Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が少し不自然で、文法的な誤りや冗長な表現があります。例えば、「But I did」や「practice to write a lot」は不自然です。より自然で効果的な表現を使い、簡潔に答えることを心がけましょう。

예시: No, I don't write a lot currently, but I used to write more often. I think writing regularly is important, so I want to practice it more.

제안: 文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。理由を述べる際に、より明確で具体的な表現を使い、論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: I like writing essays because they allow me to express my thoughts freely. Creating my own stories makes me feel happy and excited.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で、文法的な誤りが多いです。意味をはっきり伝えるために、文を正しく構成し、具体的な理由を述べることが必要です。

예시: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time because my understanding, knowledge, and experiences will grow and influence my writing.

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現がありますが、意図は伝わります。より自然な表現を使い、理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: I prefer typing to handwriting because it's easier and faster. When I write by hand, I often have to erase mistakes, which is annoying.

× No, I don't write a lot. But I did.

✓ No, I don't write a lot. But I did write a lot before.

The sentence 'But I did.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'write a lot before' clarifies the past action. The past tense 'did' needs an accompanying verb to complete the meaning.

× So I would like to practice to write a lot.

✓ So I would like to practice writing a lot.

The verb 'practice' is followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive with 'to'. Therefore, 'practice writing' is correct.

× I love to write an essay be 'cause when I write an essay OK match it freely.

✓ I love to write essays because when I write an essay, I can express it freely.

The phrase 'be 'cause' should be 'because'. Also, 'OK match it freely' is unclear; replacing it with 'I can express it freely' makes the meaning clear and grammatically correct.

× So I can make my story by myself.

✓ So I can create my own story.

'Make my story by myself' is awkward; 'create my own story' is more natural and correct.

× It makes me feel free and happy and excited.

✓ It makes me feel free, happy, and excited.

Using 'and' repeatedly is redundant; commas and a single 'and' before the last item improve sentence flow.

× Yes, I fear.

✓ Yes, I fear so.

'I fear' is incomplete; adding 'so' completes the expression meaning 'I think so' or 'I believe so'.

× I believe that the things I write with change.

✓ I believe that the things I write will change.

The phrase 'write with change' is incorrect; 'will change' correctly expresses future change.

× Is because of my understanding, knowledge and experiences.

✓ It is because of my understanding, knowledge, and experiences.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'It' corrects the sentence structure.

× After I got many experiences or knowledge.

✓ After I gained much experience and knowledge.

'Got' is informal; 'gained' is more appropriate. 'Many experiences or knowledge' is awkward; 'much experience and knowledge' is better.

× I come.

✓ I have changed.

'I come' is incomplete and unclear. The intended meaning is likely that the writer has changed, so 'I have changed' is appropriate.

× I prefer typing rather than handwriting when my arm writing because it's easier than handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing rather than handwriting when I am writing because it's easier than handwriting.

'When my arm writing' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am writing' to indicate the action.

× When I write something by my hand, I need to erase many times.

✓ When I write something by hand, I need to erase many times.

'By my hand' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'by hand'.

× Is really annoying.

✓ It is really annoying.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'It' completes the sentence.