Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'because', use 'since' or 'as'.

예시: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially as an IELTS student. I usually spend two to three hours daily practicing writing since it helps improve my skills. Additionally, when I feel stressed, I like to write stories to relax and clear my mind.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly. Also, avoid long, confusing sentences.

예시: I like to write stories because when I feel stressed from studying, writing helps me relax. For instance, recently I wrote a story which made me feel better and less depressed.

제안: Your answer has some awkward phrasing and grammar issues. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words like 'therefore' correctly. Also, avoid redundancy.

예시: I don't think the things I write will change because writing stories is an easy way for me to express my thoughts. Therefore, I plan to continue writing stories to refresh my mind.

제안: Your answer is a bit off-topic and repetitive. Try to answer directly and use relevant vocabulary. Also, connect your ideas with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I prefer typing because we live in a modern era where electronic devices are common. For example, I often send messages to my friends and family using my smartphone, so I am comfortable with typing.

제안: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Try to give a clear and complete response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

예시: I keep a diary twice a day. Since I study for six hours daily as an IELTS student, I don't have much free time. However, I usually write in my diary at night when I am free.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentences and correct verb forms. Also, use linking words like 'for example' properly.

예시: Besides keeping a diary, I record my life by writing about important events. For example, a few days ago I was sick, and I wrote about what happened and how I recovered to remember it later.

× This because I think it is beneficial for me to enhance my writing performance.

✓ This is because I think it is beneficial for me to enhance my writing performance.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'This'. In English, 'There be' issues include missing forms of 'to be'. Here, 'This' needs to be followed by 'is' to form a correct sentence structure.

× whenever I feel exhausted, I tend to write stories or many many kind of things to avoid depression.

✓ whenever I feel exhausted, I tend to write stories or many kinds of things to avoid depression.

The phrase 'many many kind of things' is incorrect because 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when preceded by 'many'. Also, 'many many' is redundant. Correct plural form is necessary for proper meaning.

× If I need to talk about write something and I think it has to be stories, this because sometimes I feel exhausted that to study pressure, then I just take a pen or notebook in order to write any stories, which happened with me recently and I immediately realized that it is beneficial for me to avoid depression.

✓ If I need to talk about writing something, I think it has to be stories. This is because sometimes I feel exhausted due to study pressure, so I just take a pen or notebook to write stories. This happened to me recently and I immediately realized that it is beneficial for me to avoid depression.

The original sentence is long and confusing with incorrect structure. 'talk about write' should be 'talk about writing'. 'this because' needs 'is'. 'exhausted that to study pressure' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'exhausted due to study pressure'. The sentence is broken into smaller parts for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From my perspective, not this is because writing stories is more convenient for me to express my inner thoughts as well as it plays a vital role in refreshing my minds.

✓ From my perspective, not this is because writing stories is more convenient for me to express my inner thoughts as well as it plays a vital role in refreshing my mind.

The phrase 'refreshing my minds' is incorrect because 'mind' should be singular here. Also, the sentence is awkward; 'not this' is unclear but kept as original. The plural 'minds' is a singular/plural issue.

× Therefore, I think I will keep writing stories because of it is easy to write rather than any other.

✓ Therefore, I think I will keep writing stories because it is easier to write than any other.

The phrase 'because of it is easy' is incorrect; it should be 'because it is easier'. Also, 'rather than any other' should be 'than any other'. The pronoun and comparative form are used incorrectly.

× I also have a smartphone and I always tend to send messages to my friend, to my loved ones.

✓ I also have a smartphone and I always tend to send messages to my friends, to my loved ones.

The word 'friend' should be plural 'friends' because messages are usually sent to multiple people. This is a singular/plural issue but also relates to preposition usage with plural nouns.

× Two times in a day. This is because as an IELTS student, I need to study at least six hours in a day.

✓ Two times a day. This is because as an IELTS student, I need to study at least six hours a day.

The phrase 'in a day' is less natural than 'a day' in these contexts. Also, 'two times in a day' should be 'two times a day'. This is a singular/plural and preposition usage issue.

× Moreover, if I honestly talk about it at night. This is because I become free at this time as well as there is no.

✓ Moreover, if I honestly talk about it, I do so at night. This is because I become free at this time and there is no distraction.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. 'if I honestly talk about it at night.' is a fragment. It needs to be connected properly. Also, 'there is no' is incomplete and needs an object like 'distraction' to complete the thought.

× I think it has to be writing this because I have a diary and if something else exceptional or terrible happened with me, I just write it into it to remember it later.

✓ I think it has to be writing because I have a diary, and if something exceptional or terrible happens to me, I just write it in to remember it later.

The phrase 'happened with me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'happens to me'. Also, 'write it into it' should be 'write it in'. Preposition usage is incorrect here.

× To illustrate, a few days ago I faced with a disease and I just wrote that what happened with me and how I survived?

✓ To illustrate, a few days ago I faced a disease and I just wrote about what happened to me and how I survived.

The phrase 'faced with a disease' should be 'faced a disease'. Also, 'happened with me' should be 'happened to me'. The question mark is unnecessary as the sentence is a statement. Preposition usage is incorrect.