Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了写作的兴趣，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: Yes, I write quite often because I enjoy it. Writing feels like a hobby to me, and I find the process very enjoyable.

제안: 回答内容不清晰，语法和词汇错误较多，表达不连贯。建议明确表达喜欢写日记的原因，并使用连词使句子更流畅。

예시: I like to write personal diaries because they help me keep track of my past experiences, which I find both funny and interesting.

제안: 回答中断且语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。建议用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词使内容更连贯。

예시: No, I don't think the things I write will change because writing is a lifelong hobby for me. Especially diaries. In the future, I might even write my personal biography.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，句子不完整。建议简化句子，避免重复，清晰表达偏好并说明原因。

예시: I prefer typing on a computer or phone because it is easier and more convenient than handwriting, which takes more time.

× Yes, I often write in my daily basis.

✓ Yes, I often write on a daily basis.

这里的介词使用错误，应该用'on a daily basis'表示“每天”，而不是'in my daily basis'。

× Actually I would like to say writing is like my hobby.

✓ Actually, I would like to say writing is like my hobby.

句首应加逗号以分隔状语，提升句子流畅度。

× Hobby is that of compulsory seen.

✓ Hobby is something compulsory to be seen.

原句结构混乱，表达不清，需调整为更通顺的表达。

× I quite enjoyed this process of writing.

✓ I quite enjoy this process of writing.

根据上下文，表达的是现在的喜好，应该用现在时态。

× Most of my time I like write my personal.

✓ Most of the time, I like to write my personal thoughts.

缺少冠词和动词不定式，且句子不完整，需补充完整表达。

× Bay leaves things.

✓ Daily life things.

原句词语错误，应为“daily life things”表示“日常生活的事情”。

× In, that's the cause.

✓ That's the reason.

原句中介词使用错误，且表达不清，改为更合适的表达。

× I like to say I prefer diary becauses I always can keep track of my past experience which is really funny and interesting.

✓ I like to say I prefer diaries because I can always keep track of my past experiences, which are really fun and interesting.

diary应为复数形式diaries，experience应为复数experiences，且because拼写错误。

× No, I don't think so. Does becauses I.

✓ No, I don't think so because I

句子中does用法错误，应使用because连接原因。

× Really can't get enough of it, is like my life long hobbies of writing.

✓ I really can't get enough of it; it is like my lifelong hobby of writing.

句子缺少主语和谓语，结构不完整，需补充完整。

× Especially the Diaries.

✓ Especially the diaries.

diaries不应大写，除非是专有名词。

× I think that maybe in the future I can create my personal biography.

✓ I think that maybe in the future I will create my personal biography.

表达未来计划时，使用will更合适。

× When I am writing, I preferred to use computer to complete my writing.

✓ When I am writing, I prefer to use a computer to complete my writing.

表达习惯时应使用一般现在时prefer，而非过去时preferred。

× I preferred to use computer to complete my writing.

✓ I prefer to use a computer to complete my writing.

computer前应加不定冠词a。

× It is quite obvious that is more easy, is much easier and convenient to use telephone or cell phone to complete my writing instead of handwriting, which is very time consuming and.

✓ It is quite obvious that it is easier and more convenient to use a telephone or cell phone to complete my writing instead of handwriting, which is very time-consuming.

more easy应改为easier，且句子缺少主语it，telephone前应加冠词a，time consuming应连写为time-consuming。