Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love flowers because they help me relax and feel comfortable. However, I often struggle to take care of them properly, which makes them die quickly. Therefore, I want to learn the skills needed to look after flowers better.

제안: Improve your answer by combining sentences to avoid choppiness and using linking words for coherence. Use correct grammar and provide more specific details to explain your friend's feelings.

예시: No, I don't know anyone who loves flowers. In fact, I have a friend who doesn't like them because she doesn't find flowers attractive or interesting.

제안: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to support your answer.

예시: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. My area has a variety of native plants, and there are also numerous flower shops in the city. Because of this, I believe flowers are quite common in my neighbourhood.

제안: Try to speak more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details about when and why you take photos of flowers.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I go for a walk. Whenever I see beautiful flowers or plants blooming, I like to capture their beauty with my camera.

제안: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of occasions when flowers are sent.

예시: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions. For example, flowers are commonly given on Mother's Day, Christmas, and birthdays. Women especially appreciate receiving flowers on these days.

× Yes I do flower makes me relax and feel comfortable.

✓ Yes I do. Flowers make me relax and feel comfortable.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the singular 'flower' when referring to flowers in general. The plural form 'flowers' is appropriate here because the speaker is talking about flowers in general, which is a plural concept.

× But me I easily withdraw, make them die.

✓ But I easily neglect them, which makes them die.

The phrase 'But me I' is incorrect; the subject pronoun 'I' should be used alone. Also, 'withdraw' is not the correct verb here; 'neglect' better expresses the intended meaning of not taking care of the flowers.

× I want I need to need a skill to take care.

✓ I want and need to learn the skills to take care of them.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The phrase 'I want I need to need a skill' is incorrect. It should be 'I want and need to learn the skills' to express the desire and necessity to acquire skills for flower care.

× No I don't, but I have a friend. Who doesn't like flowers Because.

✓ No, I don't, but I have a friend who doesn't like flowers because

The sentence is fragmented incorrectly. 'Who doesn't like flowers Because.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence.

× She doesn't feel anything attractive thing from flowers.

✓ She doesn't find anything attractive about flowers.

The phrase 'feel anything attractive thing' is incorrect. The verb 'find' is more appropriate for expressing perception, and 'about flowers' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Yes they are. Many native plants exist in my area and also a lot of flower shop shops that I see in the city.

✓ Yes, they are. Many native plants exist in my area and also a lot of flower shops that I see in the city.

The phrase 'flower shop shops' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'flower shops' to correctly indicate multiple shops.

× That's why I think there are a lot of flowers where I.

✓ That's why I think there are a lot of flowers where I live.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the verb 'live' to complete the thought.

× Yes I do especially I take when I take a walk.

✓ Yes, I do, especially when I take a walk.

The phrase 'especially I take when I take a walk' is awkward and redundant. It should be simplified to 'especially when I take a walk'.

× If there there are some beautiful flowers blooming or beautiful plants are there there I tend to take take photos every time and put.

✓ If there are some beautiful flowers blooming or beautiful plants, I tend to take photos every time and post them.

The sentence contains repeated words ('there there', 'take take') and is incomplete. Also, 'put' is vague; 'post them' clarifies the action of sharing photos.

× Yes we do, especially celebration days, for example Mother's Day, Christmas Day or even birthday.

✓ Yes, we do, especially on celebration days, for example, Mother's Day, Christmas Day, or even birthdays.

The preposition 'on' is required before 'celebration days' to indicate time. Also, 'birthday' should be pluralized to 'birthdays' to generalize the statement.

× Of course, if women's were the receiver, they will be very happy.

✓ Of course, if women were the receivers, they would be very happy.

The phrase 'women's' is possessive and incorrect here; it should be the plural noun 'women'. Also, 'receiver' should be plural 'receivers' to agree with 'women'. The conditional sentence requires 'would' instead of 'will' for hypothetical situations.