Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons, linking ideas smoothly. Also, correct grammar errors such as 'which grown up by me' to 'that I have grown myself.'

예시: Yes, I love flowers because they beautifully express our feelings towards loved ones. Additionally, I enjoy their pleasant fragrance. I even grow some flowers myself at home, which gives me great satisfaction.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use correct pronouns and vocabulary ('fragrance' instead of 'fragments'). Provide complete sentences and examples. Also, clarify the occasions and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, my boyfriend really loves flowers. His favorite flower is the rose because of its beautiful colour and fragrance. I often give him roses on special occasions like his birthday and our anniversary.

제안: Use correct articles and plural forms ('a plenty' should be 'plenty', 'a gardens' should be 'gardens'). Avoid filler words like 'umm'. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, there are plenty of flowers in my neighbourhood. For example, many people have gardens in front of their homes, so I often see flowers growing here and there.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity. Use correct expressions like 'on a regular basis' and 'at certain times.' Replace 'please and fragments' with 'pleasant fragrance.' Also, avoid run-on sentences by breaking ideas into clear sentences.

예시: I don't take photos of flowers on a regular basis. However, I usually take pictures when I find a beautiful flower with my favourite colour and pleasant fragrance.

제안: Avoid repetition and filler words like 'umm.' Use clear and concise sentences. Provide specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, in my country, people often give flowers to their loved ones. For instance, when picking someone up at the airport, they usually bring flowers. Flowers are also commonly given on birthdays and anniversaries.

× I have some flowers at home which grown up by me.

✓ I have some flowers at home which are grown by me.

The phrase 'grown up by me' is incorrect because 'grown up' is a phrasal verb meaning to mature, not to cultivate plants. The correct passive form is 'are grown by me' to indicate that the flowers are cultivated by the speaker.

× His favorite flower is rose because of her because of the his color and fragments.

✓ His favorite flower is the rose because of its color and fragrance.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'her' and 'his' to refer to the rose, which is an object and should be referred to with the pronoun 'its'. Also, 'fragments' is a misspelling of 'fragrance'.

× Oh yes, there is a plenty of flowers near my neighborhood, as in the garden and umm everyone has a gardens at the front of their home too, so I used to see a lot of flowers here and there.

✓ Oh yes, there are plenty of flowers near my neighborhood, such as in the garden, and everyone has a garden at the front of their home too, so I see a lot of flowers here and there.

'There is a plenty of flowers' is incorrect because 'plenty' is quantifying a plural noun 'flowers', so the verb should be 'are'. Also, 'a gardens' is incorrect; 'garden' should be singular without 'a'.

× I don't take photos of flowers on regular basis, I usually prefer to take that on a certain times whenever I get any beautiful flower with my favorite color and please and fragments.

✓ I don't take photos of flowers on a regular basis; I usually prefer to take them at certain times whenever I find a beautiful flower with my favorite colour and fragrance.

The phrase 'on regular basis' needs the article 'a' to be correct. 'Take that' is incorrect; it should be 'take them' referring to photos. 'On a certain times' is incorrect; it should be 'at certain times'. 'Please and fragments' is incorrect and should be 'colour and fragrance'.

× Yes, in my country people prefer to give flowers to their loved ones as I see whenever they go to the airport to pick their loved one, they umm prefer to do give prefer to give flowers to them as well as on the birthdays and on the anniversary.

✓ Yes, in my country people prefer to give flowers to their loved ones. As I see, whenever they go to the airport to pick up their loved ones, they prefer to give flowers to them, as well as on birthdays and anniversaries.

The phrase 'pick their loved one' should be 'pick up their loved ones' because 'pick up' is the correct phrasal verb. 'On the birthdays and on the anniversary' should be 'on birthdays and anniversaries' without 'the' and in plural form to generalize. Also, the sentence structure was corrected for clarity.