Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些重复且表达不够自然，比如“daily day mantis”应为“daily moments”，建议用更准确的词汇表达，并避免重复。可以简洁明了地说明你写作的内容和原因。

예시: Yes, I write quite often, especially to record my daily moments and the special memories with my boyfriend since we started dating.

제안: 回答中有些语法和表达不够准确，如“the romance I had with my boyfriend is those little stories”不通顺。建议用连贯的句子表达喜欢写的内容，并用连接词使回答更流畅。

예시: I like to write about my future plans because imagining the future motivates me. Also, I enjoy recording little stories about my relationship with my boyfriend, which makes those memories sweeter.

제안: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议用更简洁明确的句子表达观点，并避免模糊的比喻。

예시: No, I believe what I write remains unchanged because once something is written down, it becomes a permanent record.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，如“the type of. Writing I'm doing”。建议用完整句子表达偏好，并说明原因，使用连贯词汇。

예시: I prefer handwriting because it feels more comfortable and allows me to express my emotions better than typing.

× I really like to record my daily day mantis.

✓ I really like to record my daily diary.

原句中的'mantis'是错误的单词，应该是'diary'，表示日记。这里是词汇错误，不属于语法错误，但为了表达正确，进行了更正。

× I like to specially record the romance I had with my boyfriend since we only start dating.

✓ I like to specially record the romance I have had with my boyfriend since we started dating.

句中'start'应使用过去式'started'，因为描述的是从过去开始的动作，且'had'应改为现在完成时'have had'以表示从过去持续到现在的状态。

× What do you like to write?

✓ What do you like to write?

该句无语法错误，保持原句。

× The first thing I would like to write is the plans I made for the future.

✓ The first thing I would like to write is the plans I have made for the future.

'plans I made'应使用现在完成时'have made'，表示计划是到目前为止已经制定好的。

× And the second thing I would like to record is the romance I had with my boyfriend is those little stories.

✓ And the second thing I would like to record is the romance I have had with my boyfriend, those little stories.

同样，'had'应改为现在完成时'have had'，表示从过去持续到现在的状态。句中'is'多余，应去掉。

× No, I don't think the things I write would change because once it was written it stays the same forever and like some people stories it is black and white so it's done.

✓ No, I don't think the things I write would change because once they are written, they stay the same forever. Like some people's stories, they are black and white, so it's done.

'it was written'应改为被动语态'are written'，与主语'things'复数一致。'it stays'改为'they stay'，保持主谓一致。'people stories'应为'people's stories'，表示所有格。

× I actually prefer handwriting when I'm writing because I guess handwriting maybe feel much more comfortable and the type of.

✓ I actually prefer handwriting when I'm writing because I guess handwriting may feel much more comfortable and the type of writing I'm doing also can reflect my mood.

'maybe'应为情态动词'may'，表示可能性。句子末尾不完整，补充完整句子。

× Writing I'm doing also can reflect my mood.

✓ The writing I'm doing can also reflect my mood.

调整词序，使句子更自然流畅。