Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love flowers because they brighten up my home and their fragrance makes the atmosphere fresh. That's why I have planted many flowers in my garden to decorate the space.

제안: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and organize your ideas logically with linking words.

예시: Yes, my mother loves flowers as well. She enjoys their fragrance and uses colorful flowers to decorate our home and her workshop, which makes the place more pleasant.

제안: Your answer is somewhat long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, correct grammatical errors for better clarity.

예시: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. We have a community garden full of various flowers, and I enjoy seeing them spread across the area.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Avoid unnecessary repetition and explain your actions logically.

예시: I don't take photos of flowers every day, but when I see new and colorful varieties, I like to photograph them. Then, I often buy the same flowers to plant in my garden.

제안: Your answer has repetition and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct plural forms and avoid repeating words. Also, organize your ideas clearly with linking words.

예시: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on various occasions such as birthdays, birth ceremonies, and funerals. Flowers are commonly given as presents for these events.

× I love to being around flowers.

✓ I love to be around flowers.

The verb 'love' followed by 'to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. So, 'to be' is correct instead of 'to being'.

× I planted many flowers in my own home to decorate it and flower give the blooming smells which make people fresh.

✓ I planted many flowers in my own home to decorate it and flowers give the blooming smells which make people feel fresh.

The subject 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to agree with the verb 'give'. Also, 'make people fresh' is unnatural; 'make people feel fresh' is correct.

× So I love flower.

✓ So I love flowers.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the context of loving flowers in general.

× Yes, actually my mother love flowers too.

✓ Yes, actually my mother loves flowers too.

The verb 'love' must agree with the third person singular subject 'my mother', so it should be 'loves'.

× She likes the fragments which came from the flowers and she love the colorful flower flowers around my home to decorate it well and see love flower because it utilized in her workshop to the guard and for that reason she also loved the flowers.

✓ She likes the fragrance which comes from the flowers and she loves the colorful flowers around my home to decorate it well and she loves flowers because they are used in her workshop for decoration and for that reason she also loves flowers.

Multiple errors: 'fragments' should be 'fragrance'; verb agreement 'love' to 'loves'; 'flower flowers' is redundant, should be 'flowers'; 'see love flower' is unclear, corrected to 'she loves flowers'; 'it utilized' corrected to 'they are used'; 'to the guard' unclear, replaced with 'for decoration' for clarity.

× Yes, as I earlier mentioned also that there are a lot of flowers in my homes and in my community also we have a garden where we planted a lot of flowers and I genuinely like to see around having flowers all over the garden and areas.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned earlier, there are a lot of flowers in my home and in my community. We also have a garden where we have planted many flowers, and I genuinely like to see flowers all over the garden and surrounding areas.

Corrected 'homes' to singular 'home' for consistency; improved sentence structure for clarity; 'having flowers all over' changed to 'flowers all over' for natural phrasing.

× So I have we have a lot of flowers around.

✓ So, we have a lot of flowers around.

Removed redundant 'I have' and corrected sentence structure for clarity.

× Not daily, but whenever I see the new types of new varieties of flowers, which is literally so colorful and different than I see not as usual day.

✓ Not daily, but whenever I see new types or varieties of flowers that are literally so colorful and different from what I usually see.

Corrected sentence structure for clarity; 'which is' changed to 'that are' to agree with plural 'types or varieties'; 'different than' corrected to 'different from'; 'not as usual day' changed to 'what I usually see'.

× So then I started taking the pictures of flower and sweet to them a murder and started buying the same 1 and planted in our own home.

✓ So then I started taking pictures of flowers and sent them to a friend, and started buying the same ones to plant in our own home.

Corrected 'flower' to plural 'flowers'; 'sweet to them a murder' is unclear, replaced with 'sent them to a friend'; 'same 1' corrected to 'same ones'; improved sentence structure for clarity.

× Yes, in my country people people often send flowers in many occasions like in birthday, in birth ceremony, in death ceremony.

✓ Yes, in my country people often send flowers on many occasions like birthdays, birth ceremonies, and death ceremonies.

Corrected 'in many occasions' to 'on many occasions'; pluralized 'birthday', 'birth ceremony', and 'death ceremony' for generalization.

× Also we have to like in my countries people buy a flower and give it as a present.

✓ Also, in my country, people buy flowers and give them as presents.

Corrected 'we have to like in my countries' to 'in my country'; 'a flower' to plural 'flowers'; 'give it as a present' to 'give them as presents' for agreement.

× So for that reason in my country flowers are more utilized.

✓ So for that reason, flowers are widely used in my country.

'Replaced 'more utilized' with 'widely used' for natural expression; added comma for clarity.