Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有点冗长且有语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意时态和词汇的准确使用。例如，可以用更自然的表达方式来描述写日记的目的。

예시: Yes, I write a diary every day to record important events and feelings. It helps me reflect on both happy and sad moments and refresh my mind.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

예시: I like to write a diary because it records my daily experiences. Writing helps me refresh my mind, and I can look back to remember what happened each day.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达不准确的问题，建议用更清晰的句子表达观点，并避免重复。

예시: No, I don't think what I write will change because I record exactly what happened each day in my diary.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅，建议简洁表达偏好，并用正确的语法和词汇。

예시: I prefer typing because I often use a computer for work. Typing is more efficient and faster than handwriting.

× I like to write diary every day to remember the things happened during the day, especially for the happy things and also with the sad things that could help me to umm rebuild and refresh my mind and just look back what happened during the day.

✓ I like to write in my diary every day to remember the things that happened during the day, especially the happy things and also the sad things that could help me to umm rebuild and refresh my mind and just look back at what happened during the day.

The phrase 'write diary' is incorrect; it should be 'write in my diary' because 'diary' is a countable noun and requires a preposition here. Also, 'look back what happened' should be 'look back at what happened' to use the correct preposition after 'look back'.

× I like to ride a diary because it just happened during the day.

✓ I like to write in a diary because it just happened during the day.

The verb 'ride' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'write'. Also, 'write in a diary' is the correct phrase because 'diary' is a place where you write, so the preposition 'in' is needed.

× You can write down what happened and you can record your days and you also can refresh your mind.

✓ You can write down what happened, record your days, and also refresh your mind.

The sentence is repetitive with 'you can' multiple times; it is more natural and grammatically correct to combine the verbs with commas and conjunctions. This improves sentence flow and clarity.

× And when you look back, right when you're writing down the theory, you can look back what happened during the day.

✓ And when you look back, right when you're writing down the diary, you can look back at what happened during the day.

The word 'theory' is incorrect; it should be 'diary'. Also, 'look back what happened' should be 'look back at what happened' to use the correct preposition after 'look back'.

× So what I write, the content is the two things that happened during the day.

✓ So what I write is the true content of the things that happened during the day.

The phrase 'the two things' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'true content' or 'actual content' fits better. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I prefer typing rather than writing because I used to work use my computer to work, so typing is the way more efficiency and I can type more compared to write.

✓ I prefer typing rather than writing because I used to use my computer to work, so typing is much more efficient and I can type more compared to writing.

The phrase 'used to work use my computer to work' is incorrect; it should be 'used to use my computer to work'. Also, 'the way more efficiency' is incorrect; it should be 'much more efficient'. Finally, 'compared to write' should be 'compared to writing' because after 'compared to' a gerund is needed.