Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构较简单，且有些语法错误。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复。

예시: No, I don't write very often because I find writing challenging and I'm not very confident in my skills.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持，并使用连接词使句子连贯。

예시: I like to write birthday congratulations to my friends because it makes me feel happy to express my good wishes.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不准确，句子不连贯。建议用更清晰的句子表达观点，并用连接词连接句子。

예시: Yes, I believe what I write will change in the future because nothing is permanent and our thoughts evolve over time.

제안: 回答内容较完整，但句子较长且有语法错误。建议分句表达，并注意主谓一致和连词使用。

예시: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and faster than handwriting. Also, I can type anywhere using my mobile phone or computer.

× Early I read birthday congratulation to my friends and because to write this made me make me feel happy.

✓ Earlier, I read birthday congratulations to my friends because writing this made me feel happy.

The sentence has incorrect word forms and structure. 'Early' should be 'Earlier' to indicate time. 'Birthday congratulation' should be plural 'birthday congratulations'. The phrase 'because to write this made me make me feel happy' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'because writing this made me feel happy'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I think the things are right would change in the future because everything wasn't. Permanent, it will change.

✓ Yes, I think the things that are right will change in the future because nothing is permanent; everything will change.

The original sentence has plural and singular agreement issues and incorrect tense usage. 'Things are right' is awkward; adding 'that' clarifies the meaning. 'Wasn't permanent' is past tense and negative; it should be present tense 'nothing is permanent' to express a general truth. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer typing because I think typing is very convenient and more quickly than handwriting, and the mobile phone and computer is very convenient to take so I can type everywhere.

✓ I prefer typing because I think typing is very convenient and faster than handwriting, and mobile phones and computers are very convenient to carry, so I can type anywhere.

The adverb 'more quickly' is incorrectly used; it should be the comparative adjective 'faster' to compare convenience. 'The mobile phone and computer is' has subject-verb agreement errors; it should be plural 'mobile phones and computers are'. 'Convenient to take' is awkward; 'convenient to carry' is better. 'Everywhere' is better replaced with 'anywhere' in this context. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.