Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了写作习惯的变化，但语言不够自然，有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的时态表达。

예시: I didn't write much in the past, but recently I have been preparing for health exams, so I write almost two articles every day.

제안: 回答中有重复和断句不连贯的问题，表达不够清晰。建议使用完整句子，避免重复，并用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅。

예시: I like to write novels because they are mysterious and romantic. Through stories, I can describe many different characters and beautiful places.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够准确。建议简化句子，避免双重否定，并用更清晰的语言表达观点。

예시: Yes, I think everything changes over time. I accept this and continue to write about what interests me.

제안: 回答不完整且语法混乱，表达不清晰。建议完整回答问题，使用正确的时态和句子结构，并清楚说明原因。

예시: In the past, I usually wrote by hand, but recently I prefer typing because I am preparing for the IELTS exam.

× In the past, I didn't write a lot, but in recent days I will prepare for the health exams.

✓ In the past, I didn't write a lot, but recently I have been preparing for the health exams.

这里使用了将来时态“will prepare”，但根据上下文，应该表达的是最近正在进行的动作，应该用现在完成进行时或现在完成时，表示动作从过去持续到现在。

× I often I write almost two articles every day.

✓ I often write almost two articles every day.

句子中重复使用了“I”，造成语法错误，应去掉多余的“I”。

× I'd like to write a novel, novel novels, because I think it's very mysterious and so romantic.

✓ I'd like to write a novel because I think it's very mysterious and romantic.

这里“novel novels”重复且混用单复数，应保持单数形式“a novel”。

× Story. It's a story I can describe many different roles and places.

✓ It's a story where I can describe many different roles and places.

“Story.”单独成句不完整，应与后句合并，且用关系代词“where”连接，使句子完整。

× They can all be so pretty.

✓ They can all be very pretty.

“so pretty”在此语境中不太合适，改为“very pretty”更自然。

× Nothing can never be be internal.

✓ Nothing can ever be eternal.

“can never be be internal”中有双重否定且单词拼写错误，应改为“can ever be eternal”，表达“没有什么是永恒的”。

× So I just accept it and continue to describe the things I want to write.

✓ So I just accept it and continue describing the things I want to write.

“continue to describe”虽然语法正确，但“continue describing”更自然流畅。

× As as I said I in the past, I usually hand. I usually handwriting, but in the recent days I prefer typing because I the IELTS exam for me, I am prepared for the.

✓ As I said, in the past, I usually wrote by hand. But recently, I prefer typing because I am preparing for the IELTS exam.

原句结构混乱，缺少动词，且“hand”用法错误，应改为“wrote by hand”；“in the recent days”应改为“recently”；“I the IELTS exam for me, I am prepared for the”语序错误，应调整为“I am preparing for the IELTS exam”。