Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and ensure clarity. For example, instead of repeating 'used to', you can say 'I used to enjoy writing a lot when I had the chance.'

예시: Currently, my job doesn't require much writing. Since I completed my studies in 2022, I haven't had many opportunities to write, but I used to really enjoy it when I did.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and correcting minor errors. Also, try to expand slightly with more specific details to enrich your response.

예시: I enjoy writing personal journals and short stories because they allow me to reflect on my daily experiences and emotions. This helps me understand myself better and express my creativity.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use appropriate linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid mixing tenses and ensure subject-verb agreement.

예시: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time because as I gain more experience and knowledge, my writing style and ideas evolve. For example, when I was younger, my writing was simpler, but now I try to express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to structure your response clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid redundancy.

예시: I personally prefer handwriting because I enjoy the traditional method of writing on paper. I generally avoid typing and prefer to write my journals by hand, as it feels more personal and meaningful to me.

× Currently my job doesn't require or demands to write a lot.

✓ Currently my job doesn't require or demand me to write a lot.

The modal verb 'doesn't' requires the base form of the verb after it. 'Demands' is incorrect because it is the third person singular present form, but after 'doesn't' the verb should be in base form 'demand'. Also, 'demand to write' is awkward; 'demand me to write' or 'require me to write' is better.

× After then I usually don't get much chance to write, but when I used to, I used to love it a lot.

✓ After that, I usually didn't get much chance to write, but when I did, I used to love it a lot.

The phrase 'After then' is incorrect; 'After that' is appropriate. Also, 'usually don't get' conflicts with the past time frame; it should be 'usually didn't get'. The phrase 'when I used to' is repeated unnecessarily; 'when I did' suffices.

× I enjoy writing personal journals an short stories.

✓ I enjoy writing personal journals and short stories.

The word 'an' is incorrect before 'short stories'; it should be 'and' to connect the two items. This is a quantifier/connector error.

× Writing journals allow me to reflect on my daily experiences and emotions, which helps me understand myself better.

✓ Writing journals allows me to reflect on my daily experiences and emotions, which helps me understand myself better.

The subject 'Writing journals' is singular (gerund phrase), so the verb should be singular 'allows' instead of 'allow'.

× Yes, I'm believe the things I write with change overtime.

✓ Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time.

'I'm believe' is incorrect; 'I believe' is correct. Also, 'with change' is incorrect; 'will change' is appropriate to express future change. 'Overtime' should be two words 'over time'.

× For example, when I was younger my writing was simpler but now I tried express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

✓ For example, when I was younger my writing was simpler but now I try to express my thoughts more clearly and creatively.

The phrase 'now I tried' mixes past tense 'tried' with 'now' indicating present. It should be present tense 'try'. Also, 'try express' needs 'to' before the verb: 'try to express'.

× I personally prefer traditional writing method are used to love writing and I am profound of writing on the paper.

✓ I personally prefer the traditional writing method; I used to love writing and I am fond of writing on paper.

'Method' is singular and needs the definite article 'the'. 'Are used to love' is incorrect; it should be 'I used to love'. 'Profound of' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'fond of'. 'On the paper' is better as 'on paper'.

× I generally avoid typing and preferred the handwritten text and writing my journals on the paper.

✓ I generally avoid typing and prefer handwritten text and writing my journals on paper.

'Preferred' is past tense but conflicts with 'generally avoid' which is present tense; it should be 'prefer'. 'The handwritten text' is better as 'handwritten text' without 'the'. 'On the paper' should be 'on paper'.