Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a direct response first, then add clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

예시: No, I don't write much since I started working because I use a laptop for most tasks. I rarely write by hand nowadays, but when necessary, I type letters on my computer.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, try to explain your feelings with specific reasons to enrich your response.

예시: I don't enjoy writing much, especially by hand, because it feels like a burden to me. Therefore, I usually avoid it whenever possible.

제안: Your answer is quite unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific examples or explanations. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I believe writing can help change your thoughts. For example, when I write down my problems clearly on paper, it helps me understand them better and sometimes reduces my worries.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using smoother linking words and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid filler sounds like 'uh' and be more specific about your preferences.

예시: I prefer typing for official work because it is faster and more convenient. However, for personal things like writing goals or wishes, I like to write by hand as it feels more personal.

× there is a practice of writing is a, a almost valid.

✓ there is a practice of writing that is almost valid.

The original sentence has a redundant 'is' and awkward phrasing. Correcting it to 'there is a practice of writing that is almost valid' clarifies the meaning and fixes the sentence structure.

× I don't write after starting a job and, uh, having a laptop or computer

✓ I haven't written since starting a job and, uh, having a laptop or computer

The phrase 'write after starting a job' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate time from a point is 'since'. Also, the present perfect tense 'haven't written' fits better to express an action not done from that time until now.

× I'm not a fond of writing

✓ I'm not fond of writing

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'fond'. 'Fond' is an adjective and does not require an article before it. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× I type letter using my laptop.

✓ I type letters using my laptop.

The noun 'letter' should be plural 'letters' to match the context of writing generally. Also, 'using' is correctly used here.

× Sometimes when it comes to write by hand using pen or marker, I feel burden so I usually avoid that.

✓ Sometimes when it comes to writing by hand using a pen or marker, I feel burdened so I usually avoid that.

The phrase 'comes to write' is incorrect; it should be 'comes to writing'. Also, 'pen' and 'marker' need the article 'a' before them. 'Feel burden' is incorrect; it should be 'feel burdened' to express the feeling properly.

× the things you are thinking about. So those problems comes 50% if it is clearly able to write on a paper.

✓ the things you are thinking about. So those problems come 50% if you are clearly able to write on paper.

'Problems' is plural, so the verb should be 'come' not 'comes'. Also, 'it is clearly able to write' is incorrect; it should be 'you are clearly able to write'. 'On a paper' is better as 'on paper' in this context.

× I want to manifest something.

✓ I want to manifest something.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× For official jobs, any UH office work, I need to prefer UH typing,

✓ For official jobs, any office work, I prefer typing,

The phrase 'I need to prefer' is incorrect; 'I prefer' is the correct expression. Also, 'UH' seems unnecessary or unclear and is removed for clarity.

× but when it comes to my personal things like some goals, some wishes, or anything I have to give personally so I prefer to write on paper.

✓ but when it comes to my personal things like some goals, some wishes, or anything I have to give personally, I prefer to write on paper.

A comma is needed before 'I prefer' to separate the clauses properly. The rest of the sentence is correct.