab in grocery store.

✓ I would write down some wish lists or ingredient lists that I need to buy or grab in the grocery store.

The singular 'wishing list' and 'ingredient list' should be pluralized to 'wish lists' and 'ingredient lists' to match 'some' which implies plural. Also, 'lay down' is incorrect here; 'write down' is the appropriate phrase for recording lists.

× Guess I do think the thing would change if I write down.

✓ I guess I do think the things would change if I write them down.

The singular 'thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with the context. Also, 'write down' should be followed by an object, so 'them' is added for clarity.

× Our mind and feeling exchange and varies based on the environment and situation.

✓ Our minds and feelings exchange and vary based on the environment and situation.

The plural subjects 'minds and feelings' require plural verbs 'exchange' and 'vary' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× So The thing is easy to change even you write down.

✓ So the things are easy to change even if you write them down.

The singular 'thing' should be plural 'things' to match context. Also, 'even you write down' is missing 'if' and an object; it should be 'even if you write them down'.

× Typing on is most easier and convenient.

✓ Typing is easier and more convenient.

'Most easier' is incorrect because 'easier' is a comparative adjective and should be used with 'more' or alone, not 'most'. Also, 'Typing on' is incorrect; simply 'Typing' suffices.

× Even they have approve free your your writing down so it's very useful and a time crossing.

✓ Even they have approved free tools for your writing down, so it's very useful and time-saving.

The original sentence has unclear pronouns and incorrect word forms. 'Approve' should be 'approved', 'your your' is redundant, and 'a time crossing' is incorrect; 'time-saving' is the correct phrase.

× Nowadays I very wait or keep my diary daily.

✓ Nowadays I rarely write or keep my diary daily.

'Very wait' is incorrect; likely intended 'rarely write'. The verb 'write' fits the context of keeping a diary.

× When I was small, my parents requested me to record our daily routine as diary.

✓ When I was small, my parents asked me to record our daily routine as a diary.

'Requested me to' is less natural than 'asked me to'. Also, 'as diary' needs an article 'a' to be correct.

× I think it's help me to remind the memories.

✓ I think it helps me to remember the memories.

'It's help me' is incorrect; the verb should be 'helps' to agree with 'it'. Also, 'to remind the memories' is incorrect; 'to remember the memories' is correct.

× Besides taking photo, I also like to keep journal to record my daily experience.

✓ Besides taking photos, I also like to keep a journal to record my daily experiences.

'Taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'. 'Keep journal' needs an article 'a'. 'Daily experience' should be plural 'daily experiences'.

× Taking photo is the most common and effective way to capture the important moment.

✓ Taking photos is the most common and effective way to capture important moments.

'Taking photo' should be plural 'photos'. 'The important moment' should be plural 'important moments' without 'the'.

× Not just the world but also my personal life is help me remember a special moment.

✓ Not just the world but also my personal life helps me remember special moments.

'Is help me' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me' to agree with singular subject 'my personal life'. Also, 'a special moment' is better as plural 'special moments' for general meaning.