Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit unclear and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I write quite often, especially recently while preparing for Altex. I use my free time and work breaks to practice writing on various topics, which helps improve my critical thinking and logical skills.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and provide specific reasons why you choose these topics. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I like to write about current issues such as globalization, environmental problems, pollution, and wildlife conservation because these topics are important and often appear in tests. Practicing these helps me prepare better.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly and finish your sentences. Use linking words to explain why and how your writing changes.

예시: Yes, I believe my writing changes over time because I constantly improve it. When situations or trends change, I update my ideas to make my writing more relevant and accurate.

제안: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Avoid starting with 'Yes' when the question is a choice. Clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words and complete sentences.

예시: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and faster. Also, typing on a computer helps me check grammar and spelling mistakes easily, which improves my writing quality.

제안: Your answer has grammar mistakes and is somewhat unclear. Use correct tense and sentence structure. Explain your frequency clearly and describe why you keep a diary, using linking words.

예시: I don't keep a diary very often, maybe once or twice a week. I do this to remember important events and memorable experiences. When I read my diary later, it brings back happy memories.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct vocabulary. Explain how social media helps you record your life, using linking words.

예시: Another effective way I record my life is by sharing unforgettable personal experiences on social media platforms like WeChat or Facebook. This way, my memories are saved and I can revisit them anytime.

× Yes, recently when preparing for Altex, I write a lot to increase my critical thinking and the logical skills to be a good writer.

✓ Yes, recently when preparing for Altex, I have been writing a lot to increase my critical thinking and logical skills to be a good writer.

The original sentence uses simple present tense 'write' to describe a recent ongoing action, which is incorrect. The present perfect continuous tense 'have been writing' is appropriate to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× I write a lot to increase my critical thinking and the logical skills to be a good writer.

✓ I write a lot to increase my critical thinking and logical skills to be a good writer.

The phrase 'the logical skills' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' with a plural noun. Removing 'the' makes the phrase general and grammatically correct.

× As I always write in my free time or during my work breaks, I will focus on different topics about the writing.

✓ As I always write in my free time or during my work breaks, I focus on different topics about writing.

The use of 'will focus' is incorrect here because the sentence describes a habitual action. The simple present tense 'focus' is appropriate for habitual actions.

× I would practice my writing skills in different topics, especially the hot topics like globalization, environmental issue, pollution, Wildlife Conservation.

✓ I would practice my writing skills on different topics, especially hot topics like globalization, environmental issues, pollution, and wildlife conservation.

The phrase 'environmental issue' should be plural 'environmental issues' to match the plural context. Also, 'Wildlife Conservation' should not be capitalized and should be in lowercase as 'wildlife conservation'.

× I would practice my writing skills in different topics, especially the hot topics like globalization, environmental issue, pollution, Wildlife Conservation.

✓ I would practice my writing skills on different topics, especially hot topics like globalization, environmental issues, pollution, and wildlife conservation.

The correct preposition to use with 'practice my writing skills' is 'on' rather than 'in'. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in the list for clarity.

× I would like to equip myself with essential knowledge and materials about these topics so when I face.

✓ I would like to equip myself with essential knowledge and materials about these topics so that when I face them, I am prepared.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object after 'face'. Adding 'so that when I face them, I am prepared' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I do think so because I always makes improvements on my writings and when I see the things change, I will also Polish or alter my original writing ideas to make them alive with the current trends or the real situation that could really reflect the.

✓ Yes, I do think so because I always make improvements on my writings and when I see things change, I will also polish or alter my original writing ideas to make them alive with current trends or the real situation that could really reflect reality.

The verb 'makes' does not agree with the subject 'I'; it should be 'make'. 'Polish' should not be capitalized. 'The things change' should be 'things change' without 'the'. The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion; 'reflect the' is incomplete, so 'reflect reality' is added for clarity.

× Yes, I do think so because I always makes improvements on my writings and when I see the things change, I will also Polish or alter my original writing ideas to make them alive with the current trends or the real situation that could really reflect the.

✓ Yes, I do think so because I always make improvements on my writings and when I see things change, I will also polish or alter my original writing ideas to make them alive with current trends or the real situation that could really reflect reality.

The phrase 'the things change' incorrectly uses 'the' before 'things'. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× Yes, I'm absolutely the writings would be more convenient and easier for me to write them down.

✓ Yes, I'm absolutely sure that writing would be more convenient and easier for me to write down.

The phrase 'the writings' is incorrect; 'writing' (uncountable) is appropriate here. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; adding 'sure that' clarifies the meaning.

× Information and stay typing on computers can also help track your grammar issues or spelling issue.

✓ Typing and staying on computers can also help track your grammar or spelling issues.

The phrase 'Information and stay typing on computers' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrasing to 'Typing and staying on computers' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'spelling issue' should be plural 'spelling issues' to match 'grammar issues'.

× Information and stay typing on computers can also help track your grammar issues or spelling issue.

✓ Typing and staying on computers can also help track your grammar issues or spelling issues.

The phrase 'spelling issue' should be plural 'spelling issues' to be consistent with 'grammar issues'.

× So that would be easy to make good sentences or phrase into my writing as well as give up some good.

✓ So that would make it easier to create good sentences or phrases in my writing as well as add some good points.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Rewriting it clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I was not very often I would like to write a diary once or twice a week just to remember some important things or the memorable experience.

✓ I did not write very often; I would like to write a diary once or twice a week just to remember some important things or memorable experiences.

The phrase 'I was not very often' is incorrect; 'I did not write very often' correctly uses past tense. Also, 'the memorable experience' should be plural 'memorable experiences' to match the context.

× So that's when I as read through them.

✓ So that's when I read through them.

The phrase 'I as read' is incorrect; removing 'as' corrects the sentence.

× I will have I will still remembers and bring the happy face of my happy smile on my face.

✓ I will still remember and bring a happy smile to my face.

The phrase 'I will have I will still remembers' is incorrect and redundant. 'Remembers' should be 'remember' to agree with the subject. The phrase 'bring the happy face of my happy smile on my face' is awkward; simplifying to 'bring a happy smile to my face' is clearer.

× As one of the most effective ways is to share my personal experience that are unforgettable on social media like we track or Facebook and they will be kept well so that I can even chat over dorms when I remember.

✓ One of the most effective ways is to share my personal experiences that are unforgettable on social media like WeChat or Facebook, and they will be kept well so that I can even chat over dorms when I remember.

The phrase 'As one of the most effective ways is' is awkward; removing 'As' improves clarity. 'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to agree with 'that are'. 'We track' is a misspelling of 'WeChat'. The sentence is long and could be clearer with commas.