Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, instead of repeating 'certificates', you can say 'I have earned many certificates for my writing achievements.'

예시: Yes, I have been writing a lot since I was a child. For instance, my journal from grade 2 was full of my writings. Moreover, I have earned many certificates for my writing achievements.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea twice and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary instead of repeating 'expresses my feelings'.

예시: I enjoy writing diaries because they allow me to share my emotions and reflect on my daily experiences. Every day, I write about what I did, which helps me understand my feelings better and makes writing enjoyable.

제안: Make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples. Also, clarify your points to make them easier to understand.

예시: Absolutely, the things I write have changed over time. When I was a kid, I used to write diaries about my daily activities. As I grew older, I started writing fictional stories and even drew illustrations to accompany them.

제안: Avoid repeating the same phrase and complete your sentences fully. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and provide specific reasons.

예시: I prefer handwriting because it allows me to connect more personally with my writing. When I write by hand, I feel that I can better express my feelings and thoughts compared to typing.

× Yeah, I do write a lot from when I was a kid.

✓ Yeah, I have written a lot since I was a kid.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the present tense 'do write' with a past time reference 'from when I was a kid'. The correct form is present perfect 'have written' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× My journal in grade 2 was full with writings.

✓ My journal in grade 2 was full of writings.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect after 'full'. The correct preposition is 'of' to indicate what the journal was full of.

× I have earned a lot of certificates about certificates because I achieved writing.

✓ I have earned a lot of certificates for writing because I achieved success.

The phrase 'certificates about certificates' is redundant and unclear. The correct phrase is 'certificates for writing' to specify the reason for the certificates. Also, 'achieved writing' is incorrect; 'achieved success' or 'achieved in writing' is better.

× What do you like to write?

✓ What do you like to write?

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I like to write Diaries 'cause it expresses my feelings.

✓ I like to write diaries because it expresses my feelings.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× Every day I write what I did in my day, it expresses my feelings and I enjoy writing.

✓ Every day, I write about what I did; it expresses my feelings, and I enjoy writing.

The original sentence is a comma splice combining two independent clauses with a comma. It should be separated by a semicolon or split into two sentences for clarity.

× Do you think the things you write would change?

✓ Do you think the things you write will change?

The modal verb 'would' is incorrect here because the question is about a future possibility. 'Will' is the correct modal verb to express future tense.

× When I was a kid, I used to write.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to write.

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I used to write Diaries.

✓ I used to write diaries.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun.

× What I did in my day and while I grew up, I wrote stories, fictional stories and drew the things.

✓ I wrote about what I did in my day, and as I grew up, I wrote fictional stories and drew things.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct conjunction use.

× Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?

✓ Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you write?

The phrase 'when you are writing' is correct but can be simplified to 'when you write' for smoother expression.

× I prefer handwriting 'cause.

✓ I prefer handwriting because...

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. It should be completed to express the reason.

× I prefer handwriting 'cause I'm able to write and I express my feelings when I write.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I'm able to write and express my feelings when I write.

The phrase 'and I express' is redundant after 'I'm able to write'. It is smoother to say 'and express' to connect the ideas.