Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, tránh lặp từ và lỗi sai về từ vựng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối.

예시: Yes, I write quite a lot because I am a student. I spend most of my time writing lessons at school. Additionally, at home, I usually write in my diary and complete some assignments that I didn't finish at school.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời rõ ràng và dễ hiểu hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sau đó giải thích lý do với các chi tiết cụ thể và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối.

예시: I like writing in my diary because it allows me to reflect on my experiences and emotions. Moreover, reading my old entries helps me understand how much I have grown over time.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý. Bạn nên giải thích rõ hơn về lý do tại sao bạn nghĩ những điều bạn viết sẽ thay đổi.

예시: Yes, I think the things I write may change because when I write about an experience, I learn from it. So, if I face a similar situation again, I can handle it better.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần được tổ chức lại để rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trình bày rõ ràng sở thích của mình và lý do kèm theo các ví dụ cụ thể.

예시: I prefer both handwriting and typing. I use handwriting when I want to share personal stories because it feels more authentic. However, I use typing to communicate with my friends because it is faster and more convenient.

× I spent almost my time to writing lessons at school.

✓ I spent almost all my time writing lessons at school.

The verb 'spend' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) without 'to'. Also, 'almost my time' is incorrect; it should be 'almost all my time'.

× In addition, at home usually write the I usually write my diary and also spend some time to rise some listen that I don't finish at school.

✓ In addition, at home I usually write in my diary and also spend some time revising some lessons that I didn't finish at school.

The sentence has incorrect word order and word choice. 'Rise some listen' is incorrect; it should be 'revising some lessons'. Also, 'usually write the I usually write' is redundant and misplaced.

× Angel writing in my diary in search story because it's allowed me to reflect on my diary experience and emotion.

✓ I enjoy writing in my diary and short stories because it allows me to reflect on my experiences and emotions.

'Angel writing' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'I enjoy writing'. 'In search story' should be 'and short stories'. 'It's allowed me' should be 'it allows me'. Also, 'diary experience and emotion' should be pluralized and clarified.

× Reading help me understand myself better.

✓ Reading helps me understand myself better.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'Reading' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps'.

× At nationally looking back at my old entries over Lydia.

✓ Actually, looking back at my old entries over the years

The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words like 'nationally' and 'Lydia'. It should be rephrased for clarity.

× Let me see how much I have bro Inching.

✓ lets me see how much I have been improving.

'Bro Inching' is a mishearing or typo for 'been improving'. The sentence needs correction for meaning and grammar.

× Yes, I believe so because I think when I write something happened I can have more experience an when I have in this situation I will make this better.

✓ Yes, I believe so because I think when I write about something that happened, I can gain more experience, and when I am in this situation, I will handle it better.

Incorrect verb forms and missing words. 'Something happened' should be 'something that happened'. 'Have more experience an' is incomplete. 'Make this better' is vague; 'handle it better' is clearer.

× Ann Chang it maybe.

✓ It may change.

The sentence is unclear and likely a mishearing of 'It may change'.

× I refer both them because from my parents are my ring parents.

✓ I prefer both of them because my parents are my role models.

'Refer both them' should be 'prefer both of them'. 'My ring parents' is likely 'my role models'.

× I will use handwriting for share some story today because it can make more realistic but with far my friends I will use typing because it is small.

✓ I will use handwriting to share some stories today because it can make them more realistic, but with my friends, I will use typing because it is faster.

Incorrect prepositions and word choice: 'for share' should be 'to share'; 'make more realistic' needs an object; 'far my friends' should be 'with my friends'; 'it is small' likely means 'it is faster'.

× Is is more quickly and can.

✓ It is quicker and more convenient.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. It should be completed with appropriate adjectives and structure.