Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在较多错误，导致意思不清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用简单明了的语言表达过去和现在的写作习惯。

예시: I don't write much nowadays because I am very busy. However, when I was in senior school, I enjoyed writing and used to write at least 200 words every day.

제안: 回答较为简单，表达有些不自然。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且增加连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: I like to write about my personal experiences. For example, when I watch a film that inspires me, I often write down my thoughts about it.

제안: 回答内容混乱，表达不清晰。建议先明确回答问题，然后用简单句子说明观点，避免使用不准确的词汇。

예시: I believe that my writing topics can change over time because my interests and experiences change. Therefore, what I write about is not always the same.

제안: 回答不连贯，语法错误较多，难以理解。建议直接回答问题，说明偏好并给出理由，使用简单清晰的句子。

예시: I prefer typing on my phone because it is faster and more convenient. However, if I have time, I like handwriting because it feels more personal.

× Nowadays I think I'm not very like writing because I'm too busy to write something before, especially when I mean when drivers in senior school I was very fun of.

✓ Nowadays I think I don't like writing very much because I was too busy to write before, especially when I was in senior school, I was very fond of it.

句中 'not very like writing' 用法错误，应该用 'don't like writing very much' 来表达不喜欢的程度；'too busy to write something before' 中 'something' 用法不当，应省略或改为 'to write before'；'drivers in senior school' 应为 'when I was in senior school'；'I was very fun of' 应为 'I was very fond of it'。这些都是量词和表达习惯的错误。

× Right, he and I can.

✓ Right, he and I could.

句中 'can' 用法不当，时态应与上下文一致，使用过去时 'could'；此外，句子不完整，需补充谓语。这里主要是代词和动词时态搭配错误。

× I could write every day for at least one, two, 200 words.

✓ I could write every day at least one or two hundred words.

数字表达不规范，'one, two, 200 words' 应改为 'one or two hundred words'，以正确表达数量。

× I like to write about myself.

✓ I like to write about myself.

此句无明显语法错误，符合语法规范。

× And for example, when I see a video of a film, a thing that will invoke my thoughts, I will write something about it.

✓ For example, when I see a video or a film that invokes my thoughts, I will write something about it.

句中 'a video of a film, a thing that will invoke my thoughts' 结构混乱，应简化为 'a video or a film that invokes my thoughts'，使代词和修饰语搭配正确。

× I think the only thing that's it cannot change is the changes itself.

✓ I think the only thing that cannot change is change itself.

'the changes itself' 用法错误，'changes' 应为不可数名词 'change'，且 'it' 多余，应去掉。

× I never limited my contacts of my writing.

✓ I never limit the content of my writing.

'contacts' 用词错误，应为 'content'；'limited' 时态不对，应为一般现在时 'limit'；'of my writing' 位置正确。

× So I'm almost to read everything I don't think.

✓ So I try to read almost everything. I don't think the content will change over days.

句子结构混乱，'I'm almost to read everything' 不合语法，应改为 'I try to read almost everything'；'I don't think' 后应有完整句子，补充为 'I don't think the content will change over days'。

× The context will change for days.

✓ The content will change over days.

'context' 应为 'content'，且介词 'for' 应改为 'over'，表示时间段。

× I think is we're recording the conditions when I just have my phones.

✓ I think when I'm recording, if I just have my phone with me,

句子结构混乱，'I think is we're recording the conditions' 不通顺，应改为 'I think when I'm recording'；'phones' 应为单数 'phone'；'just have my phones' 应为 'just have my phone with me'。

× Around myself, I will just to write these things on my phones.

✓ Around me, I will just write these things on my phone.

'Around myself' 用法错误，应为 'Around me'；'just to write' 应为 'just write'；'phones' 应为单数 'phone'。

× If I can write, I will. Write something. Hang the writing something.

✓ If I can write, I will write something, like handwriting something.

句子断裂且用词错误，'Hang the writing something' 无意义，应改为 'like handwriting something'，使表达完整且符合语法。