Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows personal feelings, which is good. However, it could be more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't write very often, but I do when I'm feeling sad or happy because I find that writing helps me to heal or feel excited.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be more specific about what you write and why.

예시: I mostly like to write about my daily life because it helps me reflect on my experiences and learn from them, so I can improve myself in the future.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid repeating the same ideas and use linking words to make your answer more logical. Also, provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I believe my writings would change over time because as I practice more, I improve my skills and can express my thoughts more clearly.

제안: Your answer shows preference but is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to connect your reasons clearly.

예시: I definitely prefer handwriting because it helps me improve my vocabulary, practise writing better, and remember things more thoroughly.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with correct tense and structure, and provide specific details. Avoid hesitation sounds like 'Umm' in your response.

예시: I used to keep a diary often when I was young because it was a way to express my feelings when no one else would listen, and to remember important events later.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organise your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and avoid vague phrases. Provide specific examples and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I usually use my mobile phone to record memories, such as videos or photos of happy moments. This helps me remember important experiences, whether they are good or bad.

× I mostly like to write about my daily life because I think writing my own life, theories and situations so in future I can do better than the past.

✓ I mostly like to write about my daily life because I think writing about my own life, theories and situations helps me so in the future I can do better than in the past.

The original sentence lacks a verb after 'writing' which causes a sentence structure error and present tense inconsistency. Adding 'about' and 'helps me' corrects the sentence structure and maintains present tense usage. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future' for correct preposition use.

× Umm, I often keep Diaries when I was young because when no one listens to me, I write about it and remember it in my future.

✓ Umm, I often kept diaries when I was young because when no one listened to me, I wrote about it and remembered it for my future.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs ('keep', 'listens', 'write', 'remember') with a past time reference ('when I was young'). To maintain tense consistency, all verbs referring to past actions should be in the past tense. Also, 'Diaries' should not be capitalized.

× There are not that really mattered but there is one thing that I can recall my life into is my mobile phone by recording the memories.

✓ There are not many things that really matter but there is one thing I can recall my life with, which is my mobile phone by recording memories.

The phrase 'recall my life into' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with' or 'through'. Also, 'not that really mattered' is awkward and should be 'not many things that really matter' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Like if we having a happy situation, I will definitely record it.

✓ Like if we have a happy situation, I will definitely record it.

The phrase 'if we having' is incorrect; the correct present tense form is 'if we have'. 'Having' is a present participle and cannot be used directly after 'if' without an auxiliary verb.

× If I had a bad or sad experience, I will record it.

✓ If I have a bad or sad experience, I will record it.

The sentence mixes past tense 'had' with future tense 'will record'. For a real conditional sentence referring to future actions, the present tense 'have' should be used in the 'if' clause.