Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains irrelevant information, such as mentioning PayPal, which confuses the response. Try to focus directly on the question by explaining what you write and why, using clear and concise sentences. Avoid redundancy and ensure your answer is coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I write quite often, mainly on my laptop and phone because it's convenient. Recently, I've been writing many articles to improve my English skills.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Try to directly answer what you like to write and explain why, using specific examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid vague statements.

예시: I like to write about my problems and thoughts because it helps me find solutions and feel relieved. For example, writing in a journal allows me to organise my ideas clearly.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and smooth linking. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, be more specific about how your writing changes.

예시: Yes, the things I write often change because I review my notes and adjust my plans. For instance, if I find a better way to solve a problem, I update my schedule accordingly.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and could be more concise. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer typing on my phone or laptop because my handwriting is poor. Moreover, typing is faster and more convenient, especially when I have deadlines.

× I use my cell phones, My laptop computers compared to using PayPal is really convenient because I don't need to edit a lot of things and I can find my errors and mistakes.

✓ I use my cell phone and my laptop computer compared to using PayPal; it is really convenient because I don't need to edit a lot of things and I can find my errors and mistakes.

The original sentence incorrectly uses plural forms 'cell phones' and 'laptop computers' when referring to the speaker's own devices, which should be singular. Also, the sentence structure is unclear; using singular nouns and proper conjunctions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Nowadays I started to learn English, so I had to write lots of articles.

✓ Nowadays I have started to learn English, so I have had to write lots of articles.

The phrase 'Nowadays' indicates a present time frame, so the past tense 'started' and 'had to' are inconsistent. Using present perfect tense 'have started' and 'have had to' aligns the sentence with the current ongoing action.

× Especially when we have lots of problems, it's really important to write it in on paper and cell phone and the like, because lots of articles show that when we write our problems, 15% of problems will be reduced and also we can find solution.

✓ Especially when we have lots of problems, it's really important to write them on paper, on a cell phone, or the like, because many articles show that when we write our problems down, 15% of problems will be reduced and we can also find solutions.

The original sentence misuses prepositions 'in on' and lacks articles before 'paper' and 'cell phone'. Also, 'write it' should be 'write them' to agree with 'problems'. Correct prepositions and plural forms improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× It's a relief ourselves when we get.

✓ It is a relief for ourselves when we do so.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'ourselves' without a preposition and ends abruptly. Adding 'for' before 'ourselves' and completing the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× I believe that then we're right, we can find a solution.

✓ I believe that when we're right, we can find a solution.

The word 'then' is incorrectly used instead of 'when' to indicate a condition. Although not strictly a singular/plural issue, this correction improves sentence meaning and clarity.

× I sometimes write about different issues and also problems by myself and I look at them and I focus on better I can find a solution.

✓ I sometimes write about different issues and problems by myself, and I look at them and focus on how I can find a better solution.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun reference and awkward phrasing. Adding 'how' and rearranging improves clarity and corrects pronoun and sentence structure issues.

× I prefer to writing by my cell phone and laptop is really comfortable for me and I can do it in the due time.

✓ I prefer writing on my cell phone and laptop; it is really comfortable for me and I can do it on time.

The phrase 'prefer to writing' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer writing'. Also, 'by my cell phone' should be 'on my cell phone'. 'In the due time' is not idiomatic; 'on time' is correct. These prepositional corrections improve grammatical accuracy.