Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了基本意思，但句子结构较为混乱，存在语法错误，且内容略显冗长。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和语法的准确性。

예시: I used to write a lot when I was in primary and middle school. However, as I have grown older, I have become busy with my job and family, so I don't spend much time writing now.

제안: 回答内容较完整，但表达不够流畅，句子较长且有些重复。建议使用更简洁的句子，并适当使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: I like to keep a diary because it helps me record my daily life. Years later, I can look back and recall the sweet memories from the past.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题。建议注意句子结构，避免重复和不完整的表达，同时使用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Yes, when I was in primary school, I wrote my diary in Chinese to record my daily experiences. Now, I prefer writing in English and focus more on my feelings than just events.

제안: 回答中有语法错误，表达不完整且不够清晰。建议使用正确的词汇和句子结构，明确表达自己的观点，并给出具体理由。

예시: I prefer handwriting to typing because it feels more personal and unique to each individual.

× Well, to be honest, I used to write a lot when I was in primary school and middle school have ever since I'm getting older, I'm pretty preoccupied with other things, for example, my job, my family lives and I do not spend too much time in writing at present.

✓ Well, to be honest, I used to write a lot when I was in primary school and middle school, but ever since I've been getting older, I'm pretty preoccupied with other things, for example, my job and my family life, so I do not spend too much time writing at present.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词，导致句意不清。应使用连词“but”连接两个对比的部分，并且“family lives”应改为“family life”，表示家庭生活。还应去掉“in”使“spend time writing”表达正确。

× I do not spend too much time in writing at present.

✓ I do not spend too much time writing at present.

动词短语“spend time”后面直接跟动名词，不需要介词“in”。

× I like to keep a diary because I think keeping a diary can help me to take note of everyday life and years later than if I take out the diary and I can recall my sweet memories which happened a couple years ago.

✓ I like to keep a diary because I think keeping a diary can help me take note of everyday life, and years later, if I take out the diary, I can recall my sweet memories which happened a couple of years ago.

“help me to take note”中“to”可省略更自然；“years later than”应改为“years later,”，去掉“than”使表达正确；“a couple years”应为“a couple of years”，需要介词“of”。

× Yes, when I was in primary school, I used to write my diary in Chinese on the to record more about my daily experiences.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, I used to write my diary in Chinese to record more about my daily experiences.

“on the”多余且无意义，应删除。

× However, now I'd like to write it in English, but rather more about my feeling rather than the experiences.

✓ However, now I'd like to write it in English, focusing more on my feelings rather than the experiences.

“but rather more about my feeling rather than the experiences”结构不正确，应改为“focusing more on my feelings rather than the experiences”使句子通顺且表达清晰。

× I can recall my sweet memories which happened a couple years ago.

✓ I can recall my sweet memories which happened a couple of years ago.

“a couple”后面应加介词“of”来修饰复数名词。

× I prefer hands writing compared to typing because I think that is more personalized and different people.

✓ I prefer handwriting compared to typing because I think it is more personalized and unique to each person.

“hands writing”应为“handwriting”；“that”指代不明，应改为“it”；“different people”表达不清，应改为“unique to each person”更准确。