Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify meaning, correct grammar, remove redundancy, and give specific details. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid unrelated words and keep to 1–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love flowers, especially the roses in the small park near my condo. I visit that park several times a week to enjoy their colours and scent, which helps me relax after work.

제안: Use correct grammar and clearer word choice, make sentences concise, and add specific supporting details with linking words. Say who the person is and give one or two concrete examples of their behaviour.

예시: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She paints floral pictures and spends every weekend tending her garden, growing roses and tomatoes that make our home look colourful.

제안: Give a direct, concise answer then add a reason with linking words. Fix grammar and avoid fillers. Be specific about location and contrast.

예시: Not really. There are only a few flower beds in the small park near my condo because I live in a busy city area where most green spaces are trees and street planters.

제안: Good response: clear and relevant. Improve by replacing common phrases with slightly richer vocabulary and by giving a specific example or frequency. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I often photograph beautiful flowers I find, especially bright tulips in the park, and usually post the best shots on Instagram to share with friends.

제안: Be clearer and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct statement, then give examples and a reason using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary sounds.

예시: Yes, people often send flowers for special occasions like weddings and Valentine's Day. They use flowers to celebrate important events and to express affection or sympathy.

× I love flowers, especially the one I see in the park near my condo because my apartment doesn't space for pants.

✓ I love flowers, especially the ones I see in the park near my condo because my apartment doesn't have space for plants.

The student used singular 'the one' but refers to multiple flowers, so plural 'the ones' is correct (singular/plural mismatch). 'Doesn't space' is incorrect verb usage; 'doesn't have space' is required. 'Pants' is a wrong word; context requires 'plants'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and use appropriate verbs and vocabulary.

× I go there often to enjoy the colour and nice meal of the flower is literally up when I sat.

✓ I go there often to enjoy the colour and nice smell of the flowers, which are literally up when I sit.

Several problems: 'meal' is incorrect word; 'smell' fits context. 'Flower is' should agree in number with 'flowers' -> 'flowers are'. 'When I sat' uses past tense incorrectly for habitual present; use 'when I sit'. The relative clause needs 'which are' (present participle structure) to connect ideas.

× Yes, the one that is my mother.

✓ Yes, my mother does.

The phrase 'the one that is my mother' is an awkward pronoun/clause usage. A natural, concise response is 'my mother does' or 'Yes, my mother'. Suggestion: use simple pronouns or noun phrases instead of complex relative clauses in short answers.

× She love painting and cultivate flowers and vegetables.

✓ She loves painting and cultivates flowers and vegetables.

Subject 'She' requires third person singular verb forms with -s: 'loves' and 'cultivates'. Suggestion: add -s for verbs when subject is he/she/it in present simple.

× She spent a lot of time uh, to take in care of this actually in the big E weekends because gardeningly likes her and make our home umm, look.

✓ She spends a lot of time taking care of them, especially on weekends, because she likes gardening and it makes our home look nicer.

Original mixes past and present and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Spent' implies past, but context seems habitual -> use present 'spends'. 'To take in care of' is incorrect; use gerund 'taking care of'. 'Big E weekends' is unclear; likely 'on weekends'. 'Gardeningly likes her' is wrong order and form; correct to 'she likes gardening'. 'Make our home umm, look' needs subject 'it' and adjective 'nicer'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use gerunds after verbs like 'spend (time)'.

× Not, Oh no not really the flower only in the small park near my condo because uh, my apartment is located in the city so that the green area most seen are trees and the shops rather than flower bed.

✓ No, not really. The only flowers are in the small park near my condo because my apartment is located in the city, so the green areas you mostly see are trees and shops rather than flower beds.

Problems: singular 'the flower only' should be plural 'the only flowers'. Word order and articles need correction. 'Green area most seen are' is ungrammatical; use 'the green areas you mostly see are'. 'Flower bed' should be plural 'flower beds' to match general meaning. Suggestion: ensure noun number consistency and clearer word order.

× I usually take photos of particularly beautiful flowers when I see them, and I often share the picture on the social media to show them to my friends.

✓ I usually take photos of particularly beautiful flowers when I see them, and I often share the pictures on social media to show them to my friends.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'photos' and general habitual action. 'The social media' is incorrect article usage; use 'social media' without 'the'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and omit unnecessary articles with uncountable or proper nouns like 'social media'.

× Yes, most people in my country send flowers on special occasions such as wedding or Valentine's Day.

✓ Yes, most people in my country send flowers on special occasions such as weddings or Valentine's Day.

'Wedding' should be plural 'weddings' when speaking generally about occasions. Suggestion: use plural form for countable events when referring to them in general.

× People give power to celebrate important events. Also express their their feel for someone. Mm-hmm.

✓ People give flowers to celebrate important events and to express their feelings for someone.

'Give power' is wrong word choice; should be 'give flowers'. 'Express their their feel' has repetition and wrong noun: use 'express their feelings'. Also combine into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and avoid repetition.