Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语句不够连贯，有重复和语法错误，建议简化表达，避免重复，并注意句子完整性。

예시: Yes, I write quite often, especially when my thoughts are jumbled. Writing helps me organize my ideas and clear my mind.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和口语化表达，建议使用更准确的语法结构，并丰富细节使表达更自然。

예시: I mostly enjoy writing romantic novels because it helps me relax and take my mind off academic stress.

제안: 回答中充满犹豫词和重复，表达不够流畅，建议减少填充词，使用完整句子，并具体说明原因。

예시: Yes, I think my writing will change in the future. I plan to try science fiction because recently I've been reading a lot of books in that genre.

제안: 回答不完整且有语法错误，表达不清晰，建议完整表达观点，避免错误词汇，增强逻辑连贯性。

예시: I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the tactile feeling of holding a pen and writing on paper. It feels more personal than typing.

× Yes actually I'm a huge fan of writing especially when I when my thoughts are jumbled cause writing is not just putting words down on paper for me and more importantly it is a process of clearing my thoughts and.

✓ Yes, actually I'm a huge fan of writing, especially when my thoughts are jumbled, because writing is not just putting words down on paper for me; more importantly, it is a process of clearing my thoughts.

句子中存在重复的“when I when”，应删除多余部分；另外，连接词“cause”应改为正式的“because”；句子结构较长，适当使用标点符号使句子更清晰。

× Most of the time I like to write some. Novels, especially some romantic novels, cause yeah, it is just a effective approach to chilling out and taking my mind of academic pressure.

✓ Most of the time I like to write novels, especially romantic novels, because yeah, it is just an effective approach to chilling out and taking my mind off academic pressure.

“some”在此处使用不当，直接使用复数名词“novels”更合适；“a effective”应为“an effective”，因为effective以元音音素开头；“taking my mind of”应为“taking my mind off”，介词使用错误。

× Yes, umm, I, if I were to guess, I would definitely say, uh, in the future I will uh, try maybe some science fiction cause, uh, recent, in the recent, uh, time I read a lot of science.

✓ Yes, umm, if I were to guess, I would definitely say that in the future I will try maybe some science fiction because recently I have read a lot of science.

“cause”应改为正式的“because”；“recent, in the recent, uh, time”表达重复且不准确，改为“recently”更自然；“science”后缺少名词，需补充完整或改为“science fiction”。

× Well, to be honest, I prefer to choose handwriting 'cause I just fancy the feeling that I hold the penny and it on the paper. Yeah, the filling is fantastic and typing is just so.

✓ Well, to be honest, I prefer handwriting because I just fancy the feeling of holding the pen and putting it on the paper. Yeah, the feeling is fantastic and typing is just so-so.

“prefer to choose handwriting”表达冗余，直接用“prefer handwriting”更简洁；“the feeling that I hold the penny and it on the paper”中“hold the penny and it”不通顺，应改为“the feeling of holding the pen and putting it on the paper”；“filling”应为“feeling”；“typing is just so”表达不完整，补充为“typing is just so-so”。