Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "as well as" twice in the same sentence. Also, try to use simpler linking words like "and" or "because" to improve fluency.

예시: Yes, I write quite a lot because it is an essential part of my studies. I enjoy writing since it helps me reflect on my thoughts and organise my ideas clearly.

제안: Try to reduce hesitation sounds like "uh" and improve sentence structure. Also, clarify your ideas and avoid contradictions. For example, you said you don't like writing journals but then said it allows you to reflect on experiences. Use linking words like "however" or "but" properly and keep your answer coherent.

예시: I prefer writing tasks related to my studies because I find them more interesting. Although I don't usually write journals or stories, I sometimes reflect on my daily experiences to understand myself better. For instance, I am currently preparing for my IELTS exam.

제안: Focus on correcting grammar and sentence clarity. Use proper tenses and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words like "because" or "as" to explain reasons clearly.

예시: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time as my experience and knowledge grow. For example, when I was younger, I used simple words, but now I try to write more complex sentences.

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Avoid repetition and incomplete ideas. Use linking words like "so" or "because" to explain your preferences logically.

예시: It depends on the task. I prefer typing when sending messages to my friends because it is faster. However, I use handwriting for my study tasks because it helps me remember better.

× I enjoy writing as my subject because it reflects on my thoughts as well as it is a great way for me to organize my ideas and maintain clarity.

✓ I enjoy writing as my subject because it reflects my thoughts as well as being a great way for me to organize my ideas and maintain clarity.

The phrase 'as well as it is' is incorrect here. The correct form is 'as well as being' to connect the two ideas properly using the present participle form.

× I like, uh, uh, to write only the task, uh, related to my study because I am not interested in writing journals or show stories, but uh, that allow me to reflect on my daily experience and emotions, which help me understand myself better.

✓ I like to write only tasks related to my study because I am not interested in writing journals or short stories, but they allow me to reflect on my daily experiences and emotions, which help me understand myself better.

The phrase 'the task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context (plural). 'Show stories' is incorrect; the correct term is 'short stories'. Also, 'that allow' should be 'they allow' to correctly refer to the plural subject. 'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the context.

× So for example, uh, now I am preparation for my eyes exam.

✓ So for example, uh, now I am preparing for my eye exam.

The verb 'preparation' is a noun; the correct verb form is 'preparing' (present participle) to indicate the ongoing action. Also, 'eyes exam' should be 'eye exam' as it is a fixed phrase.

× Yes, I believe the things are are the right would change overtime as again my experience and knowledge.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I write would change over time as I gain more experience and knowledge.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'are are the right' is incorrect and should be 'I write'. 'Overtime' should be two words 'over time'. 'Again' should be 'gain' to indicate acquiring experience and knowledge.

× For example, when I was younger I write only simple words, but now I try to make complexity in my writing.

✓ For example, when I was younger I wrote only simple words, but now I try to make my writing more complex.

The verb 'write' should be in past tense 'wrote' to match 'when I was younger'. Also, 'make complexity' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make my writing more complex'.

× Well it depends on my work. Whenever I want to send my send message to my friends then I prefer typing as well as whenever I like to write my task then I use handwriting because it is only way and it is a low.

✓ Well, it depends on my work. Whenever I want to send a message to my friends, I prefer typing. However, when I want to write my tasks, I use handwriting because it is the only way and it is slow.

The sentence has repetition 'send my send message' which should be 'send a message'. The conjunctions and sentence flow are awkward; splitting into two sentences improves clarity. 'My task' should be plural 'my tasks'. 'It is only way and it is a low' is unclear; corrected to 'it is the only way and it is slow' for meaning.