Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中有语法和表达错误，例如“fragments”用词不当，且句子结构不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇表达感受，并保持句子简洁自然。

예시: Yes, I love flowers very much because their fragrance makes me feel happy and relaxed.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误，如“my mum's loves”应为“my mum loves”，句子结构不够流畅。建议简化句子并使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, my mum loves flowers a lot. She plants many different kinds at home, so when I come back from school, I can see beautiful flowers everywhere, which makes me very excited.

제안: 回答中时态使用不当，且句子结构不够连贯。建议使用正确时态并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, there are many kinds of flowers in the park near my house. For example, roses look so beautiful that I always feel pleased when I pass by them.

제안: 回答中存在多处语法错误和表达不清，如“source out”和“take out of my phones”。建议使用简单准确的表达，并注意时态和单复数。

예시: Yes, whenever I see beautiful flowers in the park, I take out my phone and take pictures to share with my friends because I love flowers very much.

제안: 回答中词汇使用错误，如“open some flowers”和“sense flower”，句子不通顺。建议使用正确的词汇和句型表达习俗。

예시: Yes, people often send flowers to each other on special occasions like birthdays or anniversaries to show their love and celebrate important days.

× I love flowers very much because they are so fragments where I smell them.

✓ I love flowers very much because they are so fragrant when I smell them.

这里使用了错误的词汇“fragments”，正确的词应该是“fragrant”，表示“芳香的”。这是形容词使用错误。

× my mum's loves flowers very much.

✓ my mum loves flowers very much.

“mum's”是“mum is”或“mum has”的缩写形式，这里不合适，应该直接用“my mum”。这是代词使用错误。

× She planned so many kinds of flowers in our home so as I went home from school I can see many kinds of flowers.

✓ She plants so many kinds of flowers in our home, so when I go home from school, I can see many kinds of flowers.

“planned”是过去式，语境应为现在习惯动作，应该用现在时“plants”；“so as”用法不当，改为“so when”；“went”应改为“go”；保持时态一致。

× So I will be very, very excited.

✓ So I am very, very excited.

这里描述的是习惯性或常态，应该用现在时态“am”，而不是将来时“will be”。

× there are so many kinds of flowers in the park near my house and like roses, when I pass them they look so beautiful that I was very pleased.

✓ There are so many kinds of flowers in the park near my house, like roses. When I pass them, they look so beautiful that I am very pleased.

句子结构混乱，缺少标点，时态不一致，“was”应改为“am”，因为描述的是现在的感受。

× Absolutely when I source out, absolutely when I saw some flowers in the park, I would take out of my phones and take some pictures of that and share the picture to my friend circle.

✓ Absolutely, when I go out, and when I see some flowers in the park, I take out my phone and take some pictures of them and share the pictures with my friend circle.

“source out”错误，应为“go out”；“saw”时态不对，应为“see”；“take out of my phones”错误，应为“take out my phone”；“share the picture to”应为“share the pictures with”；“that”指代不清，应为“them”。

× Yeah, they open some flowers to each other, like when we have birthdays or to make a day with someone we love, we may sense flower.

✓ Yeah, they give some flowers to each other, like when we have birthdays or to make a day special with someone we love, we may send flowers.

“open some flowers”错误，应为“give some flowers”；“sense flower”错误，应为“send flowers”；“to make a day”不完整，改为“to make a day special”。

× We may send flowers to them to celebrate some specific dates.

✓ We may send flowers to them to celebrate special occasions.

“specific dates”用词不自然，通常用“special occasions”更合适。