Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and keep your sentences concise and relevant. For example, clarify what you mean by 'stories dirty' and 'the code' to avoid confusion.

예시: Yes, I write quite a lot, mostly journals about my personal and professional life. Sometimes, I also enjoy writing about daily events, including both positive and negative experiences.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to enhance coherence. Avoid repeating similar ideas and try to be more specific about why you prefer writing journals.

예시: I prefer writing journals because they provide a private space where I can honestly express my thoughts about both my personal and professional life. This helps me reflect on my daily experiences and feelings.

제안: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to show contrast between past and present writing preferences. Also, complete your sentences to avoid confusion.

예시: Yes, I think my writing has changed over time. When I was a child, I enjoyed writing stories about cartoons and movies. However, now I mostly write personal journals that reflect my daily life.

제안: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words to compare typing and handwriting clearly. Be specific about why you prefer typing and when you use handwriting.

예시: I have mixed feelings about typing and handwriting. I prefer typing because my job at the optometric clinic requires it, but I also value handwriting for writing short stories or personal notes.

× I write a quiet.

✓ I write quite a bit.

The phrase 'a quiet' is incorrect because 'quiet' is an adjective, not a noun. The correct phrase is 'quite a bit' to indicate a large amount of writing.

× I would prefer to write mostly about the journals, stories dirty to my personal as well as professional life.

✓ I would prefer to write mostly about journals and stories related to my personal as well as professional life.

The phrase 'stories dirty to' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'related to' to show connection. Also, 'the journals' should be 'journals' without 'the' because it is general.

× Uh, sometime I would like to enjoy to write the my daily life things that is happening such as the bad things as well as the code.

✓ Sometimes I would like to enjoy writing about my daily life events that are happening, such as the bad things as well as the good.

The phrase 'enjoy to write' is incorrect; 'enjoy writing' is correct. 'The my daily life things' is incorrect; it should be 'my daily life events'. Also, 'code' seems to be a typo for 'good'.

× I would prefer to write the journals which are dated to my personal life.

✓ I would prefer to write journals which are dated to my personal life.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'journals' when speaking generally.

× So I could say that is a private space for me and I never shared it with anyone else.

✓ So I could say that it is a private space for me and I have never shared it with anyone else.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' after 'that'. Also, 'never shared' should be 'have never shared' to indicate experience up to now.

× So in that I will always like to include my professional as well as the personal life and also the thoughts of the daily life.

✓ So in that, I will always like to include my professional as well as personal life and also my daily thoughts.

'The personal life' and 'the daily life' are better expressed without 'the' and 'thoughts of the daily life' is awkward; 'daily thoughts' is clearer.

× The things I did I would almost a change.

✓ The things I did have almost changed.

The original sentence is ungrammatical. The correct present perfect form 'have almost changed' expresses change over time.

× I've preferred to write about the. Stories related to the cartoons, movies, etc and.

✓ I preferred to write stories related to cartoons, movies, etc.

'The stories' and 'the cartoons' are incorrect here; plural nouns without 'the' are appropriate. Also, 'I've preferred' is awkward; simple past 'I preferred' fits better.

× However, currently I would like to mostly write about my journals, which is.

✓ However, currently I would like to mostly write about my journals, which are personal.

'Journals' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. The sentence was incomplete, so 'which are personal' completes the thought.

× I have a mixed feeling so I pepper bot and writing and typing.

✓ I have mixed feelings, so I prefer both writing and typing.

'Pepper bot' is a mishearing or typo for 'prefer both'. 'A mixed feeling' should be plural 'mixed feelings'.

× I prefer the typing most because as I'm working in the optometric clinic so I have to write type more as compared with the handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing most because, as I work in an optometric clinic, I have to type more compared to handwriting.

'The typing' should be 'typing' without 'the'. 'Write type' is incorrect; 'type' alone is correct. 'Compared with' is better as 'compared to' or 'compared with' without 'as'.

× However, handwriting is also the essential part of my life to write the things such as a little stories share.

✓ However, handwriting is also an essential part of my life to write things such as little stories to share.

'The essential part' should be 'an essential part' because it is one of many parts. 'A little stories' is incorrect; 'little stories' without 'a' is correct. Added 'to share' for clarity.