Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“I'm writing diary”应为“I write a diary”或“I keep a diary”。另外，表达不够连贯，且有些词汇使用不准确，如“bold life”应为“busy life”。建议加强语法基础，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子结构的完整性。

예시: Yes, I write in my diary every day. I find writing a good way to escape from my busy life. It helps me relax both mentally and physically, and also allows me to record my thoughts and experiences.

제안: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，如“the things of every day”应为“about my daily life”。此外，缺少连贯的连接词，导致表达不流畅。建议使用更具体的词汇，并通过连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I like to write about my daily life in my diary. Usually, I record my daily routines and feelings. When I feel bored, writing helps me pass the time and express my thoughts.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，如“complicated the over harmed work”难以理解。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用恰当的词汇。

예시: Yes, the things I write change as my life changes. Every day, I have different tasks to handle, and sometimes my work is complicated and tiring, which makes me feel bored.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“a handwriting”应为“handwriting”，且句子结构不完整。建议使用更准确的表达，简洁明了地说明原因，并注意句子连贯。

예시: I prefer handwriting because writing with a pen helps me feel relaxed. It is a wonderful way for me to enjoy my free time and express myself.

× Yes, I'm writing diary every day.

✓ Yes, I write a diary every day.

这里的动作是习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时，而不是现在进行时。'writing diary' 应改为 'write a diary'，因为'diary'是可数名词，前面需要冠词。

× I'm writing diary every day.

✓ I write a diary every day.

'diary'是可数名词，前面需要冠词'a'。

× I think writing is a good way for me to escape from the bold life.

✓ I think writing is a good way for me to escape from the busy life.

'bold'（大胆的）用错了，应该用形容词'busy'（忙碌的）来形容生活。

× It loosens me up in my mind and the body and it help me to record the.

✓ It loosens me up in my mind and body and it helps me to record it.

主语'it'是单数，谓语动词应加's'，即'helps'。'the body'前的定冠词'the'不必要，且句尾缺少宾语，应补充完整。

× I would like to write the things of every day.

✓ I would like to write about the things of every day.

'write the things'表达不完整，应该加介词'about'表示写关于某事。

× daily routine is the usual extent of my diary.

✓ daily routine is the usual content of my diary.

'extent'（程度）用错了，应该用'content'（内容）来表达日记的内容。

× I think when I feel so bored, I would write it down.

✓ I think when I feel bored, I write it down.

'feel bored'是固定搭配，不需要加副词'so'。另外，习惯性动作用一般现在时，故将'would write'改为'write'。

× Yes the things I write would change as the life changes because every day I have many things to manage and complicated the over harmed work so it makes me feel so boring.

✓ Yes, the things I write change as life changes because every day I have many things to manage and complicated, overwhelming work, so it makes me feel bored.

'would change'改为一般现在时'change'，因为是事实陈述。'the life'中的定冠词'the'不必要。'complicated the over harmed work'表达混乱，改为'complicated, overwhelming work'更通顺。'feel so boring'应改为'feel bored'，因为'bored'是感受的形容词。

× Yes I would like a handwriting because I think using pen to write can make me feel so relaxed and it is a marvelous form for me from a recreation and it help me.

✓ Yes, I would like handwriting because I think using a pen to write can make me feel relaxed and it is a marvelous form of recreation for me and it helps me.

'a handwriting'错误，'handwriting'不可数名词，不用冠词。'using pen'应为'using a pen'。'from a recreation'表达错误，应为'of recreation'。'it help me'主谓不一致，应为'it helps me'。